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Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Lies Tell The Truth On Lies."Wisdom calls Aloud.
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Comment from Jerri Haussler
I really liked the surprise ending, although both adults are, therefore, immoral. The artwork is good.
The line that reads: "That's what he always lie to me about" has a typo. I think you mean lies instead of lie.
You might doublecheck the placement of your commas.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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I really liked the surprise ending, although both adults are, therefore, immoral. The artwork is good.
The line that reads: "That's what he always lie to me about" has a typo. I think you mean lies instead of lie.
You might doublecheck the placement of your commas.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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HELLO JERRI HAUSSLER: Thank you for your comments here. You are appreciated. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. If it was a contest you would win walking away. It's very clever. I love clever writing. It shows a brilliant mind at work. There aren't many clever writers on FanStory.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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This is excellent. If it was a contest you would win walking away. It's very clever. I love clever writing. It shows a brilliant mind at work. There aren't many clever writers on FanStory.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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HELLO THOMAS: Thank you for your comments here. You are appreciated. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Lady Jane
"That's what he always lie to me about,"
replied girlfriend. "Yeah, he has a coupla beers,
and a few other alcohol cheers." - this stanza- I can hear her final line ... It gave me a chuckle. I know it's serious, but the wit was well spun.
Hahaha, I did NOT see that ending coming. I'd italicize that final line for full effect. What an interesting, but so very well written piece. I have seen this scenario play out one to many times (minus the 'not your child' portion) in the lives of friends and family. You're right. As grandma alway said, "a lie can travel the earth three times while truth is still lacing her shoes.' Truth does eventually catch up. That darned waiting though... LOL.
Nice writing here Rhonnie. The format, content, verbiage worked well and shared a witty write, penned by a gifted poet.
janelle
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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"That's what he always lie to me about,"
replied girlfriend. "Yeah, he has a coupla beers,
and a few other alcohol cheers." - this stanza- I can hear her final line ... It gave me a chuckle. I know it's serious, but the wit was well spun.
Hahaha, I did NOT see that ending coming. I'd italicize that final line for full effect. What an interesting, but so very well written piece. I have seen this scenario play out one to many times (minus the 'not your child' portion) in the lives of friends and family. You're right. As grandma alway said, "a lie can travel the earth three times while truth is still lacing her shoes.' Truth does eventually catch up. That darned waiting though... LOL.
Nice writing here Rhonnie. The format, content, verbiage worked well and shared a witty write, penned by a gifted poet.
janelle
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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HELLO JACHERIE: You always give me such kind comments. Thank you, my friend. You are appreciated. Cordially: rhonnie69.