I Skip Among the Stars
A Quatrain with an ALMOST Chain Rhyme33 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This chain poem, I Skip Among the Stars, has the proper framing (noting the exception of the final stanza) and finds one under the open sky and exploring the galaxy as sleep puts out the stars. Nice.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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This chain poem, I Skip Among the Stars, has the proper framing (noting the exception of the final stanza) and finds one under the open sky and exploring the galaxy as sleep puts out the stars. Nice.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Bill.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a fun and happy verse.
You did a good job of meeting your challenge.
Love the picture as well.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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I think this is a fun and happy verse.
You did a good job of meeting your challenge.
Love the picture as well.
Well done and thank you for sharing this with us.
Sharon
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Sharon. Good to see.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvonne,
This was lovely and reminded me that the moon's cycle brings so much beauty, joy, and change. Your quatrain with the chain rhyme was delightful and I envy your abilities in poetry.
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Hi, Yvonne,
This was lovely and reminded me that the moon's cycle brings so much beauty, joy, and change. Your quatrain with the chain rhyme was delightful and I envy your abilities in poetry.
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you for such lovely remarks, Patty. I truly appreciate them.
Comment from Kelly Hanna
What a lovely poem with a lovely presentation! I love the rhyming. It wasn't typical but was very easy to follow. The entire piece flowed very nicely to the reader. The tone was soft and accepting of the night and the dreams that it mat bring! A great write! Congratulations!
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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What a lovely poem with a lovely presentation! I love the rhyming. It wasn't typical but was very easy to follow. The entire piece flowed very nicely to the reader. The tone was soft and accepting of the night and the dreams that it mat bring! A great write! Congratulations!
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you. I'm happy you like it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I took a trip through the stars here in your inter galactic Milky Way ride! The man on the moon smiling and waving you goodnight, a sweet and fantastical write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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I took a trip through the stars here in your inter galactic Milky Way ride! The man on the moon smiling and waving you goodnight, a sweet and fantastical write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you. I'm happy you like it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-Very vivid imagery and good
flow of ideas in the poem.
-I like the image in this line:
"put on Imagination's magic cap"
-The ending is a good one, and
rounds out the poem.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-Very vivid imagery and good
flow of ideas in the poem.
-I like the image in this line:
"put on Imagination's magic cap"
-The ending is a good one, and
rounds out the poem.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this great review. I'm glad you like that line.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
A beautiful poem for the challenge
it can be rhymed as you have, like the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam
or with the third rhyme starting the next quatrain, like Frost in Stopping by Woods.
Either way a challenging poem and you've written it quite well
linking all the heavenly bodies and the Music of the Spheres
I love to skip among the stars, too.
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Hello Yvonne,
A beautiful poem for the challenge
it can be rhymed as you have, like the Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam
or with the third rhyme starting the next quatrain, like Frost in Stopping by Woods.
Either way a challenging poem and you've written it quite well
linking all the heavenly bodies and the Music of the Spheres
I love to skip among the stars, too.
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you for telling me this. I feel much better.
Comment from Gloria ....
I love it Yvonne. Your rhyme and rhythm as always impeccable and a journey through the stars at night has never been more delightful.
Great job and a pleasure to review. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I love it Yvonne. Your rhyme and rhythm as always impeccable and a journey through the stars at night has never been more delightful.
Great job and a pleasure to review. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you. I'm so glad you like it.
Comment from mermaids
There is a light feel and flow to your words. There is also a dream like feeling that comes forth from your words. "Saturn's xylophonic rings" is a wonderful use of words, it makes the planets alive with music.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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There is a light feel and flow to your words. There is also a dream like feeling that comes forth from your words. "Saturn's xylophonic rings" is a wonderful use of words, it makes the planets alive with music.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Thank you for this great review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Not right? Looks fine to me. Awesome, actually. Love the topic and the imagination you put into it.
Play tunes on Saturn's xylophonic rings,
arpeggios immortals long to sing.
All those big words really fit. Love the last line too. Superb job!
If you're talking about b in stanza 1 being diff from b in stanza 2, etc., I finally noticed that. But it has to be really hard to use the same b's etc. every time.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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Not right? Looks fine to me. Awesome, actually. Love the topic and the imagination you put into it.
Play tunes on Saturn's xylophonic rings,
arpeggios immortals long to sing.
All those big words really fit. Love the last line too. Superb job!
If you're talking about b in stanza 1 being diff from b in stanza 2, etc., I finally noticed that. But it has to be really hard to use the same b's etc. every time.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018
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I'm so happy you like it. I'm going to do another soon, and get it right. However, this way, I get to keep the championship for always getting something wrong. LOL.
