haiku (sudden frost blankets)
Contest Entry33 total reviews
Comment from BelieveInTruthAndGood
This is a wonderful poem, which makes me envision such a beautiful cold picture. Flowers covered with frost and the lack of sound but presence of crickets, all that is like a postcard, a still of nature, that once was thriving and now just sleeps until the sun melts the frost.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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This is a wonderful poem, which makes me envision such a beautiful cold picture. Flowers covered with frost and the lack of sound but presence of crickets, all that is like a postcard, a still of nature, that once was thriving and now just sleeps until the sun melts the frost.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review!
diane
Comment from kahpot
An excellent Haiku as the coming of the frost would certainly silence the music of the crickets, very well done with great artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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An excellent Haiku as the coming of the frost would certainly silence the music of the crickets, very well done with great artwork, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Hello kahpot!
The crickets are definitely stilled and silent today as the gales of November have descended upon northern Michigan.
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
Always,
diane
Comment from JennaG
Oh, I really like this haiku!!! You've created beautiful imagery with your words, not just for the eyes but for the ears as well. I can almost hear that autumnal silence when the crickets' songs are no more. We're in that season now where I'm at. I live in Nebraska and the goldenrod is our state flower which made me enjoy your haiku even more! This is very skillfully written and was a pleasure to read. Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Oh, I really like this haiku!!! You've created beautiful imagery with your words, not just for the eyes but for the ears as well. I can almost hear that autumnal silence when the crickets' songs are no more. We're in that season now where I'm at. I live in Nebraska and the goldenrod is our state flower which made me enjoy your haiku even more! This is very skillfully written and was a pleasure to read. Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Hello Jenna!
Oh! You are one of the few reviewers who know of goldenrod, but even I did not know it is Nebraska's state flower. So many folks in Michigan consider it a weed! How rude! I love it in fall arrangements, and thankfully, I am not allergic to it.
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Dawnya
This is a beautiful poem that touches the senses of touch, sight and sound. It invokes a memory of a moment in time, a distinct and serene experience. Lovely. Well done.
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This is a beautiful poem that touches the senses of touch, sight and sound. It invokes a memory of a moment in time, a distinct and serene experience. Lovely. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
Comment from estory
I think the last line really nailed this haiku for me. You had the great balance and the nature image of traditional haiku, and the epiphany moment in that image of the cricket's song stilled. This makes the poem a contemplation on life and death, and relevant to the human experience, somehow often times lacking in many haiku written here. estory
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I think the last line really nailed this haiku for me. You had the great balance and the nature image of traditional haiku, and the epiphany moment in that image of the cricket's song stilled. This makes the poem a contemplation on life and death, and relevant to the human experience, somehow often times lacking in many haiku written here. estory
Comment Written 06-Nov-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Sudden Frost Blankets, presented in a 5-7-5 formatting, depicts one of those season announcing chills that flash freeze all the outdoors as if to preserve it.
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This haiku, Sudden Frost Blankets, presented in a 5-7-5 formatting, depicts one of those season announcing chills that flash freeze all the outdoors as if to preserve it.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Diane,
You've captured the essence of the picture just great. I always love to look at the blanket of frost, but I find it frightful to walk on it. The dogs think it is fun for about five minutes and then they want to come back in.
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
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Hi, Diane,
You've captured the essence of the picture just great. I always love to look at the blanket of frost, but I find it frightful to walk on it. The dogs think it is fun for about five minutes and then they want to come back in.
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
This is superb, diane. Such clear imagery and very easy to take a photograph of this, and the cricket's silence is a terrific satori line. The atmosphere also makes this a delight to read.
I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee with this gem. :))
Gloria
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This is superb, diane. Such clear imagery and very easy to take a photograph of this, and the cricket's silence is a terrific satori line. The atmosphere also makes this a delight to read.
I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee with this gem. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
Comment from Galactia
Hi
What an excellent written haiku poem. Last line was brilliant. Perfect 5'7'5 syllable count across all lines. Presented well.
Great job and Good luck
Regards
Tia
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Hi
What an excellent written haiku poem. Last line was brilliant. Perfect 5'7'5 syllable count across all lines. Presented well.
Great job and Good luck
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 05-Nov-2018
Comment from fayesh
Your haiku describes a beautiful winter scene and the effect snow has on the more vocal of nature's creatures - crickets. The imagery was well done. The final line a perfect conclusion.
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Your haiku describes a beautiful winter scene and the effect snow has on the more vocal of nature's creatures - crickets. The imagery was well done. The final line a perfect conclusion.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2018