The Crime Before Christmas
A Dynamic Duo, BOO ghost and Sally Law31 total reviews
Comment from LaRosa
What an unexpected Christmas story poem. It is so well written, rhyme and natural flowing read. All of it. You have a perfect rhythm and cadence and I enjoyed following it all the way through.
PS) the concept of 'BooGhost' caused me to remember a FanStorian that I used to read who went by the name. I've missed his cheerfulness. Do you know who he was?
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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What an unexpected Christmas story poem. It is so well written, rhyme and natural flowing read. All of it. You have a perfect rhythm and cadence and I enjoyed following it all the way through.
PS) the concept of 'BooGhost' caused me to remember a FanStorian that I used to read who went by the name. I've missed his cheerfulness. Do you know who he was?
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you again, for loving on me with kindness and appreciation. I am overwhelmed. Thank you so much. This was fun, as Boo pulled me into this at the last minute. All in good fun! I don?t remember Fanstonian, I am relatively new to the site. A great name, though.
All my Christmas best,
Sal xo
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just thought I'd check, you never know. I thought maybe he came back as a different on site name. Sad when we lose a writer and wonder what happened to him/her. But...glad you are here!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he this is a fun write Sally and I enjoyed your story ghostly story here! You need a good evidence kit to catch this slippery character, he he he, love Dolly x
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He he he this is a fun write Sally and I enjoyed your story ghostly story here! You need a good evidence kit to catch this slippery character, he he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and for laughing with me. This was a bit of a spoof and loads of fun. Boo pulled me into this yesterday. It?s good to laugh!
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment from Tootsie55
I wish I could have given this a SIX! I loved it. I hope you don't mind all my suggestions and spag pickups. I realize with your sight challenge these might be accidental...In this next suggestion for flow as I think you are wanting...Hoarfrost [was] quickly forming,
And a miss in this next...
My hands we(re) trembling
Another suggestion in next...[I] [h](H)eard his lamenting sounds,
[a member of FanStory](By a Fanstorian), he said.
And [as] as quick as a wink,
Suggestion for flow..."I('ll) [will] find your killer, dear Boo,
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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I wish I could have given this a SIX! I loved it. I hope you don't mind all my suggestions and spag pickups. I realize with your sight challenge these might be accidental...In this next suggestion for flow as I think you are wanting...Hoarfrost [was] quickly forming,
And a miss in this next...
My hands we(re) trembling
Another suggestion in next...[I] [h](H)eard his lamenting sounds,
[a member of FanStory](By a Fanstorian), he said.
And [as] as quick as a wink,
Suggestion for flow..."I('ll) [will] find your killer, dear Boo,
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for the review and many helpful critiques. I can tell you really read this. I wrote this very quickly as Boo just invited me to join him in this at the last minute. Thank you for the wonderful input. I have corrected the already. I am so glad you liked it!
All my very best,
Sal :+) :+) always two hugs, too!
Comment from country ranch writer
Poor ole friend boo ghost is going around without his head we must find it for him and put the case to rest do thou think he partner in crime done him in?
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Poor ole friend boo ghost is going around without his head we must find it for him and put the case to rest do thou think he partner in crime done him in?
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and insightful comments. Yes, Boo needed a friend. The verdict is still out as to who exactly did this. It could go to the top of FanStory. Yikes! !Spooky, indeed!
All my best to cheer you at Christmas!
Sal
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hum sure dean didn't have a hand in it hehe
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Quite possibly!
Comment from Sugarray77
Hey, Sally, this is a good and fun entry for the ..Very Scary Christmas contest prompt. You did a good job tell this in story form... that method kept me interested in your verse. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Hey, Sally, this is a good and fun entry for the ..Very Scary Christmas contest prompt. You did a good job tell this in story form... that method kept me interested in your verse. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, dear Melissa. Boo invited me to do this. I am not a horror writer and this was just a bit of a spoof. I am so glad you liked it. I appreciate the excellent review and the kind encouragement always!
Sally
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How funny! You and BooGhost have done a great job with your 'paired write' here for the contest!! :) ;) I love the fact that y'all took the classic and worked with that for a great story!! Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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How funny! You and BooGhost have done a great job with your 'paired write' here for the contest!! :) ;) I love the fact that y'all took the classic and worked with that for a great story!! Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! :)
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much Yvette! Boo is the scarier one. I have had enough real life horrors! This was fun and Boo stretches me to write poetry?my new frontier! So kind of you to stop by for a laugh!
All my best,
Sal
Comment from Gert sherwood
Ah Sally Law your scary Charisma entry for this contest is so good about Boo Ghost (a member here in Fanstory) of how he lost his head on Christmas is creepy that anyone has found head.
Gert
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Ah Sally Law your scary Charisma entry for this contest is so good about Boo Ghost (a member here in Fanstory) of how he lost his head on Christmas is creepy that anyone has found head.
Gert
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you for stoppimg by and for the kindest review. This is a bit of a spoof, as I am not a horror writer...at all. Boo always sends me a challenge. I,thought I would give it a try! All in scary, good fun!
All my best,
Sal
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You are welcome Sally Law.
Gert
Comment from jmshumate
Good job on this, a very creative Christmas story you have written. You have good ryhmes which flow nicely from beginning to end. Do you think it was someone from fanstory? Maybe a competitor in the contest ( haha) good job and thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Good job on this, a very creative Christmas story you have written. You have good ryhmes which flow nicely from beginning to end. Do you think it was someone from fanstory? Maybe a competitor in the contest ( haha) good job and thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and insightful comments. I must keep this under wraps but...could be someone here at FanStory. Stay tuned! I am glad you enjoyed my spoof on Christmas horror. Someome told me it was not scary enough! Losing ones head is not scary? Oh my! I just had to give this a swat!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from Donka Kristeva
A scary Christmas indeed! It surely entertains, and you have the rhyme flowing and the story getting scarier with every line. Justice must be brought to light!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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A scary Christmas indeed! It surely entertains, and you have the rhyme flowing and the story getting scarier with every line. Justice must be brought to light!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you Donka. I had someone tell me this was not scary at all. A ghost missing his head, murder by decapatation? If they want more, will the evening news do? I had to keep it a bit light because that is who I am, thus?this spoof. I am glad you enjoyed this.
All my best,
Sal xo
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written scary Christmas. When there is a crime that no one can see the best guy to call will be boo ghost who can go anywhere unseen. The one ghost catch the other ghost much easier.
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reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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A very well-written scary Christmas. When there is a crime that no one can see the best guy to call will be boo ghost who can go anywhere unseen. The one ghost catch the other ghost much easier.
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Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Thank you Sandra for you kind review. I know I am not a horror writer, but I had fun with it. I am glad you enjoyed it. I had to make it somewhat of a spoof.
All my best,
Sally
