Feelings on My Own Poetry
Contest entry28 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Very deserving of six stars!
Loss, remembrance, and a plea for what was ... 'poetry as an art' ... great flow of thoughts from beginning to end.
So descriptive, I felt the agony, crushed spirit and heartbreak.
Because it does seem that so few people really stop, observe, use all their senses to feel, see, touch and observe life and their surroundings, I especially loved, 'The details few would see, the poet found, then painted within words a grand display.'
I loved all the verses detailing the poet's remembrance, all the verses describing the attention, care, and passion the poet put into his writing ... shucks, I loved every verse of this beautifully written poem!
This is a GREAT contest entry, and I truly, truly, truly, truly wish you the very best :)
Gale
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Very deserving of six stars!
Loss, remembrance, and a plea for what was ... 'poetry as an art' ... great flow of thoughts from beginning to end.
So descriptive, I felt the agony, crushed spirit and heartbreak.
Because it does seem that so few people really stop, observe, use all their senses to feel, see, touch and observe life and their surroundings, I especially loved, 'The details few would see, the poet found, then painted within words a grand display.'
I loved all the verses detailing the poet's remembrance, all the verses describing the attention, care, and passion the poet put into his writing ... shucks, I loved every verse of this beautifully written poem!
This is a GREAT contest entry, and I truly, truly, truly, truly wish you the very best :)
Gale
Comment Written 30-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Gale. I'm glad you noticed all the work that actually went into this. There are times it does feel like this. No matter how much I invest, it all just ends up sounding the same and seemingly lacking in fulfillment. But there are times I still give it my all. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again. You made my night. Have a wonderful New Year.
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I truly thought this was the best of the bunch, and there were many excellent ones out there. You are very, very talented, and I thoroughly enjoy your writing!
Happy New Year to you! May the new year be filled with peace, good health, love, and blessings of all kinds.
Love & hugs,
Gale
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Feelings on His Own Poetry, is a well-crafted inspection of one's feelings about the craft of writing. The poem contains the meaningful message, sad, but hopeful, that people will turn again to the well-formed phrase and find meaning in poetry.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This poem, Feelings on His Own Poetry, is a well-crafted inspection of one's feelings about the craft of writing. The poem contains the meaningful message, sad, but hopeful, that people will turn again to the well-formed phrase and find meaning in poetry.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Bill. I'm glad you liked this sad piece.
Comment from Tootie
So well-written and I am highly impressed that the rhythm of it is perfect as I read it. Well done! One thing I would suggest is to change the word to "unfolds" at the end of the 6th stanza. Thank you so much for sharing. I really liked it. Blessings, Cathy
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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So well-written and I am highly impressed that the rhythm of it is perfect as I read it. Well done! One thing I would suggest is to change the word to "unfolds" at the end of the 6th stanza. Thank you so much for sharing. I really liked it. Blessings, Cathy
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and suggestion, Tootie. A couple people have mentioned adding the 's' to it. I'll give some more thought. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Sugarray77
I love this verse and think you have done a fantastic job. Your rhyming choices were spot on as the poem continues stanza after stanza. Well done on this superb poem.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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I love this verse and think you have done a fantastic job. Your rhyming choices were spot on as the poem continues stanza after stanza. Well done on this superb poem.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Sugarray. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Violet WolfChild
This is an excellent piece. I found it a bit heartbreaking, to lose ones desire to write, I can't even imagine. Personally, I think I'd go crazy. Writing is kind of my therapy. But, I truly enjoyed this piece, great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This is an excellent piece. I found it a bit heartbreaking, to lose ones desire to write, I can't even imagine. Personally, I think I'd go crazy. Writing is kind of my therapy. But, I truly enjoyed this piece, great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Violet. This was sort of a little pun, crafting a perfect iambic pentameter poem claiming to lose the want to write, lol. I doubt that could ever actually happen. Poetry's in my veins. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Michael Cahill, the contest's creator, asked for just words and you have certainly delivered on his request, Anonymous Poet.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with your entry.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Well, Michael Cahill, the contest's creator, asked for just words and you have certainly delivered on his request, Anonymous Poet.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with your entry.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Dean. Yeah, I figured I'd give this one a go. I seriously doubt it'll place but hey, I had fun with it. Have a good one, D.
