A Healthy Relationship
Don't be needy...12 total reviews
Comment from Judvan2
Love this. Its a perfect description, it flows nicely and has that touch of humor. Its hard to write a short poem with lots of meaning but you did it! Good job!
Congratulations on your win too.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Love this. Its a perfect description, it flows nicely and has that touch of humor. Its hard to write a short poem with lots of meaning but you did it! Good job!
Congratulations on your win too.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) So glad you enjoyed it as well, Judvan2!! Be sure to stop by anytime and have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette ;)
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good Morning, Yvette!
Congratulations on the wise words found in your Naani poem. Of course, my thoughts turned to apple pie when I first read your poem, but truly, there must be balance in any relationship.
Please note:
Too much, and its (it's) ruined.
diane
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Good Morning, Yvette!
Congratulations on the wise words found in your Naani poem. Of course, my thoughts turned to apple pie when I first read your poem, but truly, there must be balance in any relationship.
Please note:
Too much, and its (it's) ruined.
diane
Comment Written 16-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Thanx for heads up, Diane -- fixed it! :) ;) Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Be sure to stop by anytime and have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette ;)
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I loved your poem, Yvette.
I'm afraid mine was a bit unsettling for folks...So it goes!
Take Care~
diane
Comment from susand3022
Oh so true!!! Everyone needs to be needed but nobody wants to have to cater to everyone's last teensy need as if they were an infant, unless they're elderly. Everyone wants affection, but nobody wants someone who is going to be hanging on them all day every day. That's just annoying, like an 18 month old child. Well said. Good luck!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Oh so true!!! Everyone needs to be needed but nobody wants to have to cater to everyone's last teensy need as if they were an infant, unless they're elderly. Everyone wants affection, but nobody wants someone who is going to be hanging on them all day every day. That's just annoying, like an 18 month old child. Well said. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) So glad you enjoyed it as well, susand3022!! Be sure to stop by anytime and have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette ;)
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Hmmmmm.... "un-needy" don't I wish... I don't know if I'm headed there any time soon Yvette! My boyfriend's dad came here to recuperate after surgery. He's in his 80's. My boyfriend is always at work... not necessarily needy, more like always in need.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Naani poem. An over needy lover can make things difficult for the other, it seems that the one depends too much on the other who has no room to breathe.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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A very well-written Naani poem. An over needy lover can make things difficult for the other, it seems that the one depends too much on the other who has no room to breathe.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, Sandra -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This naani, A Healthy Relationship, uses four lines and twenty-five syllables and a play on words that suggests a hands-on approach to relationships. Sometimes you get bred more -- I mean mean more bread.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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This naani, A Healthy Relationship, uses four lines and twenty-five syllables and a play on words that suggests a hands-on approach to relationships. Sometimes you get bred more -- I mean mean more bread.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, Bill -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Oh this is so true! I love the metaphor and word play with the kneading/needing. The line, "you rise together" is my favorite. A well written Naani poem. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Oh this is so true! I love the metaphor and word play with the kneading/needing. The line, "you rise together" is my favorite. A well written Naani poem. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, Cindy -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from meeshu
I enjoyed reading this work a great deal. The imagery is vivid even in this short form. a great message, written well. good luck..
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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I enjoyed reading this work a great deal. The imagery is vivid even in this short form. a great message, written well. good luck..
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, meeshu -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;)
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so clever. You have written a very good poem for the Naani poetry prompt. This resonates with truth an wisdom. Thank you for sharing it with us and I wish you luck in the contest.
Regards
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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This is so clever. You have written a very good poem for the Naani poetry prompt. This resonates with truth an wisdom. Thank you for sharing it with us and I wish you luck in the contest.
Regards
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, Melissa -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;)
Comment from rama devi
What a great simile! Extremely well expressed in this true to form naani...finely presented too. I like your formatting idea but I think the spacing is too excessive between lines...similar space with less of it would be more effective, in my opinion. (It's a matter of style, not a correction).
Fine flow. Fine alliteration of R in ruined and rise.
Great concept!
A memorable aphoristic-flavored write.
Likely to win the contest!
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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What a great simile! Extremely well expressed in this true to form naani...finely presented too. I like your formatting idea but I think the spacing is too excessive between lines...similar space with less of it would be more effective, in my opinion. (It's a matter of style, not a correction).
Fine flow. Fine alliteration of R in ruined and rise.
Great concept!
A memorable aphoristic-flavored write.
Likely to win the contest!
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, rama -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;)
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:-)))))) You too!
Comment from Lady Jane
I love this analogy, writer. Needing vs kneading and yes, you will rise if together, but fall if too much kneading occurs. Well written 25 syllable Naani. I wish you the best of luck in this contest. Image was well chosen and combined with perfect content, this piece has winning potential. Presentation was flawless.
Janelle
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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I love this analogy, writer. Needing vs kneading and yes, you will rise if together, but fall if too much kneading occurs. Well written 25 syllable Naani. I wish you the best of luck in this contest. Image was well chosen and combined with perfect content, this piece has winning potential. Presentation was flawless.
Janelle
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Have to say, this was a more challenging contest, but I had fun with it! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by, Janelle -- have a wonderful 'un-needy' weekend! :) ;)
