Comment from forestport12

Excellent

I really loved the twist at the end. A big surprise makes it look like a winner. Flow of writing and the economy words was a good lesson in this flaming flash. Best of luck.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018

Thanks so much for the read and your encouraging comments.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

You mention the hair color of the woman in your story as being "flaxen". Flaxen is a pale yellow, the color of flax.
However, your accompanying picture is clearly that of a gorgeous redhead.
Perhaps the redhead is the man's soon to be abandoned wife?
Anyhow regardless of that, I did like the slight twist at the end revealing that the man is already married.
Good luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

Changed the hair to strawberry hope it works better with the pic. Thanks for your read and suggestion for improvement.

reply by Dean Kuch on 21-Oct-2018

You're more than welcome, it's a great story with a legitimate shot at winning the contest.
Good luck!

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

Thanks.

Comment from writer_13

Excellent

A fun story in just 50 words. I love the way it starts with the character talking about finding true love and then at the end stating that he has to tell his wife. It is hard to do flash fiction and give a complete story and you did it well.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

Thanks so much for your read and your comments. Much appreciated.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

He he he, this is a sweet write and of course we are in awe of some who walk into our life unexpectedly and some jump ship! He he he, I loved your clever words, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

Thanks so much for your read and your comments. Much appreciated. Ho, Ho, Ho.