Humanity's Epitaph
Will we wake up and change our fate?6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Humanity's Epitaph, has the right set up and suggests a world ending that seems more probable everyday. If only we'd been warned a thousand more times.
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This 5-7-5, Humanity's Epitaph, has the right set up and suggests a world ending that seems more probable everyday. If only we'd been warned a thousand more times.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2018
Comment from Sherechita
This is strong, emotional and sad. The font and picture are nicely paired as well as the format of the stanza, which, if I am interpreting correctly, seems to be indicating a delay, which of course, makes sense, it will take time for mankind to utterly destroy everything. Nicely done.
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This is strong, emotional and sad. The font and picture are nicely paired as well as the format of the stanza, which, if I am interpreting correctly, seems to be indicating a delay, which of course, makes sense, it will take time for mankind to utterly destroy everything. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
Yep that's what us humans do. Short and powerful 5'7'5 poem I recon. Perfect 5'7'5 syllables across all lines.
It's telling me I need 150 syllables and I only used about 136. :(
Now I should be able to send it
Great job
Regards
Tia
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Hi
Yep that's what us humans do. Short and powerful 5'7'5 poem I recon. Perfect 5'7'5 syllables across all lines.
It's telling me I need 150 syllables and I only used about 136. :(
Now I should be able to send it
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
(have) turned it to waste. - edit suggestion
Enjoyed reading this epitaph of sorts, confined in such a brief format. The thoughts worked well here and the image added to the overall validity of your write. Content was conveyed in good form with correct syllabic count and the presentation was excellent as well. Good luck in the contest. I only made one edit suggestion as to help the read flow smoother..
Janelle
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(have) turned it to waste. - edit suggestion
Enjoyed reading this epitaph of sorts, confined in such a brief format. The thoughts worked well here and the image added to the overall validity of your write. Content was conveyed in good form with correct syllabic count and the presentation was excellent as well. Good luck in the contest. I only made one edit suggestion as to help the read flow smoother..
Janelle
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
Comment from Carolyn Reaves
Very thought provoking words. We need to think about our actions and what could happen if we do not preserve and try to love instead of hate. Only three lines, but powerful words.
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Very thought provoking words. We need to think about our actions and what could happen if we do not preserve and try to love instead of hate. Only three lines, but powerful words.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
World is ending, as you think, humanity's epitaph will indicate there was a world once, man consumed and destructed not practicing love; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
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World is ending, as you think, humanity's epitaph will indicate there was a world once, man consumed and destructed not practicing love; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 08-Nov-2018