Chronic Challenge
When the hurt won't stop...13 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Congratulations on taking home the contest ribbon. It's simple to see how you won. Strong visual imagery with a message. Good rhyming with "in" and pain (pain, mind, remain and pain, remain, sane). Nice work.
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Congratulations on taking home the contest ribbon. It's simple to see how you won. Strong visual imagery with a message. Good rhyming with "in" and pain (pain, mind, remain and pain, remain, sane). Nice work.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 13-Nov-2018
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read and review, sunnilicious -- your comments here are a wonderful smile for my face today.... and the fact that you thought it deserved six stars puts a wonderful smile on my face -- thank you!! :) ;) Have a great week ahead! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Excellent topic and a great rhyming pattern with your 1-6-1. Congratulations on placing FIRST in the contest. You had a worthy entry and a well deserved win. :)
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Excellent topic and a great rhyming pattern with your 1-6-1. Congratulations on placing FIRST in the contest. You had a worthy entry and a well deserved win. :)
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanx so much for the read and review, Cindy -- your congrats so very much appreciated...so glad you dropped by for that (put a smile on my face, friend!!)! :) ;) Have a great week ahead! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from tbacha58
The picture is very impressive and matches the story of the brain. I enjoyed reading the phrase as it is so true, our brain is helpless without pushing it to find some peace during our awareness. Terry xoox
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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The picture is very impressive and matches the story of the brain. I enjoyed reading the phrase as it is so true, our brain is helpless without pushing it to find some peace during our awareness. Terry xoox
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Terry -- appreciate your stopping by! :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about pain that can be devastating when there is nothing that seems to take the pain away for good, and our minds feel to go insane.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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A very well-written 1-6-1 poem about pain that can be devastating when there is nothing that seems to take the pain away for good, and our minds feel to go insane.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Sandra -- appreciate your stopping by! :)
Comment from JanPerry
It's fair enough. A true statement. You need more evidence of pain. I couldn't feel it.
Pain teaches the mind to remain sane. Pain forces the mind to stay sane.
Taunting is more of a long term action verb.
Something you'd do to a child.
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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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It's fair enough. A true statement. You need more evidence of pain. I couldn't feel it.
Pain teaches the mind to remain sane. Pain forces the mind to stay sane.
Taunting is more of a long term action verb.
Something you'd do to a child.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from Lady Jane
It really does. Sometimes you wonder if you're the one with the issue, LOL. Very well penned and the syllable count is spot on. The rhyme is strong and presentation is perfect, too...Red font adds to the overall effect of PAIN! Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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It really does. Sometimes you wonder if you're the one with the issue, LOL. Very well penned and the syllable count is spot on. The rhyme is strong and presentation is perfect, too...Red font adds to the overall effect of PAIN! Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for the read and review, Janelle -- always appreciate your stopping in! :) ;)
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-six-one, Chronic Challenge, has the syllables in the right place and attempts to have the reader imagine a life of unrelenting pain. Impossible conditions.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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This one-six-one, Chronic Challenge, has the syllables in the right place and attempts to have the reader imagine a life of unrelenting pain. Impossible conditions.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Bill -- always appreciated. :)
Comment from rama devi
Excellent slant rhyme pairings with this fine 1-6-1 poem. Intense meaning packed in few words. So true. Finely presented too. I think this poem is immensely effective. Bravo and good luck. Taunts is the right verb choice.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Excellent slant rhyme pairings with this fine 1-6-1 poem. Intense meaning packed in few words. So true. Finely presented too. I think this poem is immensely effective. Bravo and good luck. Taunts is the right verb choice.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read and review, rd -- your positive comments are so very much appreciated! :) ;) Have a great week ahead! :) ;)
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:-)))) Have a great weekend too!
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:-)))) Have a great weekend too!
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:-)))) Have a great weekend too!
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent written 1-6-1 poem, Man I agree with you there . I remember recently my leg w ass in pain for no reason for 3 days I could barely walk.
You aimed it up well in your poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hi
This is an excellent written 1-6-1 poem, Man I agree with you there . I remember recently my leg w ass in pain for no reason for 3 days I could barely walk.
You aimed it up well in your poem.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read and review, Tia -- your positive comments are so very much appreciated! :) ;) Have a great week ahead! :) ;)
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent 1-6-1 poem and so very true, you have done very well with wonderful artwork to support, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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What an excellent 1-6-1 poem and so very true, you have done very well with wonderful artwork to support, very well done and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Thanx so much for stopping by for the read and review, kahpot -- your positive comments are so very much appreciated! :) ;) Have a great week ahead! :) ;)
