scattered and torn
a lost love poem3 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Snyder
This is excellent. I love the story. I love the rhyming pattern. I like the words used throughout. I feel the depth and pain that is involved and there is twinge of humor here. Probably because I am so distant from something that has tones of this. The artwork is stunning. I think it was a beautiful choice. Good luck in the contest. You're my pick. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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This is excellent. I love the story. I love the rhyming pattern. I like the words used throughout. I feel the depth and pain that is involved and there is twinge of humor here. Probably because I am so distant from something that has tones of this. The artwork is stunning. I think it was a beautiful choice. Good luck in the contest. You're my pick. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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Thanks for the encouraging review Fonda. The love might remain, but our reaction to it, is now forever changed.. Shame. Have a great day, judester
Comment from Debbie Pope
Wow! What an excellent response to that prompt. You answer it beautifully in your last stanza. "Scorn" is a great word. The emotional response of scorn shows that the "broken hearted one" is strong and on his way to recovery. This person is not moved by those tears of apology. Good for him. Her cute giggle now grates. Bravo.
This is the way I wish all love could flow--easy come, easy go. There is too much coming and going in love to let it ruin your life.
I'm tired of love-sick poems. This narrator is strong, inspirational even.
Good, good job.
Good luck in the contest. I like this one.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Wow! What an excellent response to that prompt. You answer it beautifully in your last stanza. "Scorn" is a great word. The emotional response of scorn shows that the "broken hearted one" is strong and on his way to recovery. This person is not moved by those tears of apology. Good for him. Her cute giggle now grates. Bravo.
This is the way I wish all love could flow--easy come, easy go. There is too much coming and going in love to let it ruin your life.
I'm tired of love-sick poems. This narrator is strong, inspirational even.
Good, good job.
Good luck in the contest. I like this one.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Thanks for this insightful review Debbie, yes I find after a while I can almost guess the next line of a love poem. Wish life was that predictable. There are only so many variations we can take on love, autumn foliage and sunsets/sunrise. One reviewer mentioned losing friends and family because of break-ups and that's a shame. Have a wonderful Sunday, judester.
Comment from Rickie1
Cute little poem telling a not so cute story, unfaithfulness. I can so relate to this. Forty two years ago my first wife cheated on me and we divorced. I still have no desire to see her and if she was in the room I would stay on the other side. The sad part is I miss here family but didn't keep in contact so our paths wouldn't cross. Nice job.
Rickie
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Cute little poem telling a not so cute story, unfaithfulness. I can so relate to this. Forty two years ago my first wife cheated on me and we divorced. I still have no desire to see her and if she was in the room I would stay on the other side. The sad part is I miss here family but didn't keep in contact so our paths wouldn't cross. Nice job.
Rickie
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
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Thanks for your insightful, personal review. Yes, no matter how strong love can be, without trust, it dissolves. Sad that others have to pay the price for one person's indiscretions. Have a wonderful Sunday, cheers, j
