Family Ties Volume two.
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4 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
This is awesome, I have grandchildren and I can see this happening. I really like "I'm telling mother."
I am sure families will enjoy reading it.
Try taking three screaming children home from school.
Good luck with your stories.
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This is awesome, I have grandchildren and I can see this happening. I really like "I'm telling mother."
I am sure families will enjoy reading it.
Try taking three screaming children home from school.
Good luck with your stories.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from tfawcus
Great storytelling here. The dialogue is so believable and I can just imagine the situation and the way it made you feel at the time. A good entry to the contest.
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Great storytelling here. The dialogue is so believable and I can just imagine the situation and the way it made you feel at the time. A good entry to the contest.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from fm wright
Definitely an interesting childhood. The writing flowed smoothly and kept on topic. I saw no errors in punctuation. It held my interest and I especially like you ending with the same lines you started. A very enjoyable read! I wish you the best with this entry!
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Definitely an interesting childhood. The writing flowed smoothly and kept on topic. I saw no errors in punctuation. It held my interest and I especially like you ending with the same lines you started. A very enjoyable read! I wish you the best with this entry!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
Comment from Sugarray77
This is soooo good. Siblings are a divine gift from God and you story about your sister is priceless.... it recalls so many of my own stories.... Thanks for a very delightful read!!
Melissa
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This is soooo good. Siblings are a divine gift from God and you story about your sister is priceless.... it recalls so many of my own stories.... Thanks for a very delightful read!!
Melissa
Comment Written 13-Dec-2018
