Drive With Care
5-7-5 Writing Prompt Entry9 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Good use of the picture to illustrate your poem using the metaphor of a highway for life and the possible turns we can make. I like your increasing fonts to match the perspective of near to distant roads.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2018
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Good use of the picture to illustrate your poem using the metaphor of a highway for life and the possible turns we can make. I like your increasing fonts to match the perspective of near to distant roads.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2018
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Thanx for the quick read and review, Helen -- always so much appreciated!! :) ;) You be sure to take care and have a great weekend! ;) Yvette
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked this clever play on words and so wise and poignant too, a voice guiding us here and I wish you luck with the contest, few words with great returns, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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I liked this clever play on words and so wise and poignant too, a voice guiding us here and I wish you luck with the contest, few words with great returns, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When we drive our cars we surely have to drive with care and get safely at our destination and back home again, takes a lot of skill and patience.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. When we drive our cars we surely have to drive with care and get safely at our destination and back home again, takes a lot of skill and patience.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from pome lover
well said, and good advice.
a creative way of expressing your message.
and you'r right.
recognize the things worth doing. again.
good job.
pome lover
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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well said, and good advice.
a creative way of expressing your message.
and you'r right.
recognize the things worth doing. again.
good job.
pome lover
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from rama devi
Good metaphor, well portrayed in this fine 5-7-5 poem. Good presentation. Great message. Personally, I found it distracting to have the quote marks around returns...works fine without them. Just my two cents.
Further, I thought repeating the word SOME twice in a three-liner is not optimal. Perhaps replace the second one with an alternative? Maybe ALL instead of SOME? Just a thought!
I like the subtle alliteration of E.
I love how you slowly increased the font sizer for a crescendo effect.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best Wishes,
rd
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Good metaphor, well portrayed in this fine 5-7-5 poem. Good presentation. Great message. Personally, I found it distracting to have the quote marks around returns...works fine without them. Just my two cents.
Further, I thought repeating the word SOME twice in a three-liner is not optimal. Perhaps replace the second one with an alternative? Maybe ALL instead of SOME? Just a thought!
I like the subtle alliteration of E.
I love how you slowly increased the font sizer for a crescendo effect.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best Wishes,
rd
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from donette1914
very nice
very creative and interesting and you have a lot of talent
you know how to draw ones in
i hope for the best in the contest
very nice photo
thank you for sharing it was an honor to read your work
donette1914 dec 5 2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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very nice
very creative and interesting and you have a lot of talent
you know how to draw ones in
i hope for the best in the contest
very nice photo
thank you for sharing it was an honor to read your work
donette1914 dec 5 2018
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Really good suggestion author with your Writing Prompt for the 5-7-5 contest saying that be happy when you take the right highway in life , but not all exists where one can return. Gert
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Really good suggestion author with your Writing Prompt for the 5-7-5 contest saying that be happy when you take the right highway in life , but not all exists where one can return. Gert
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review -- much appreciated! :)
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You are welcome author Gert
Comment from Mark D. R.
cute image that complements your 5-7-5 verse!
there always bumps on the road, but depending on how you view them you can enjoy others.
Google the "Welcome to Holland" story/speech to contrast with your verse. Some choices we really have no control over.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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cute image that complements your 5-7-5 verse!
there always bumps on the road, but depending on how you view them you can enjoy others.
Google the "Welcome to Holland" story/speech to contrast with your verse. Some choices we really have no control over.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Thanx so much for the read and review, Mark! :) Have a great night! :)
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem makes effective use of every syllable to convey its
theme: If we never veer from the path we're following, we will
never know what we're missing.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Your poem makes effective use of every syllable to convey its
theme: If we never veer from the path we're following, we will
never know what we're missing.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Thanx so much for the read and review, Janice! :) Have a great night! :)
