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Sweetness

septolet competition

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Comment from Dean Kuch
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Nice use of alliterative phrasing with, "bloom brightly, so beautiful," in the last line of your first stanza, Anonymous Poet.
A nice combination of both enjambment coupled with alliteration in "to source
sweet nectar" also helps to paint the scene.
Excellent Septolet entry.
Good luck to you in the contest.
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~Dean


 Comment Written 16-Dec-2018

reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thank you-love the photo
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2018
    Thank you-love the photo
reply by Dean Kuch on 16-Dec-2018
    You are more than welcome, magic dragon.
    My pleasure,
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    ~Dean Kuch
Comment from Sugarray77
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I love this!! This is a cute entry for the Septolet prompt. You did a good job matching the two parts. Your use of sunshie and bees is a perfect fit. Well done.

All the best,

Melissa

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

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    Thank you
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Excellent imagery for the bee pollinating the fliers. The cartoon image is terrific: I like the bee carrying its honeypot.

and IMHO, 'Bee leaves' takes on two different meanings or nuance.

Fun poem

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

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Comment from Janice Canerdy
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Your septolet makes effective use of every syllable to describe
a lovely nature scene that is just what God created it to be.
The picture is the perfect enhancement.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A beautiful nature write and I loved the simple form bringing joy to your words, bees doing their thing, leaving the hive and the cycle continues, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written Septolet about the busy little bee that is always on the go to make that sweet honey we like to have inside our tea. Well said in the few words.

 Comment Written 15-Dec-2018

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Comment from donette1914
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very well written and i am so ready for spring
very heartfelt and very believable to touch one's heart
what an honor to read the words to make this come to life
I felt you have had so much talent
and you draw ones in
I really enjoyed this writing
i hope you do well in the contest
donette1914 dec 13th 2018

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2018

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This septolet, Sweetness, has the proper formatting and brings the two worlds of flora and flying insect together to help explain sex.

 Comment Written 14-Dec-2018

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    Thank you