Comment from RodG

Excellent

The Speaker seems young, mostly because of his choice of adjectives describing the God whose works he's witnessed. What a lovely way of expressing one's faith.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018

Thank you for the wonderful review and the stars.

Comment from tkbrown

Good

I like the Senryu. It is consistent from beginning to end with the first two lines describing the entity and the final line as a reveal. The only thing that I see in it, is there should be a comma after the word "for" at the end of the first line. Since the Bible stresses that no one has "seen" God, I would hesitate to put a picture of anyone up to represent him. But, you are the author, and you are the one with the choice. It is a good representation, and I am glad to see that the Artist has been credited. Good work! tkbrown

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018

I used the picture of Jesus as He is God just as much as the Father and I will go back and add the comma. I didn't put it in as with haiku senryu uses little punctuation. I do thank you for the stars and your comments.

reply by tkbrown on 06-Nov-2018

You're welcome. I agree that He is God just as much as the Father. He is the Father's Son - and as such, they may look alike. Please, take no offense to what I stated. None was intended. You did well! tkbrown