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electronic parents

an op ed

11 total reviews 
Comment from Jaye Bennett
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For someone who doesn't have children, you have an excellent grasp of what is happening to our youth today. Your work is a well-crafted essay outlining the whats, the whys, and the hows. You also offer some well-thought-out options for improving the situation.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
    Haha I am very observant. It does hurt to see young people engrossed in such a small screen while the world and life passes them by. I think when In saw the young man on a sailboat scrolling while a huge, beautiful whale surfaced feet away. He did not even notice! Thanks for the review, sigh. j
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
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You did a great job with your synopsis of the troubled youth of today. You have great insight, so never stop writing. I love and agree with all the detailed examples you gave about the lack of parenting and the cellphone issues. I see the same problem with teens buried in cellphones and social media.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
    Sigh, what a pandora's box this is. When I saw a woman in Amsterdam airport with her new born laying across her lap and sucking the armrest as she scrolled and smiled like an idiot, I knew we were in trouble. International germs, gag.. Cheers, j
Comment from susand3022
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The connection is always important. You must always touch base with your kids, let them know you love them and let them know what's expected of them. You also have to let them know that there will be consequences for infractions. Don't say what they are or you have kids deciding if the rule breaking is worth it! Some parents these days simply can't be there all the time. They have to work in order to support the family. Sometimes consequences intervene. Sometimes the connection is in the little bit of time you get to eek out in between. It's not always quantity, it's quality.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
    Yes but the quality time must not be diluted with distractions. I saw first hand with my family. My sister had a daughter and no time to spend with her. Sadly she is a little selfish and reckless. My brother had 2 sons and focused on them as they were growing up and they are almost too good to be true. Clever, top athletes, polite etc. After a certain age, I believe it is too late. I saw a little boy once trying to show his mom a little "treasure" that he had found and was so excited to share with his mom who did not look up from her phone for a second. First, what was so exciting on the phone and second how could she ignore the obvious disappointment in her child? j
reply by susand3022 on 16-Nov-2018
    Oh yes... I hear you! I volunteered in my son's Kindergarten class. We were making Christmas ornaments for Mom's present. (Mom shouldn't have been there that day, but oh well!) Sitting at a table with a few kids doing the craft, one little boy wanted the one that was for show. Said his wasn't good enough. His mom would just throw it away. I said she wouldn't dare! He looked at my son's and said that his wasn't good either and why would I want it on my tree? I explained that it was perfect because he had made it and it would go on my tree, right in the front, and not just this year, but every year. I was so sad for him. I tried to be encouraging but I knew he was probably right, his mother didn't care and would probably just toss it without even noticing it.
Comment from Debbie Pope
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I think that you are right. This is a well written essay. I particularly like your statement that "being spoon fed other people's photo shopped experiences, is not healthy." It is depressing to compare one's life to those that you see online. Kids today don't have a grasp on what is real. They just see the ideal online.
You seem to put much of the blame on the parents, which is exactly where it should go. Parents don't want to be bothered. There are so many more interesting things to do than to listen to children.
This is an excellent, well thought out essay. I started the contest because I am very interested in hearing people's views on this. I have no intention on entering because I don't have the energy to sort out my feelings at the moment. I truly appreciate your opinions. I don't disagree with a word that you said. You would have been a good mother.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
    Thanks for encouraging review on my poem and potential motherhood. Haha. Way too much time wired in. Some kids have never walked through the forest or watched the sky on a summer night. No idea how to cook a simple meal or carry a conversation because there is only data going in. Cheers, good contest and nice to write something a little meatier than 5 7 5. j
Comment from tbacha58
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This story will rise very high in the points to make you a winner. This is so true about children being brought up to live in front of the TV. I really see a huge change from parents who are bringing up there children. All day long the phone, all day long showing anger, aggressiveness, no feelings to anybody. Parents should change. Beautiful story. Love Terry xoxo

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the insightful review. Yes technology is a game changer for our youth. Cheers, j
Comment from Scarbrems
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A very interesting perspective. I agree with you about the internet, and I am so glad it wasn't there when I was growing up. I think this is well-written; you've offered your points concisely and made good arguments for your case. Well done and good luck.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the insightful review.I agree, this internet and cell phones is a game changer. Cheers, j
Comment from country ranch writer
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Parents give their kids electronic devices to keep the kids out of their hair. We didn't have those luxuries when we were growing up. These have taken the place of TV sets as babysitters.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the review. I agree, nothing is sadder than a young child trying to show a parent their latest treasure and the parent is consumed by the phone, sigh. j
Comment from oorwull
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Well written story on today's values. I happen to agree entirely. Asked my grandkids who were sitting in the back of my car, who they were talking to on their phones. Turns out each other! You also covered, "everyone gets a trophy". I have always thought that was not good for the kids future losses. At what age are they supposed to be before they don't win?
Don't have enough stars to give you!
Willie

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the encouraging review and shiny stars. I really do feel sorry for kids these days compared to earlier generations. Seems so cold. I love meeting up with kids that age and just let them talk. I do not have the benefit of grandchildren!
    Cheers, j
Comment from Bill Schott
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This story, Electronic Parents, chimes in on the state of child rearing in the 21st century. Now, with marijuana legalized, the generation will be both ignorant and stupid.

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the insightful review. I agree it is a double whammy. I feel sorry for this generation with reality slipping away. Cheers, j
Comment from gene roush
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Your contest entry is spot on. Between Facebook and reality t.v., these poor kids have no sense of realization.
Along the lines of winning and losing, I think that you can improve this.
I found the sentence--Many times I have seen a parent out with their child and just cannot put their phone down to engage and discover with their child, allowing them to express and understand this unfolding of their lives.--can be improved.
Maybe something like--Many times I have seen parents out with their children--unable to put down their phones. Unengaged, the children have no one to express nor aid in understanding their unfolding lives.--might be more clear.
Your post closes well, engaging the reader.
thanks for sharing
Gene


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 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
    Thanks for the encouraging review and helpful advice. I agree. Cheers, j