You've Got To Be Joking
What the f...k3 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
semen not semon. This may be a contest entry but i find the contest below the belt subject matter. You have made light of it; what have we writers come to? What the F..CK is spot on for a stupid idea. You did well with your screed.
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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semen not semon. This may be a contest entry but i find the contest below the belt subject matter. You have made light of it; what have we writers come to? What the F..CK is spot on for a stupid idea. You did well with your screed.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2018
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Yes , lol.
Thank you for your review
Comment from Ricky1024
Well let me just first say "What the f--- holy ejaculation Batman I think Bobbin just got robbed of his virginity!
This was quite interesting and very well written.
Sorta wants you to wear a Trojan in Battle.
Keeps you kind of like captured as the flying penis was chasing you.
Good thing it never caught you, cuz it if your. a female writing this?
She probably would have gotten pregnant in a minute!
But...
Now good luck in...
'The flying penis contest!
I hope you win a lot of dicks or bucks!
LOL!
Ricky...
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Well let me just first say "What the f--- holy ejaculation Batman I think Bobbin just got robbed of his virginity!
This was quite interesting and very well written.
Sorta wants you to wear a Trojan in Battle.
Keeps you kind of like captured as the flying penis was chasing you.
Good thing it never caught you, cuz it if your. a female writing this?
She probably would have gotten pregnant in a minute!
But...
Now good luck in...
'The flying penis contest!
I hope you win a lot of dicks or bucks!
LOL!
Ricky...
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Lol , thanks
Comment from Sherechita
Your story is highly amusing! The first line grabbed me and never let go. Well done. My only suggestion is in your punctuation. There can be no comma or period after an exclamation mark or a question mark, as they end a sentence. Therefore, the next word is the beginning of a new sentence. For example, this sentence "...for you to get near me ! ", I screamed" should read, "...for you to get near me!" I screamed." Also, there are no spaces between the last or first letter and any punctuation. Your story is full of these errors, as was seen in the example. Clean punctuation makes it read better and it is a marvelous story that deserves proper punctuation. Seriously, I loved this story! Your imagination is wonderfully quirky! Thanks again and good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Your story is highly amusing! The first line grabbed me and never let go. Well done. My only suggestion is in your punctuation. There can be no comma or period after an exclamation mark or a question mark, as they end a sentence. Therefore, the next word is the beginning of a new sentence. For example, this sentence "...for you to get near me ! ", I screamed" should read, "...for you to get near me!" I screamed." Also, there are no spaces between the last or first letter and any punctuation. Your story is full of these errors, as was seen in the example. Clean punctuation makes it read better and it is a marvelous story that deserves proper punctuation. Seriously, I loved this story! Your imagination is wonderfully quirky! Thanks again and good luck!
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your advice : )
