Angelic Work of Art
There's more than meets the eye...22 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your supernatural fiction, Yvette! But it is under biographical fiction so did part of this happen? Some well done pictures do seem to activate our imagination so we feel we are in the picture.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
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Enjoyed your supernatural fiction, Yvette! But it is under biographical fiction so did part of this happen? Some well done pictures do seem to activate our imagination so we feel we are in the picture.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping in, Helen -- don't know how it had 'biographical' flipped as I was pretty sure I had selected 'fantasy', but I did go back and correct it. :) Glad you enjoyed the right -- always appreciate your input! :) ;)
Comment from humpwhistle
I like your story. It's well-written. I feel the rich patron was written a bit stereotypically.
And while I like that you featured a wounded warrior, I'm a little uncomfortable with his angelic portrayal. Perhaps I'm being too sensitive.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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I like your story. It's well-written. I feel the rich patron was written a bit stereotypically.
And while I like that you featured a wounded warrior, I'm a little uncomfortable with his angelic portrayal. Perhaps I'm being too sensitive.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from meeshu
that is great Twilight Zone material, there. the writing is so fluid, that is a gift. if you could send what your thinking for scary Christmas, it will trigger something. my trouble is I like Christmas too much to make it scary. sorry so lame, Yvette..
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
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that is great Twilight Zone material, there. the writing is so fluid, that is a gift. if you could send what your thinking for scary Christmas, it will trigger something. my trouble is I like Christmas too much to make it scary. sorry so lame, Yvette..
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
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Thanx for the read and review...glad you think it read smoothly - I always worry on these short, LIMITED writes! :) ;) :)
Like I said, I allotted time this weekend .... as a starter, did we FINALLY decide on Frosty or is it okay to go another way...? I just can't remember (Thanxgiving and all the family stuff threw me off) and then this lame message app deletes things 'forever' (literally) and there is no 'search' for reviews...and, I'm sure you don't want to hear my nerdy tech gripes - sorry!! Just let me know about direction - whichever is cool, just need a 'pointer' for the brain! :) ;)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo, Yvette! Brilliant! Love it. He can't sell the painting because it's how he escapes from his hard life now and then. How very clever! I hope you win the contest! :)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Bravo, Yvette! Brilliant! Love it. He can't sell the painting because it's how he escapes from his hard life now and then. How very clever! I hope you win the contest! :)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Oh, Phyllis - thank you-thank you-thank you, ma'am!!! :) ;) You have really made me smile and I am so honored with those stars!! :) ;) As with almost all of my 'writes', both Colin and his Miriam stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper -- think that's why I can't do 'horror' too well...it gets too real, you know?! :) ;) Anyway, thank you for your wonderful confirmation that I 'did' the two of them 'right'! ;) ;) Take care and have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own (maybe we can usher in Spring a bit earlier since Winter sure hurried itself in here, right?)!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Mastery
Bravo, Yvette! This is some great writing. I wish I had saved a six for it. It is cohesive, paced well and the dialogue is exceptionally realistic. Very good and you will have my vote in the contest if they are posting it in the booth. You should write more prose, my friend. Happy Holidays. Bob
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Bravo, Yvette! This is some great writing. I wish I had saved a six for it. It is cohesive, paced well and the dialogue is exceptionally realistic. Very good and you will have my vote in the contest if they are posting it in the booth. You should write more prose, my friend. Happy Holidays. Bob
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Oh, Bob - just your words are enough to make me smile -- you have no idea how much they mean!!! :) ;) As with almost all of my 'writes', both Colin and his Miriam stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper! :) ;) Thank you for your wonderful confirmation that I did them 'right'! ;) ;) Have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
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:) Bless you, my friend. Bob
ps. Have you had a chance to peek at Santa's Diary?
Comment from Mrs. KT
Oh my goodness, Yvette!
This piece of Flash Fiction is priceless. I am particularly appreciative as to how you introduce the character of Colin to the reader in this paragraph: "Yes, he had painted all of them himself. No, the wheelchair did not hinder his abilities to reach his canvas. Yes, he'd been paralyzed from the waist down in Afghanistan over a decade ago." This bit of writing is masterful.
