"The Book of Wedded Bliss"
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Comment from Earl Corp
This poem goes through a whole gamut of emotions. It took me on a roller coaster of emotions. You are no longer learning to write, this past week you have shown your as good as anyone. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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This poem goes through a whole gamut of emotions. It took me on a roller coaster of emotions. You are no longer learning to write, this past week you have shown your as good as anyone. Very nice job.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Again, my deepest regrets...
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh my goodness - that has to be one of the saddest reads today....and maybe in a very long read -- the way you bring so many different aggressions and emotions into it is just wonderfully tragic. Thank you for sharing - Yvette
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Oh my goodness - that has to be one of the saddest reads today....and maybe in a very long read -- the way you bring so many different aggressions and emotions into it is just wonderfully tragic. Thank you for sharing - Yvette
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Read this and cry not nor Shed...
A Single tear...
"Happy Birthday, Jay!"
Ricky....
Comment from tkbrown
The poem has potential. While I do not like the subject, I see the suffering that can be lessened by the writing.
The initial vision of a blissful marriage shattered by the lack of shared goals within that marriage. The loss of the "Honeymoon Stage" in marriage is magnified to become the loss of everything -- finally, even the loss of life for "She", and for the loss of "Jay".
I gave the poem three stars because - in my view - it should be broken into separate segments so one can better understand "who" is being discussed. The sections seem to run together with no separation. However, it is possible that the author is wanting to exhibit relationships with no boundaries - that enmeshed destructiveness that sometimes wipes all of the happiness from view. If, that is the case, then I should give it four stars. I still believe segments would help clarify the person being written. The possibility of enmeshment has caused me to give the writing four stars instead, but I will leave the three star comments above so my analysis can be better understood.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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The poem has potential. While I do not like the subject, I see the suffering that can be lessened by the writing.
The initial vision of a blissful marriage shattered by the lack of shared goals within that marriage. The loss of the "Honeymoon Stage" in marriage is magnified to become the loss of everything -- finally, even the loss of life for "She", and for the loss of "Jay".
I gave the poem three stars because - in my view - it should be broken into separate segments so one can better understand "who" is being discussed. The sections seem to run together with no separation. However, it is possible that the author is wanting to exhibit relationships with no boundaries - that enmeshed destructiveness that sometimes wipes all of the happiness from view. If, that is the case, then I should give it four stars. I still believe segments would help clarify the person being written. The possibility of enmeshment has caused me to give the writing four stars instead, but I will leave the three star comments above so my analysis can be better understood.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This garbered Sixes but thanks...
Your comments are appreciated.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from ciliverde
Your sadness about losing your son always shines through in your poems. To be honest I find them a little bit baffling, but there are pearls in there too - the coffin lid that clapped shut is one of them.
Carol
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Your sadness about losing your son always shines through in your poems. To be honest I find them a little bit baffling, but there are pearls in there too - the coffin lid that clapped shut is one of them.
Carol
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanks ciliverde.
The next few until His birthday on the fifth are dedications.
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from Liberty Justice
Six stars. How touching and very emotional Ricky the way. You describe the earth abd miseries taking place. Indeed the world has changed seemingly for the worse. Read my poems akso. Liberty justice
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Six stars. How touching and very emotional Ricky the way. You describe the earth abd miseries taking place. Indeed the world has changed seemingly for the worse. Read my poems akso. Liberty justice
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanks Liberty.
This will be my testimonial today in church.
Over 100 Priests and members will listen.
Some will cry while most will not evenly look out of respect as if in prayer.
Not a word will be uttered until the ceremony at 12:30 ends.
Doctor Ricky1024
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Hi Ricky! What religion do you practice?
Lolol liberty justice
Comment from tbacha58
Always your poems have something new to learn, apart your grieve which will never go away. Yes , the rape , the unholily gods before, everything was different. You have so much knowledge about everything Ricky. Have a great week end. Love Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Always your poems have something new to learn, apart your grieve which will never go away. Yes , the rape , the unholily gods before, everything was different. You have so much knowledge about everything Ricky. Have a great week end. Love Terry xoxo
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanks Terry.
Always love it when you are here.
Ricky....
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It certainly does seem that the message Jesus brought has become very distorted and is being interpreted and lived out through man's selfish, fearful ways. With this twisted perception, rape is rampant, whether it is of male, females or tender, vulnerable aspects of Mother Earth. You have good command of the use of personification. Your use of metaphors make it more powerful. You will encounter readers who just don't get it. But I am grateful for your cautionary tale. I also see shreds of hope here too. Thank you.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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It certainly does seem that the message Jesus brought has become very distorted and is being interpreted and lived out through man's selfish, fearful ways. With this twisted perception, rape is rampant, whether it is of male, females or tender, vulnerable aspects of Mother Earth. You have good command of the use of personification. Your use of metaphors make it more powerful. You will encounter readers who just don't get it. But I am grateful for your cautionary tale. I also see shreds of hope here too. Thank you.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Glad to see a fellow Intellect in Depth when it comes to a message.
Sometimes I fight for these and other times not.
I have been chastised four times and for as much as three weeks.
(Even after apologizing.
Some reviewers are jealous.
They want but can't.
Beautiful wishes from my friends above to you this Liz
And a little later today...
This day...
As with this testimony....
Which will be given...
At the LatterDay Saint Priest Church of Jesus Christ
Mary Bell Road...
Manahawkin New Jersey.
Wish me luck.
With the deepest regards...
Doctor Ricky1024
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How did it go for you ? I thought of you and thank you for the blessings, I am dreary today. It helped.
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that impacts the reader. There is emotion and feelings in your words as you describe a happy time and then the loss of Jason. Many can relate to your words.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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You have a vivid use of words that impacts the reader. There is emotion and feelings in your words as you describe a happy time and then the loss of Jason. Many can relate to your words.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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This will be given as a Dedicated Testimonial today in front of 100 Plus Saints in The LatterDay Saint Priest Church of Jesus Christ.
After the Sacrement at and about 9:45 AM.
Thanks,
Ricky...
