Silent Witness
I saw the pain decide for you...10 total reviews
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is excellent. You deserve to be in first place. I hope you go all the way. I also entered this contest, but your contest is much better. Good luck. I think you'll win.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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This is excellent. You deserve to be in first place. I hope you go all the way. I also entered this contest, but your contest is much better. Good luck. I think you'll win.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Yeah, not holding my breath, Thomas, but thanx for the shot in the arm. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from MissMerri
I'm not sure I understood correctly, but I got the impression YOU are the only thing behind the door, peering out, watching someone you care about, someone who has been hurt, but determined to get even. Am I right? I enjoyed the uniqueness of this poem. It has good rhymes, unevenly spaced but still quite effective. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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I'm not sure I understood correctly, but I got the impression YOU are the only thing behind the door, peering out, watching someone you care about, someone who has been hurt, but determined to get even. Am I right? I enjoyed the uniqueness of this poem. It has good rhymes, unevenly spaced but still quite effective. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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You most certainly did get it right, Miss Merri! :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Nanny 6
Oh... This is a creepy dark mystery poem... I love it! kind of has a Poe feel to it... Really good mystery in crime I like the layout and I love the story. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Oh... This is a creepy dark mystery poem... I love it! kind of has a Poe feel to it... Really good mystery in crime I like the layout and I love the story. Good luck in the contest.
Judy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Judy -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Silent Witness, captures a scene of revenge that seems to have been bloody and aggressive. Some wisely sought shelter.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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This poem, Silent Witness, captures a scene of revenge that seems to have been bloody and aggressive. Some wisely sought shelter.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Bill -- always appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the pain in our hearts that we hide for many people, until one day someone hiding behind the door see our pain and sometimes decide to end our pain for us.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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A very well-written poem about the pain in our hearts that we hide for many people, until one day someone hiding behind the door see our pain and sometimes decide to end our pain for us.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Sandra -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Kelly Hanna
This poem was decent in rhymes but the story of a girl who is tormented but breaks free from the pain and embraces herself, is where I was most interested. I liked that premise very much. Your presentation was good as well with the black and the red. It created a powerful mood. I liked that you mentioned red silk. It reminds me of power. Good write for the contest!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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This poem was decent in rhymes but the story of a girl who is tormented but breaks free from the pain and embraces herself, is where I was most interested. I liked that premise very much. Your presentation was good as well with the black and the red. It created a powerful mood. I liked that you mentioned red silk. It reminds me of power. Good write for the contest!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Kelly -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from silverthreads
Love the color scheme you chose to accompany your submission. I enjoyed the read....rich with metaphors. The image you chose to set this poem of was striking. I enjoyed reading this poem today. Good luck.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Love the color scheme you chose to accompany your submission. I enjoyed the read....rich with metaphors. The image you chose to set this poem of was striking. I enjoyed reading this poem today. Good luck.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, silverthreads -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Lady Jane
Whoa! The image, so very captivating and the formatting of this poem. The subtle change in font size, the build up, and the color choice was poetically genius. I found the words riveting and mysterious. I saw no errors. Just a fluid write from couplet to couplet and that ending...well, well, she got the last scowl, I bet :) Wonderful writing. Wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Janelle
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Whoa! The image, so very captivating and the formatting of this poem. The subtle change in font size, the build up, and the color choice was poetically genius. I found the words riveting and mysterious. I saw no errors. Just a fluid write from couplet to couplet and that ending...well, well, she got the last scowl, I bet :) Wonderful writing. Wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Janelle
Comment Written 26-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Janelle -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from Deb Kincaid
Wow, very cool! I wasn't sure I was going to like the rhyming, but I actually did; it didn't seem forced, but rather the natural course. Even from the beginning there was an ominous mood, even before the change to the red dress. This was a great poem. I don't believe I've read a mystery/crime poem before, but I was intrigued. It had an Edgar Allen Poe effect. The image you chose also complements the text perfectly. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Wow, very cool! I wasn't sure I was going to like the rhyming, but I actually did; it didn't seem forced, but rather the natural course. Even from the beginning there was an ominous mood, even before the change to the red dress. This was a great poem. I don't believe I've read a mystery/crime poem before, but I was intrigued. It had an Edgar Allen Poe effect. The image you chose also complements the text perfectly. Well done!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for the read and review, Deb -- appreciate your time. :) ;) This one started off with the destination in mind, but the path to getting there changed along the way....but I was pleased with the outcome and I am so very glad that you seemed to enjoy! :) :) May you have a wonderful remainder of the weekend filled with lots of unexpected surprises where you least expect them....all that put a smile on your face!! :) :)
Comment from country ranch writer
Like it or not words hurt and destroy many a person because of it, bullies come in all shapes and sizes. Some people are killed because of their harsh words people tend to lose it and snap.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Like it or not words hurt and destroy many a person because of it, bullies come in all shapes and sizes. Some people are killed because of their harsh words people tend to lose it and snap.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thanx for dropping in for the read and review, Country Ranch - always appreciated! :)
