Behind The Unlocked Door
The Past Came Calling15 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Congrats on your win and these lines made way to the horror story below: "He took her fragile ego,
and crushed it neath his boot.
So much of what he said he loved
about her rendered moot.
She heard the doorknob turning..." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Congrats on your win and these lines made way to the horror story below: "He took her fragile ego,
and crushed it neath his boot.
So much of what he said he loved
about her rendered moot.
She heard the doorknob turning..." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you for reading my poem, I really appreciate it.
Comment from Edward Escobar
The intensity of this story was dynamically surreal, full of symbolism that made it feel that moment of panic racing, along with the slow process that gave this story plenty of chills.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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The intensity of this story was dynamically surreal, full of symbolism that made it feel that moment of panic racing, along with the slow process that gave this story plenty of chills.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it made my day. :)
Comment from UpNorth
Excellent- I rushed from line to line. The cadence was only broken with "guaranteed to stay sharp for life. Try "Guaranteed sharp for life" ? Does that make sense? Great, strong poem.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Excellent- I rushed from line to line. The cadence was only broken with "guaranteed to stay sharp for life. Try "Guaranteed sharp for life" ? Does that make sense? Great, strong poem.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2020
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Thank you for this great review and the helpful suggestion. I changed it for the better. Thank you so much for the six stars. :)
Comment from Six-Star Writer
Sorry, but this story didn't do it for me. Too straightforward, like a boilerplate TV script. Lots of predictable language, twists, and turns. It's nothing personal, just like more originality in my reads.
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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Sorry, but this story didn't do it for me. Too straightforward, like a boilerplate TV script. Lots of predictable language, twists, and turns. It's nothing personal, just like more originality in my reads.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thanks for taking time to read and review.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
YIKES. You have thoroughly addressed the issues of alcohol filled anger that leads to many domestic violence cases. Your descriptions of the actions/emotions is so well-written. A great response to this writing prompt and a great contest entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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YIKES. You have thoroughly addressed the issues of alcohol filled anger that leads to many domestic violence cases. Your descriptions of the actions/emotions is so well-written. A great response to this writing prompt and a great contest entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
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Thank you for this very nice review...I really appreciate it.
Comment from Lady Jane
Well, well...I can't say I saw that ending coming, but the ending was composed well and the poem definitely fit the prompt. She did forget to lock her door and look who moseyed in...her past. This was rhymed well and presented with solid flare and pacing. The black on red added to the ambiance/feel of the dark write. Good luck in the contest, writer :)
Janelle
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Well, well...I can't say I saw that ending coming, but the ending was composed well and the poem definitely fit the prompt. She did forget to lock her door and look who moseyed in...her past. This was rhymed well and presented with solid flare and pacing. The black on red added to the ambiance/feel of the dark write. Good luck in the contest, writer :)
Janelle
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2018
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Thank you so much for this great review :)
Comment from jenintorre
Well that certainly learnt him didn't it? Well done you have written a full length novel in a poem. I think you have a very good competition entry here. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Well that certainly learnt him didn't it? Well done you have written a full length novel in a poem. I think you have a very good competition entry here. Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thank you for this great review, I really appreciate it. :)
Comment from Heather Knight
This is indeed a scary poem. Scarier than graveyards and ghosts because, unfortunately, it's based on reality.
I've enjoyed reading it very much.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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This is indeed a scary poem. Scarier than graveyards and ghosts because, unfortunately, it's based on reality.
I've enjoyed reading it very much.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thank you, I'm so glad you liked it. I appreciate you taking time to read and review. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the abused girl who forgot to lock her door and the abuser manage to come in once again to abuse her like so many times before, but she has a surprise for him, it was his last chance for sure.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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A very well-written poem about the abused girl who forgot to lock her door and the abuser manage to come in once again to abuse her like so many times before, but she has a surprise for him, it was his last chance for sure.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thank you for such a nice review. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant story that many will identify with, alcohol has been the cause of many hearts to be broken and abuse is a cycle that never ends unles one person breaks that chain, I took a the walk on the dark side here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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A poignant story that many will identify with, alcohol has been the cause of many hearts to be broken and abuse is a cycle that never ends unles one person breaks that chain, I took a the walk on the dark side here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Thank you for such a wonderful review. It's always nice to hear from you.