And then, there is the ending: I didn't see that coming! What a creative turn of events!
How I wish I had six stars to wend their way to you! So deserving.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Oh my goodness, Yvette!
This piece of Flash Fiction is priceless. I am particularly appreciative as to how you introduce the character of Colin to the reader in this paragraph: "Yes, he had painted all of them himself. No, the wheelchair did not hinder his abilities to reach his canvas. Yes, he'd been paralyzed from the waist down in Afghanistan over a decade ago." This bit of writing is masterful.
And then, there is the ending: I didn't see that coming! What a creative turn of events!
How I wish I had six stars to wend their way to you! So deserving.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Oh, Diane - just your words are enough to make me smile, ma'am!!! :) ;) As with almost all of my 'writes', both Colin and his Miriam stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper! :) ;) Thank you for your wonderful confirmation that I did them 'right'! ;) ;) Have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own (even if it is up there in Michigan -- I mean, what are dreams for anyway, right?)!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from poetwatch
Ok Yvette you is a writer and I'm happy to know that we have a contest to win. I wish you the best in this 500 Flash Fiction Contest. You write a very good write. I see myself behind you because I think you write what the club members want to hear... something wonderful and very sweet. A very good entry for the Flash Fiction Writing Contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Ok Yvette you is a writer and I'm happy to know that we have a contest to win. I wish you the best in this 500 Flash Fiction Contest. You write a very good write. I see myself behind you because I think you write what the club members want to hear... something wonderful and very sweet. A very good entry for the Flash Fiction Writing Contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Appreciate the read and review. Have a good weekend! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww! That was incredibly beautiful! It made me go all goose-pimply. I love the way you wrote this, I was standing there with the lady and wistfully looking at that lovely picture. Your writing is superb, and this is an extremely wonderful Flash Fiction entry, and I'd be very surprised if it didn't win. Well done, I'm so pleased to have read it. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Aww! That was incredibly beautiful! It made me go all goose-pimply. I love the way you wrote this, I was standing there with the lady and wistfully looking at that lovely picture. Your writing is superb, and this is an extremely wonderful Flash Fiction entry, and I'd be very surprised if it didn't win. Well done, I'm so pleased to have read it. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Oh, I am so very pleased that you enjoyed it, Sandra!! :) ;) As with almost all of my 'writes', both Colin and his Miriam stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper! :) ;) Thank you for your wonderful confirmation that I did them 'right'! ;) ;) Have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own, ma'am!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Rob Caudle
This was very well done. I admire anyone who can tell a complete story in 500 words or less let alone a beautiful and moving piece like the one you have penned. I think this a real contender thanks for a delightful read,
Rob
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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This was very well done. I admire anyone who can tell a complete story in 500 words or less let alone a beautiful and moving piece like the one you have penned. I think this a real contender thanks for a delightful read,
Rob
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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So good of you to stop by for the read and review, Rob -- always appreciate the time it takes on the stories...thank you for that!! :) And I am so very glad you enjoyed my Colin and his angelic Miriam -- they both stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper! :) ;) Don't be a stranger and drop by any time -- have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Very good, Yvette. The story is set up well and with good descriptive phrases and a logical flow. Dialogue is good too. Great job on the 500 words. I know that can be difficult.
Good luck,
Melissa
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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Very good, Yvette. The story is set up well and with good descriptive phrases and a logical flow. Dialogue is good too. Great job on the 500 words. I know that can be difficult.
Good luck,
Melissa
Comment Written 30-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
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So good of you to stop by for the read and review, Melissa -- always appreciate the time it takes on the stories...thank you for that!! :) And I am so very glad you enjoyed my Colin and his angelic Miriam -- they both stole a piece of my heart when I put them to paper! :) ;) Take care and have a wonderful weekend filled with beach dreams of your own (maybe we can usher in Spring a bit earlier since Winter sure hurried itself in here, right?)!! ;) ;) Yvette :)
