Short Stories and Flash
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Hey! Two for one, only a nickle."Misc Fiction
5 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
To be brutally honest, I'm not sure how this made it into the voting booth as it plainly isn't written in black font only which is one of the criteria. But that's down to the poor performance of the CEC, I guess... again.
Nice premises for both stories. the set-up for the first is very intriguing.
The second one is completely barmy, but... there's certainly some great religious connotations and notions at play in it.
Good stuff
GMG
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Hi there,
To be brutally honest, I'm not sure how this made it into the voting booth as it plainly isn't written in black font only which is one of the criteria. But that's down to the poor performance of the CEC, I guess... again.
Nice premises for both stories. the set-up for the first is very intriguing.
The second one is completely barmy, but... there's certainly some great religious connotations and notions at play in it.
Good stuff
GMG
Comment Written 03-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2018
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Hmm ... I'll be, it DOES say that. I read it, but it didn't register I guess with me or the CEC. I changed it to black arial, but I'm not sure if you feel it complies now or not. I can take out the italics and make it all the same size, but it makes it confusing i think. Well, let me know. Some good entries, a couple I had trouble knowing if there were TWO stories though. :))
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Bold and italics are fine, I think as is the size.
Comment from Debbie Pope
OH, I am confused, but so intrigued. The first story is right up my alley. I love mysteries and drama. You have definitely got a great beginning going. I hope there is a contest to finish this one.
As to the second story, I would read it just to see what is going on with that flounder.
These are both great hooks. You should do very well in the contest.
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OH, I am confused, but so intrigued. The first story is right up my alley. I love mysteries and drama. You have definitely got a great beginning going. I hope there is a contest to finish this one.
As to the second story, I would read it just to see what is going on with that flounder.
These are both great hooks. You should do very well in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
Comment from trailblazer101
I don't know if I'd call them epic but the first one caught my attention. The premise is a grabber for sure. Escaped convict acting as a witness for a DA? Very good. Lots of places to go with that one.
I liked the idea he has with just a simple change from black "dress up" to "normal black" as very intriguing.
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I don't know if I'd call them epic but the first one caught my attention. The premise is a grabber for sure. Escaped convict acting as a witness for a DA? Very good. Lots of places to go with that one.
I liked the idea he has with just a simple change from black "dress up" to "normal black" as very intriguing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
Comment from Zue65
It seems your story was delving on a character with conflicting personalities. A character with the devil and a murderous soul deep within the psyche of the main character assuming a normal personality that he himself could not understand. Anyway you are a skilled prose writer. thanks for sharing.
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It seems your story was delving on a character with conflicting personalities. A character with the devil and a murderous soul deep within the psyche of the main character assuming a normal personality that he himself could not understand. Anyway you are a skilled prose writer. thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2018
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest submission and should do well.
Washington has vanished without a trace for all intents and purposes.
We all say this, but I have no idea what it means.
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This is an excellent contest submission and should do well.
Washington has vanished without a trace for all intents and purposes.
We all say this, but I have no idea what it means.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018