Sinister Enough
Answering a Challenge from Deans Sinister Sonnet contest21 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This isn't a bad entry for the contest. What a shame your poem was disqualified. Mine nearly as well. I had one word that had 4 syllables that threw my meter off. I just got home and fixed it, with barely any time.
I reckon your poem may not have made it up for voting as your meter is out.
GRUEsome and MEAN, with a TWIST at the END.
aBOUT the TIME, when I MURDered my FRIEND.
A BRIGHT SUNNy DAY.....
and a few others. I wish I had reviewed yours now. I helped somebody elese out, there poem has made it into the booth. With 20 reviews and quite a few 6 stars, you would have thought someone would have told you before voting commenced.
What a shame. It was certainly a fun read.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
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Hi
This isn't a bad entry for the contest. What a shame your poem was disqualified. Mine nearly as well. I had one word that had 4 syllables that threw my meter off. I just got home and fixed it, with barely any time.
I reckon your poem may not have made it up for voting as your meter is out.
GRUEsome and MEAN, with a TWIST at the END.
aBOUT the TIME, when I MURDered my FRIEND.
A BRIGHT SUNNy DAY.....
and a few others. I wish I had reviewed yours now. I helped somebody elese out, there poem has made it into the booth. With 20 reviews and quite a few 6 stars, you would have thought someone would have told you before voting commenced.
What a shame. It was certainly a fun read.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 18-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018
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hi Galactia Thanks for your review anyway Iam not surprised to find out my Meter was off Still it reviewed well and to me that is most important and of course It is not my genrebut I have written other Sonnets that have been ok so this was more of a fun try I wiill look to see how the others went Many Cheers Christine Unstressed LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
Uhhhh, YIKES!
If it is all the same to you, Christine, I believe I'll pass on your offer to take that walk with you.
Nothing personal, you understand.
Let's just say better safe than sorry and leave it at that, shall we?
Great job on this, you rose to the challenge exceedingly well!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean ;)
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Uhhhh, YIKES!
If it is all the same to you, Christine, I believe I'll pass on your offer to take that walk with you.
Nothing personal, you understand.
Let's just say better safe than sorry and leave it at that, shall we?
Great job on this, you rose to the challenge exceedingly well!
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean ;)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2018
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Ha Ha Hi Dean, Well couldn't resist you challenge and this is my best effort LOL I promise we wont go near any wells on a little walk they are all full Ha Ha. have read the pthers they are good so I am just happy to have a go . Cheers for your review and kind words Christine
Comment from Rickie1
Chrissy
You've creeped me out so well I'll never go for a walk with you. Is the picture your inner demon? Good luck in the contest. Well done.
Rickie
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Chrissy
You've creeped me out so well I'll never go for a walk with you. Is the picture your inner demon? Good luck in the contest. Well done.
Rickie
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Hi Rickie1 Thank you very much for your exceptional rating and review for my Sinister Sonnet .Ha aha Jet it dould be watch out. Well ai had to come up with something and this just appeared. I walk frequently always looking for good company LOL
Many Thanks Rickie Cheers Christine
Comment from TPAC
Great story in my view well presented, yielding an explosive ending that wrap the uniqueness of this write. A slight sway in course of read but quickly tighten to arrive a t conclusion. All in my opinion.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Great story in my view well presented, yielding an explosive ending that wrap the uniqueness of this write. A slight sway in course of read but quickly tighten to arrive a t conclusion. All in my opinion.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2018
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Hi Teressa, Thank you for your review and pleased you enjoyed my 'story' Sometimes ai worry about myself and what comes out of my brain LOL Still it did ask for sinister I am very safe to walk with though Cheers Christine
Comment from robyn corum
Chrissy,
What fun!!! hahahaha! Okay, okay -- you're right. I do think the syllable count may have been correct, but the scansion is off here and there (meaning the rise and fall, or the up/down, hard/easy, pattern) of the meter fluctuates a bit... BUT the presentation, the image and the fun storyline make up for alllll of that! I enjoyed so much and NO THANK YOU, I do not think I will be taking any walks any time soon with YOU.
But thanks for asking. *smile*
Much good luck to you!! Go get 'em!!
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Chrissy,
What fun!!! hahahaha! Okay, okay -- you're right. I do think the syllable count may have been correct, but the scansion is off here and there (meaning the rise and fall, or the up/down, hard/easy, pattern) of the meter fluctuates a bit... BUT the presentation, the image and the fun storyline make up for alllll of that! I enjoyed so much and NO THANK YOU, I do not think I will be taking any walks any time soon with YOU.
