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Setting yourself up with a new crib36 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
These ads are great. Earl. Congratulations on your win in the contest. I understand why you were a winner. You used great descriptive words for both. I like how you made both appealing but for different reasons. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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These ads are great. Earl. Congratulations on your win in the contest. I understand why you were a winner. You used great descriptive words for both. I like how you made both appealing but for different reasons. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Thanks Jan, but I took second place which is still pretty cool. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from Sanku
It's very nice and clever. This refers to heaven and hell and accordingly the clauses are different .It is a brilliant idea and I hope you win in this contest because the idea is totally original.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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It's very nice and clever. This refers to heaven and hell and accordingly the clauses are different .It is a brilliant idea and I hope you win in this contest because the idea is totally original.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Thank you Sanku. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Tpa
A job well- done. I hope I'm able to answer the first ad. The second ad sounds like a neighborhood in Chicago. I wish you the best. I did think both paragraphs were too long, perhaps if rules allow, you might want to break them down to smaller paragraphs, which the reader likes.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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A job well- done. I hope I'm able to answer the first ad. The second ad sounds like a neighborhood in Chicago. I wish you the best. I did think both paragraphs were too long, perhaps if rules allow, you might want to break them down to smaller paragraphs, which the reader likes.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Thank you Tpa. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from TKField
I thought this was very clever if none too subtle. 666 drive, landlord a carpenter, inferno drive, etc. Heh, heh. This got it pretty right as a juxtaposition of fifferent places and worlds, much like Bedford Falls and Pottersville in the movie, it's a Wonderful life. But I always thought swinging Pottersville looked like a lot more fun than boring, stuffy Bedford Falls. Bowling Alleys could go either way. The underworld here is naughty, but not too evil. XXX theaters , thanks to internet porn are a nostalgic, quaint thing of the past. I've been known to play the ponies and I've been to a casino and have nothing against taverns and bars. I guess one person's hell is another man;s heaven. Reminds me of the Union general who after the civil war said if he owned hell and Texas, he'd live in hell and rent out Texas.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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I thought this was very clever if none too subtle. 666 drive, landlord a carpenter, inferno drive, etc. Heh, heh. This got it pretty right as a juxtaposition of fifferent places and worlds, much like Bedford Falls and Pottersville in the movie, it's a Wonderful life. But I always thought swinging Pottersville looked like a lot more fun than boring, stuffy Bedford Falls. Bowling Alleys could go either way. The underworld here is naughty, but not too evil. XXX theaters , thanks to internet porn are a nostalgic, quaint thing of the past. I've been known to play the ponies and I've been to a casino and have nothing against taverns and bars. I guess one person's hell is another man;s heaven. Reminds me of the Union general who after the civil war said if he owned hell and Texas, he'd live in hell and rent out Texas.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Dean Kuch
If the unit doesn't have what you want the landlord, an experienced carpenter, will build to suit you. ... Very, very clever, heh-heh-heh.
Seriously, that was good!
So far this entry looks like the winner to me.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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If the unit doesn't have what you want the landlord, an experienced carpenter, will build to suit you. ... Very, very clever, heh-heh-heh.
Seriously, that was good!
So far this entry looks like the winner to me.
Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thanks Dean. Great animation signing your name. I appreciate the time you took to read and review my work.
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You are very welcome.
I hope my vote helps you out as well.
Best wishes!
~Dean :)
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writer,
I like the one for hell better than for heaven. (LOL) Depending on your personality your hell might just be heaven for some people although I don't know if anyone could take the heat.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
Winslow
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Dear Writer,
I like the one for hell better than for heaven. (LOL) Depending on your personality your hell might just be heaven for some people although I don't know if anyone could take the heat.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the six star rating Winslow. I appreciate the time you took to read and review my work.
Comment from ChibiElf
Great job on your entry for the contest, well done. Each paragraph has a line I particularly like- 'the landlord, an experienced carpenter, will build to suit you' and 'where you can make a glutton of yourself, and it's all sinfully delicious'
Good luck!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Great job on your entry for the contest, well done. Each paragraph has a line I particularly like- 'the landlord, an experienced carpenter, will build to suit you' and 'where you can make a glutton of yourself, and it's all sinfully delicious'
Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you ChibiElf. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from LIJ Red
Was it General Sheridan who said if he owned Hell and Texas, he'd rent out Texas and live in Hell...and Twain(I think) said he'd go to Heaven for the climate and Hell for the social life...now, that exceeds 150 characters, so I can say, excellent post, and go my way...
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Was it General Sheridan who said if he owned Hell and Texas, he'd rent out Texas and live in Hell...and Twain(I think) said he'd go to Heaven for the climate and Hell for the social life...now, that exceeds 150 characters, so I can say, excellent post, and go my way...
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Those are excellent quotes LIJ Red. Thank you for your kind words and reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a great entry for the A House for Rent prompt. i liked your choice of Inferno Drive and Paradise Lane. Good descriptions support your write and make it a good entry. All the best.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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This is a great entry for the A House for Rent prompt. i liked your choice of Inferno Drive and Paradise Lane. Good descriptions support your write and make it a good entry. All the best.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my work
Comment from tfawcus
Wow! What a hard choice! Inferno Drive sounds like a lot of fun, though maybe a bit of a noisy neighbourhood. I suspect that the selling agent may be guilty of one or two sins of omission!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Wow! What a hard choice! Inferno Drive sounds like a lot of fun, though maybe a bit of a noisy neighbourhood. I suspect that the selling agent may be guilty of one or two sins of omission!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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He probably is. But remember there is no AC or ice in Inferno Drive. Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
