Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Great 1-6-1 rhyming verse and your breathtaking image I likely saw on pixabay.com as I was creating for my FanStory verse, "5-7-5 Quaking Aspens Quiver too."

My alternative to your middle line would not have affected your excellent imagery: rustles in aspen trees.

The aspens are really beautiful in pictures. Unfortunately, I have yet to experience them in a natural setting. Some day, maybe!

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Mark,


Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

Eugene

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

This one is so very bright and timely...love the imagery and softness of the presentation. That picture is gorgeous. Is it yours? The 8 syllables work well and are rhymed perfectly. Good luck in the contest, writer. It's definitely a contender :)

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Janelle,


Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. This poem won me first place (though it was a three-way tie}

Eugene

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one-six-one, Golden Breeze, has the syllables in the right place and creates the scene of calm autumn with tambourine trees aloft.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Bill

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

Eugene

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good. I have read several submissions in this contest. There is some excellent competition for the win. There are a lot of talented writers on FanStory. Your poem is one of the better ones.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Thomas,

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. This was my first first place win. Hooray!!

Eugene

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image.
-A good topic, imagery, and rhyme.
-The use of 'rustles' is effective.
-Effective use of one continuous thought.
-Congratulations of the win, Eugene.
-It is well deserved.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Pam,

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. Thanks for the heads up. It made a difference. This was my first first place win.

Eugene

reply by Pam (respa) on 22-Nov-2018

You are very welcome, Eugene. I appreciate your reply. I am glad you won the contest; congratulations on that. I adjusted your review to make it better and up to date.

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your use of words creates a clear scene of nature. The last line of one word "leaves" is a fitting ending to your poem. There is a feel for Autumn in your poem as winter approaches.

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Mermaids,

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

Eugene

Comment from Galactia

Excellent

Hi

Lovely little 1-6-1 poem. Perfect syllable count across all lines. Presented well. I wish you well in this contest.

Good luck in the contest :)

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Galactia,

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

Eugene

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Good

I loved your poem. You did a perfect 1-6-1 syllable poem. You chose a beautiful illustration. I really like the title you chose for the poem and illustration. 'Golden Breeze' ... that is what I saw through both your words and your image. 'Rustle an aspen trees' ... did you mean 'rustling aspen trees'? Good job ... keep writing!

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

C. Gale Burnett,


Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. Thanks for the heads up about the line 'Rustle an aspen trees. I made the change and received my first first place win.

Eugene

reply by C. Gale Burnett on 22-Nov-2018

Oh, my goodness! Congratulations!!!! You certainly earned 1st place! I am truly happy for you.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this work a great deal. The imagery is vivid even in this short form. they don't call them Whispering Aspen for nothing..

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018

Meeshu

Thank you for your encouraging review. Your comments are greatly appreciated. I had an animated image showing the Aspen tree leaves rustling but did not know how to add it to the entry. Nevertheless, I did receive my first first place win.

Eugene