As the Minutes Turn to Hours...
Tyburn4 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I think you did a great job. By the time I had finished my Tyburn, the contest deadline was over (lol).
I think your last verse only has 8 syllables. 'Hours' sounds like it is two syllables when we say it. I had to look 'hours' up in the dictionary, and the dictionary states that 'hours' is one syllable. This is not a criticism at all. I would likely have made the same mistake.
Love the artwork you chose. It is the perfect illustration for your poem, and I can truly relate.
I really love the effort in this poem, and the statement, as well.
Blessings to you!
Gale
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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I think you did a great job. By the time I had finished my Tyburn, the contest deadline was over (lol).
I think your last verse only has 8 syllables. 'Hours' sounds like it is two syllables when we say it. I had to look 'hours' up in the dictionary, and the dictionary states that 'hours' is one syllable. This is not a criticism at all. I would likely have made the same mistake.
Love the artwork you chose. It is the perfect illustration for your poem, and I can truly relate.
I really love the effort in this poem, and the statement, as well.
Blessings to you!
Gale
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2018
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Thank s so much for a great review! AND for catching that :) you are completely right ;)
Comment from rama devi
Second review
Good job! Fixed!
First review (THREE STARS)
So sorry for the lower rating but this does not fit the form...as it has to have four lines of two syllables preceding the closing couplet. I suggest revision before this hits the voting booth. Unless you made it intentionally not fit the form rules for the contest as a satirical example of a 'losing prompt'? The rhymes are superb, by the way. This has potential. Please edit!
Warmly,
rd
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Second review
Good job! Fixed!
First review (THREE STARS)
So sorry for the lower rating but this does not fit the form...as it has to have four lines of two syllables preceding the closing couplet. I suggest revision before this hits the voting booth. Unless you made it intentionally not fit the form rules for the contest as a satirical example of a 'losing prompt'? The rhymes are superb, by the way. This has potential. Please edit!
Warmly,
rd
Comment Written 12-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Rama looked and hon stlybi cant figure out the problem. Please explain?
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Oh no! The dumb Advanced Editor does not work on my iPad so I have to go back and forth! I saved under Basic accidentally and it pushed through! I completely get it. It was just a technical error but My fault! I corrected it. Does it follow now? I hope so. Ugh, what a pain. THANK YOU for catching that and being such a good reviewer. I wish I could nominate you.
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Yes--it works fine now. Thanks for your gracious response. Upgrading...good luck!
Warmly, rd
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Hi! Thank you again! You don't have to upgrade but I'd be honored as I hope the rating won't dissuade people from voting. But I understand either way! :)
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Already done! :)
Comment from visionary1234
OMG yr pic is almost as priceless as your Tyburn! You know 'the Tyburn Tree' was the hanging tree, right??? Love your witty 'choosing losing prompts'! Thx for bring me a chuckle tonight just as I'm about to embark upon a heavy edit and deconstruction of my new show, Greg! A well deserved 6 :):):)Sharyn
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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OMG yr pic is almost as priceless as your Tyburn! You know 'the Tyburn Tree' was the hanging tree, right??? Love your witty 'choosing losing prompts'! Thx for bring me a chuckle tonight just as I'm about to embark upon a heavy edit and deconstruction of my new show, Greg! A well deserved 6 :):):)Sharyn
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Hey! You're awesome thanks. Someone that hasn't posted anything gave it a Four, so it dropped it. Lovely. But THANK YOU!! Actually I'm glad you liked it haha as I said, it took too long. Literally almost an hour on this.
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HOW annoying!!!!
Comment from Lisa Heath
This is an interesting poetry writing concept! The reviewer liked the way the words rhymed, blended and were worded together to complete the poem. Lisa Heath
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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This is an interesting poetry writing concept! The reviewer liked the way the words rhymed, blended and were worded together to complete the poem. Lisa Heath
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2018
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Thank you Lisa. I don't care bc it's just a blind prompt but YOUR review just bumped down the SIX someone else just gave. REMEMBER please to give constructive criticism if you give anything less than a Five.
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Okay now I must say something. It appears you are new here. Please go back and adjust to a FIVE so that the other is not discounted. If you do not post anything of your own, do you think it's really fair to judge someone else? No less to DROP their score? Please review again.