People are dying to live here
Setting yourself up with a new crib36 total reviews
Comment from Debbie Pope
I am loving these ads. Humor poetry is my favorite, and this prompt is lending itself to funny, funny stuff. Yours is no exception.
I love your description of the amenities available at each address. Interestingly the one in Heaven has all the luxuries at home, except for the bowling alley. The units in hell are located near all you can eat restaurants, bars, taverns, and casinos. Sounds a lot more fun. Only half teasing here. I do know what you are saying here. In Hell, they get to keep doing all the things they have been doing for years. That's why the units are so popular.
This is an excellent entry. Good luck in the completion. Thanks for amusing me.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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I am loving these ads. Humor poetry is my favorite, and this prompt is lending itself to funny, funny stuff. Yours is no exception.
I love your description of the amenities available at each address. Interestingly the one in Heaven has all the luxuries at home, except for the bowling alley. The units in hell are located near all you can eat restaurants, bars, taverns, and casinos. Sounds a lot more fun. Only half teasing here. I do know what you are saying here. In Hell, they get to keep doing all the things they have been doing for years. That's why the units are so popular.
This is an excellent entry. Good luck in the completion. Thanks for amusing me.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Gloria ....
You've done a great job with the prompt author, your title people are dying to live there most apropos. Your word choices, such as very long-term and divine illustrate heaven, and all the horrid sins of gambling and drinking occupy the Inferno drive.
I wish you great luck in the booths with this entertaining entry.
Gloria
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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You've done a great job with the prompt author, your title people are dying to live there most apropos. Your word choices, such as very long-term and divine illustrate heaven, and all the horrid sins of gambling and drinking occupy the Inferno drive.
I wish you great luck in the booths with this entertaining entry.
Gloria
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Lady Jane
For the right renters(,) there will be a rent to own clause added into the (contract). - edit suggestion
taverns and, bars - no comma needed
Every restaurant near your rental is an all you can eat buffet(s) where you can make a glutton of yourself(,) and it's all sinfully delicious. - edit suggestion/remove the 's' on buffet as well
Well, well, writer. Both sound like excellent choices, but I think I'm leaning toward Paradise Lane, LOL...Good writing and you've sold both rentals with humor and enticement. Writing is clean. I just made a few edit suggestions. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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For the right renters(,) there will be a rent to own clause added into the (contract). - edit suggestion
taverns and, bars - no comma needed
Every restaurant near your rental is an all you can eat buffet(s) where you can make a glutton of yourself(,) and it's all sinfully delicious. - edit suggestion/remove the 's' on buffet as well
Well, well, writer. Both sound like excellent choices, but I think I'm leaning toward Paradise Lane, LOL...Good writing and you've sold both rentals with humor and enticement. Writing is clean. I just made a few edit suggestions. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the editing advice. If I had any nominations left I'd send one you away. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from DonandVicki
A nice and quick flash fiction story with a unique twist at the end. I am sure that there are many takers out there, regardless of air conditioning. Some like it hot.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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A nice and quick flash fiction story with a unique twist at the end. I am sure that there are many takers out there, regardless of air conditioning. Some like it hot.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, if only estate agents spoke the truth when either selling a property or renting! We find out the hard way what it is like to live in a location, you pulled no punches here! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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He he he, if only estate agents spoke the truth when either selling a property or renting! We find out the hard way what it is like to live in a location, you pulled no punches here! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thanks Dolly freading and reviewing my work. or your kind words. I appreciate you
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
This is a great entry for this contest. I like the line of the experienced carpenter and then the other is a silver-tongued property manager and all the sinfully delicious treats nearby. You have used so many clever word choices. Excellent contest entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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This is a great entry for this contest. I like the line of the experienced carpenter and then the other is a silver-tongued property manager and all the sinfully delicious treats nearby. You have used so many clever word choices. Excellent contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
While I was reading the first paragraph, I knew there had to be a catch. Imagine my surprise as I read on and found out there wasn't. It sounds perfect. Do I need a security deposit?
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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While I was reading the first paragraph, I knew there had to be a catch. Imagine my surprise as I read on and found out there wasn't. It sounds perfect. Do I need a security deposit?
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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No deposit needed. Of course it's perfect, it's Heaven. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from country ranch writer
You have quite a lot of rentals to hard to believe it is all it's cracked up to be but if you are a con man one may be taken in by this ad for rentals especially the Devils lair.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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You have quite a lot of rentals to hard to believe it is all it's cracked up to be but if you are a con man one may be taken in by this ad for rentals especially the Devils lair.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Im not a con man trust me. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was really excellent! I'll rent the top one, I rather fancy living/reliving there! lol. The other one sounds good for the winter when it's cold, but I can't afford the rent for that one, my soul isn't for sale! Very well done, both houses have good sales points. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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That was really excellent! I'll rent the top one, I rather fancy living/reliving there! lol. The other one sounds good for the winter when it's cold, but I can't afford the rent for that one, my soul isn't for sale! Very well done, both houses have good sales points. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your five stars and the kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from oorwull
Well constructed and laid out. Got the addresses as requested. Think I'll go for the first one.......but I'm not sure. In the first rental I think you need a comma after "doesn't have what you want(,) the landlord,..."
Willie
Well maybe the second d one.......
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Well constructed and laid out. Got the addresses as requested. Think I'll go for the first one.......but I'm not sure. In the first rental I think you need a comma after "doesn't have what you want(,) the landlord,..."
Willie
Well maybe the second d one.......
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much for your kind words. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
