First Date
After I knew he was the one5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-six-one, First Date, has the syllables in the right places and takes us all back to that time when what we desired became what w acquired. Nice.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
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This one-six-one, First Date, has the syllables in the right places and takes us all back to that time when what we desired became what w acquired. Nice.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
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Thanks, Bill, for the read and I hope your acquisition is treasured.
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It is neat when they sweep you off your feet. I remember telling my husband that I never wanted to get married. Six months later I was making hints about how I wanted a ring. Oh how things can change. Great job
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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It is neat when they sweep you off your feet. I remember telling my husband that I never wanted to get married. Six months later I was making hints about how I wanted a ring. Oh how things can change. Great job
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Oh, yes love is a funny thing. Thanks for the read and the review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Lady Jane
Cute, sentimental write, author. Nothing not to like. The rhyme is good, the syllable count, perfect. The content was poetically sweet and enchanting. Finally, the presentation was solid. That image created a backdrop to your penning that escalated the write. Good job and good luck in the contest.
janelle
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Cute, sentimental write, author. Nothing not to like. The rhyme is good, the syllable count, perfect. The content was poetically sweet and enchanting. Finally, the presentation was solid. That image created a backdrop to your penning that escalated the write. Good job and good luck in the contest.
janelle
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much for your read and your encouraging words. Much appreciated.
Comment from RodG
And this was just the FIRST date? Neat! I like the choice of words the Speaker uses. "Sweet" and "neat" suggest she was young and is describing an event from a much earlier time, say the 50s.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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And this was just the FIRST date? Neat! I like the choice of words the Speaker uses. "Sweet" and "neat" suggest she was young and is describing an event from a much earlier time, say the 50s.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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You guess my time window. Thanks for the read and the comments.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is a very good use of the one-six-one syllable count format. You've told a nice story, fully expressed in eight words (aided, intelligently, by the title). The words "sweet" and "neat" have a sort of youthful innocence, that heightens the image of this being a first date.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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This is a very good use of the one-six-one syllable count format. You've told a nice story, fully expressed in eight words (aided, intelligently, by the title). The words "sweet" and "neat" have a sort of youthful innocence, that heightens the image of this being a first date.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thanks much for the read and the encouraging comments.
