People are dying to live here
Setting yourself up with a new crib36 total reviews
Comment from tkbrown
You have written two 'rental ads' in completion of a contest entry requirements. You are describing two very different types of rental units. The first one that you list is described as having all of the amenities that anyone could possibly want. In the second listing, you mention that the 'silver tongued property manager' will promise you anything your heart may desire, other than air conditioning. It will include all of the sinful pleasures that anyone might want, but it may require that the lessee sell his or her soul in order to live there. You have contrasted well between the two. Thank you for sharing and allowing me to review your work. tkbrown
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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You have written two 'rental ads' in completion of a contest entry requirements. You are describing two very different types of rental units. The first one that you list is described as having all of the amenities that anyone could possibly want. In the second listing, you mention that the 'silver tongued property manager' will promise you anything your heart may desire, other than air conditioning. It will include all of the sinful pleasures that anyone might want, but it may require that the lessee sell his or her soul in order to live there. You have contrasted well between the two. Thank you for sharing and allowing me to review your work. tkbrown
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
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You're Welcome! I am honoured to be allowed to review your work! Have a Blessed Day! tkbrown
Comment from royowen
It looks like these properties for rent are ideal locations for ghouls, vampires and recently renovated Bodies. Beautifully written, great entry in this contest, great wording to the advertisement, an excellent entry in this contest. Well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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It looks like these properties for rent are ideal locations for ghouls, vampires and recently renovated Bodies. Beautifully written, great entry in this contest, great wording to the advertisement, an excellent entry in this contest. Well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much Roy. I always appreciate you reviewing my work.
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Most welckme
Comment from georgelebard
I can't decide which apartment unit I want. They both sound good, except for the part about no air conditioner. You did a good job. One minor correction that I saw. I would add a comma between "best, diverse."
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I can't decide which apartment unit I want. They both sound good, except for the part about no air conditioner. You did a good job. One minor correction that I saw. I would add a comma between "best, diverse."
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thanks for the comma tip, I never thought about that when I wrote it. I'm honored by the six star rating, and this is the first time you've read any of my work. I appreciate you taking the time read and review my work.
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Thank you!
Comment from kiwijenny
Ha ha ha ...I'm afraid people are lining up in droves to live there..well penned description....heat but no air conditioning...lol
It's a serious matter
666 inferno Drive...nice touch
God bless
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Ha ha ha ...I'm afraid people are lining up in droves to live there..well penned description....heat but no air conditioning...lol
It's a serious matter
666 inferno Drive...nice touch
God bless
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Insider98
These are great representations of both places, depending on your life choices. Paradise Lane is divine, full of joy, while Inferno drive will fulfill your dark desires. I also like how you added the "landlords". Great entry. I wish you good luck!
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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These are great representations of both places, depending on your life choices. Paradise Lane is divine, full of joy, while Inferno drive will fulfill your dark desires. I also like how you added the "landlords". Great entry. I wish you good luck!
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Cute... very cute. I've read several of these through the years and must say that you've added a lot of fun details that made me smile throughout both these ads. I expect your post will meet with approval and who knows? Maybe you'll get lots of responses! Good luck!
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reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Cute... very cute. I've read several of these through the years and must say that you've added a lot of fun details that made me smile throughout both these ads. I expect your post will meet with approval and who knows? Maybe you'll get lots of responses! Good luck!
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Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
