Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

This is a wonderful description of a starry sky in 5-7-5 form. It seems to allude to the Creation so has a religious feeling to it.

Congrats on placing in the contest

Keep writing

Joan

 Comment Written 15-Nov-2018

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

This is such a good 5/7/5 - glad you got a place. Congratulations! I find I wonder how a committee can choose the winner of these forms - really! It must be very difficult. Regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2018

Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

Here in Chicago, on a clear night, we can see as many as four or five stars! Light pollution notwithstanding, I've always loved the idea of looking across millions of years "beams of ancient light" - what a cool way to phrase that phenomenon"), I also like the perspective it gives us - it's a way of pondering our infinitesimally small place, both spatially and temporally, in the cosmos. It will never stop providing grist for the poetry mill.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

That feeling when you contemplate our infinitesimally small part of the universe makes me really happy - I'm not sure why. I must be strange to be pleased about realizing how insignificant I am :))
Carol

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

It's a sobering thought that many of the stars we see when we gaze up at the sky could have ceased to exist hundreds or thousands of years ago. A really excellent poem on one of my very favourite topics. Thanks for the gorgeous picture too. Good luck with this gem, it deserves to do well. Cheers, Craig

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Thanks, Craig, I do find the though both sobering and fascinating. I read something not long ago about how time isn't really linear, it wraps back on itself - like a mobius strip. Did you ever fool around with those as a kid? I think space must do the same thing. I mean if the universe didn't exist before the big bang, what was there before? Is absolutely nothing possible? Nothing can only really be defined by "something". There's so much we just don't understand, and that's really okay with me.

Carol

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Hello Carol,
I love your 5-7-5 poem of starlight and imagery
Starlight is like a time capsule, if only we could translate it into images
Oh the wonders we would see
in light-centuries, and light-eons
Great photograph, too
Best wishes to you.
Robert

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Thanks, Robert, and I'm sorry for this late reply. I've been distracted by the fires in southern California. I do like that photo very much myself :))
Carol

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Very nice image, Carol.
-Notes are appreciated.
-Syllable count is good.
-Effective imagery and
alliteration that emphasize
the sparkle in the night sky.
-Good concluding line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Thank you so much!
Carol

reply by Pam (respa) on 12-Nov-2018

You are very welcome, Carol.

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Your excellent five seven five poem led me to recall a blurb about the oldest star
not shining(to the naked eye anyway), old HD140283, who, like myself looks older than he is(and older than the universe). Yes, I enjoy these side trips...

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Yes, I had quite a side trip while writing this one. NASA sure has some great stuff online!
Carol

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

A star poem for the thinkers. So true that looking into space is actually looking backwards in time, which does make one wonder what is looking backwards in time at us.

Great job Carol and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Lol, I love that thought...who or what looked at us many millennia ago? Oh the CEC...help!! ;)

Thanks, as always Gloria :)
Carol

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for focusing on how ancient the light is that we see in the night sky. I enjoyed your 5-7-5 and your use of alliteration to intensify the message. Best wishes in the contest, and I appreciated the astronomy lesson as well- Joan

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018

Thanks, Joan. I assume you are well south of the fires, or whatever the direction is...we are fine but friends and family have lost homes. It is so sad...
Carol

reply by Joan E. on 13-Nov-2018

Thanks for your concern. We are not within the evacuation zone, but traffic on PCH goes only as far as Sunset and sometimes there?s no access through the McClure Tunnel from the 10. Also, we are without internet, phone and television. Periodically, we were without electricity as well, and we?re not sure what will happen when the winds change tomorrow?I am writing this from the Von's Parking lot at PCH and Sunset, from which I can walk a mile home if I can make it through on back roads. We will just stay home and have flashlights and batteries ready through the week. Take good care of yourself- Joan

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a super contest entry, Carol. Good job with the syllable count per line. Your image is perfect. I love your author notes, too. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Jan

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018

Thanks so much, Jan :))
Carol