On the Tip of My Tongue
5-7-5 senryu5 total reviews
Comment from tkbrown
Congratulations on your win! You created a beautiful pairing of picture and words. Are you the artist who created the picture, or is it a gift from some un-named artist? It is a powerful message. I can see why it took first place. Thank you for sharing. tkbrown
Congratulations on your win! You created a beautiful pairing of picture and words. Are you the artist who created the picture, or is it a gift from some un-named artist? It is a powerful message. I can see why it took first place. Thank you for sharing. tkbrown
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
I just wanted to say...I absolutely LOVE your senryu. It's fantastic, presentarion superb and if this dosen't win, I'll be gob smacked.
Not 1 word I would change. I loved your poetic skill and wit with this poem.
Good Luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
Hi
I just wanted to say...I absolutely LOVE your senryu. It's fantastic, presentarion superb and if this dosen't win, I'll be gob smacked.
Not 1 word I would change. I loved your poetic skill and wit with this poem.
Good Luck in the contest.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
Comment from Ms. Snyder
I found this quite entertaining! I like the way you used the artwork to incorporate the poem. I find it a very sweet sentiment as well as clever word play and I did laugh at the end as well. Laughter is the greatest medicine after all...
I found this quite entertaining! I like the way you used the artwork to incorporate the poem. I find it a very sweet sentiment as well as clever word play and I did laugh at the end as well. Laughter is the greatest medicine after all...
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
Comment from rspoet
You've written a very fine senryu and entry for the contest
excellent use of imagery and alliteration
love the "quill quivers" phrase
A kiss shall never be put into words
that even approaches the real thing
Well done
Best wishes to you
RS
You've written a very fine senryu and entry for the contest
excellent use of imagery and alliteration
love the "quill quivers" phrase
A kiss shall never be put into words
that even approaches the real thing
Well done
Best wishes to you
RS
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I like the two opposite words here which gives this write its uniqueness, 'still' and 'quiver', those moaning kisses certainly move the pen, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
I like the two opposite words here which gives this write its uniqueness, 'still' and 'quiver', those moaning kisses certainly move the pen, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018