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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from country ranch writer
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Maybe the kitten can break the ice for them she is hesitant as which direction to take with this. She is feeling emotions now she cant explain.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 08-Dec-2018
    She sure is. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by country ranch writer on 08-Dec-2018
    Smiles
Comment from SLMorrical
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This is good. Men trying to figure out women. Why do they always wait to see what we do first? This is very good. All your writing is great. It flows very well with the previous chapter. You have done it again.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
    I figured it was pretty realistic, at least at my house. LOL Thank you for the kind support.
Comment from Sefiros
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A whole lot of drama. It's almost like a '90s sitcom. I see you've engaged in another "will he, won't she" kind of phase in the relationship. I realize that you have to draw the relationship in stages: first hug, first kiss, first cuddle, etc. The problem is you have to balance the awkwardness with actual signs of affection. Otherwise, when you finally do reach the climax, it will be stiff and rushed. Good job with the chapter. I look forward to the next installment.

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
    Thank you for the kind review. I don't the boy meets girl and they jump into bed. I like to actually build the relationship.
Comment from tfawcus
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This continues to flow well and hold interest. The dialogue is good and the action tags are well considered.

Maybe an Egyptian name for the cat? Isis or Osiris, perhaps? ...Toots (Tutankhamen)

It sounds as though Shana is about to initiate that kind of conversation that a man doesn't much want to hear!

 Comment Written 05-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
    I will research your suggestions. I am right now at a total loss. I appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from rtobaygo
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Good morning, Barbara

Enjoyed the continuation. Virtual six. Loved the banter between the characters, especially between Shana and Anderson having the short debate regarding the milk's temperature.

Excellent hook with the last three lines --

As she warmed the bottle, Anderson touched her arm. "We need to talk."

"I already know what you're going to say. What you want can't happen."

"Please explain why not.

Well done!

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
    Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the encouraging words.
Comment from Ben Colder
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Barb, I have enjoyed your friendship and your stories, but life gives us many challenges. Writing antebellum stories has been a passion for me however, it is time to say adios. I am closing my account with this site. Thanks you for sharing all of the wonderful comments about my stories, it has been quiet a party. It is time for me to move on and if any inquire my absence, tell them old writers never die they just run out of ink.
My blessings to you and your family. You have been a dear friend.
Merry Christmas.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
    I am truly going to miss your love and support. Please take care.
Comment from apky
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Now, I must confess I was totally at a loss in this latest should-I, should-I-not between Shana and Drew. I read the post three times but still failed to connect the dots. So, as a reader I'm feeling sort of left out.

What happened after Shana's tears, following the conversation with Emily, that I missed to get? I feel totally stupid here, lol!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Shana has feelings for Emily and Drew and the conversation with Emily brought those feelings to the surface. Thank you for the kind review. I'll rework that area.
Comment from robyn corum
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Barbara,

Isn't it funny the things you find out when you're writing a novel? I would never have known that about the cat. *smile* I imagine some kind soul here revealed that to you?

Nice chapter. Looks good to me!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    It was and I researched it and they were correct. I need to change the name. Any ideas? LOL Thank you for reading.
reply by Anonymous Member on 04-Dec-2018
    Israel. Isaac, Jacob, Benjamin was the 'Son of Encouragement' though that was in the New Testament, and I don't think they believe in that, do they -- so scratch that, Ezra, Abraham, Ezekiel, Job -- but then, you may not be looking for Biblical names...

    Hang on
reply by robyn corum on 04-Dec-2018
    Israel. Isaac, Jacob, Benjamin was the 'Son of Encouragement' though that was in the New Testament, and I don't think they believe in that, do they -- so scratch that, Ezra, Abraham, Ezekiel, Job -- but then, you may not be looking for Biblical names...

    Hang on
reply by Anonymous Member on 04-Dec-2018
    https://www.kveller.com/jewish-baby-name-finder/
    (a little hard to get around)

    https://reformjudaism.org/babyname-search

reply by robyn corum on 04-Dec-2018
    https://www.kveller.com/jewish-baby-name-finder/
    (a little hard to get around)

    https://reformjudaism.org/babyname-search

Comment from Kelly Hanna
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I love that you include a character list in all of these posts. I really enjoy reading Anderson and Shana's story. It seems like she is hesitant to give her heart and he is intent on receiving it. A timeless tale! I love the idea that drew is a billionaire who for once cannot have what he wants. A great story! Keep them coming!

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Drew has met his match. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from barkingdog
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Her emotions opened up, and she had to run for cover. Maybe, this is the beginning of her showing her feelings for Anderson.
I wondered about the kitten's name and then you clarified the need to change it. Loving a pet can bring a person out of their shell.

:) ellen

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Sure can. I have no clue what I'm going to change the name to, but it will be done. Thank you for the kind review.