But thanks for asking. *smile*
Much good luck to you!! Go get 'em!!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Robyn, Thanks Ha Ha Cant have evrything , once my mind is made up thats it I know It is a little teeny off well probably a lot off but if you read it like da DUM you can fit my words into that LOL . I can stress anywhere .Really a bit of fun and ai certainly don't expect to place in the contest but at least I had a go . Cant walk at the moment anyway I had a fall down stops on Sunday and buggered my Knee so off work this week and using a stick ( precticing for old age and my kids think it is hilarious)
So while I was waiting in the Emergency Dept full of pain killers I wrote this sonnet so blame the drugs LOL Anyway nice to have your feedback Cheers Christne
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Hello there, Christine. Lol. This is a wonderful sinister sonnet mixed with some fun humor. You did a great job on this. Good luck in the contest. -Kerry
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hello there, Christine. Lol. This is a wonderful sinister sonnet mixed with some fun humor. You did a great job on this. Good luck in the contest. -Kerry
Comment Written 13-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Kerry, Thank so mich for having a look at my sinister sonnet attempt LOL A bit if fun to try and think up one I enjoyed Deans Challenge Cheers for your good luck Christine
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You're very welcome. Sorry for the late reply.
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, deserving of Six Star recognition, but they're already gone, and it's only Monday. I encountered too many "Exceptional" works in my reads thus far, and they were as wonderful as yours. I certainly cannot make any helpful comments regarding the sonnet form - it's still a struggle for me to write even one that conforms. But, I loved your poem - clever and well done, with smooth rhyming rhythm. No, I can't go for a walk with you, I have appointments every day, all the time...
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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In my opinion, deserving of Six Star recognition, but they're already gone, and it's only Monday. I encountered too many "Exceptional" works in my reads thus far, and they were as wonderful as yours. I certainly cannot make any helpful comments regarding the sonnet form - it's still a struggle for me to write even one that conforms. But, I loved your poem - clever and well done, with smooth rhyming rhythm. No, I can't go for a walk with you, I have appointments every day, all the time...
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Eve, Oh wow what a great review and much appreciated considering the genre is not really one I would do but I did enjoy the challenge and let me know when you have a 'free' day LOL Thanks so mich it is truly appreciated Cheers Christine
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You are so welcome, Christine - a great poem...Eve
Comment from BeasPeas
I think you have risen to Dean's challenge admirably. I like your poem. Well done. Good story line with great rhyming and flow. One suggestion would be to tamp down the color a bit. My eyes are still refocusing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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I think you have risen to Dean's challenge admirably. I like your poem. Well done. Good story line with great rhyming and flow. One suggestion would be to tamp down the color a bit. My eyes are still refocusing. Marilyn
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Hi Marilyn, Thanls for stopping by the well LOL and yes have toned the colour down it is a bit in your eyes I had fun with this as it not my usual genre but I love a good challenge Cheers Christine
Comment from royowen
Well done Christine, I too struggle a little with the iambic meter, but I think you've done, and certainly show your gut twines in doing so. Isn't it funny, one finds all sorts of "secret" things about one's friends. Beautifully written Christine, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Well done Christine, I too struggle a little with the iambic meter, but I think you've done, and certainly show your gut twines in doing so. Isn't it funny, one finds all sorts of "secret" things about one's friends. Beautifully written Christine, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Hi Roy, Thanks so much It was fun to try and think of something sinister and of course ALL my friends are safe and well ( excuse the pun) As Dean issues the challenge when I reviewed his sinister poem and told him he would scare of all other contenders he adviced me to have a try also.No chance though against the others Never mind it was fun to do bit ai think ai will stick to other subjects. I can not get my head around iambic meter I just do 10 syllables as I find the stresses too hard to fathom out LOL. Anyway still writing thats the main thing. Cheers my friend Christine. Nice day for a walk ?
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I think your poetry's very good Christine, I'm a fan anyway,
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Comment from country ranch writer
Good ole Dean, he likes to challenge the wits of his friends to best him in the scary department I am afraid he wins hands down.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Good ole Dean, he likes to challenge the wits of his friends to best him in the scary department I am afraid he wins hands down.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Hi country ranch writer Thanks for reading my sonnet Ha Ha Of course Deans wins hands down but thought I would have a go it certainly challenged my thoughts As ai sai this genre is not mine LOL. I am safe to walk with Cheers Christine