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I think you have a very good chance of not only placing, but winning the whole shebang.
Good luck!
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No, it's missing rainbows and bunnies so it'll go down in flames. Lol. Thanks again, Dean.
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Oh, yeah...
You're right, heh-heh.
Don't forget the homeless and infants too.
~Dean
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Oh, I nearly forgot.
God...
Comment from LyndaS
I'm plopping a sixer on this, poet, for several reasons.
First.. Low and behold you adhered to the rules of this contest. Now whether the powers that be judge this to be true is another story.
Second... Yea though iambic meter be bludgeoned and left for dead on this site (though often with the approval of the judges) you have nailed it in every syllable in every line in every verse. Spectacular!
And third.... It is impossible to read this and not be immediately be transported to the weeping shores of your mind. The reviewer is right there on your island.
Well done poet! Fantastic entry. Good luck in this contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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I'm plopping a sixer on this, poet, for several reasons.
First.. Low and behold you adhered to the rules of this contest. Now whether the powers that be judge this to be true is another story.
Second... Yea though iambic meter be bludgeoned and left for dead on this site (though often with the approval of the judges) you have nailed it in every syllable in every line in every verse. Spectacular!
And third.... It is impossible to read this and not be immediately be transported to the weeping shores of your mind. The reviewer is right there on your island.
Well done poet! Fantastic entry. Good luck in this contest.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the fantastic review and the big sixer. Lynda. At least a couple people thought it worthy of a six after all the work I put into it. Yeah, it's a bit of downer but there's a lot of poetic value crafted into it. What can you do? I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Thank you again.
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Welcome back poet. The Princess Unicorn asked me to praise you and rebuke you for your absence. I told her I could do both with a sixer. : )
Comment from susand3022
And you know, my dear author, it didn't hit me until your last couple of stanzas, how well we slaughter our languages now. I was going to say, 'the English language' but I expect it's the same in each of them. Slang everywhere and all kinds of made-up words being made so popular they actually make it into the dictionary! The evolution of linguistics. Hahahahaha
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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And you know, my dear author, it didn't hit me until your last couple of stanzas, how well we slaughter our languages now. I was going to say, 'the English language' but I expect it's the same in each of them. Slang everywhere and all kinds of made-up words being made so popular they actually make it into the dictionary! The evolution of linguistics. Hahahahaha
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Susan. Might I ask, were you referring to some of the words in the piece? Yes, some crazy words do actually make it to the dictionary nowadays. I really appreciate the generous stars.
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No I wasn't, just words in general. :)
Comment from WryWriter
Ah, but the poet lives loud and clear in this wonderful poem. The emotion of the work brought into the heart of the reader. I especially liked:
"Remembering the beauty so sublime,
each waking breath held treasures meant to scribe.
Too easily the world at will would rhyme,
and all the woes of burdens would subside."
One suggestion for your consideration:
the budding of a rose as it unfold(s)
Enjoyed this very much!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Ah, but the poet lives loud and clear in this wonderful poem. The emotion of the work brought into the heart of the reader. I especially liked:
"Remembering the beauty so sublime,
each waking breath held treasures meant to scribe.
Too easily the world at will would rhyme,
and all the woes of burdens would subside."
One suggestion for your consideration:
the budding of a rose as it unfold(s)
Enjoyed this very much!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the great review, Wry W. I'm still giving thought to adding the 's.' A couple people have mentioned it already. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent double sonnet poem reflecting both writters block of which i still suffering from and just endless ideas from love and war, goos and evil.
I love rmthis stanza...
Like shards of splintered glass beneath the skin,
the wounds too often scar a yearning heart.
Now sadness is a veil that covers him,
when poetry's no longer viewed as art.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Hi
This is an excellent double sonnet poem reflecting both writters block of which i still suffering from and just endless ideas from love and war, goos and evil.
I love rmthis stanza...
Like shards of splintered glass beneath the skin,
the wounds too often scar a yearning heart.
Now sadness is a veil that covers him,
when poetry's no longer viewed as art.
Great job and good luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Tia. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked the piece.
