Candy Canes & Coffins
Funeral Failures10 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Oh my goodness, families can be horribly damaged, I don't think there's a family completely free of "issues" my friend. Thanks for sharing, it seems like you belong to a normal family. The shifting of the coffin must have given everyone a scar. Beautfully written, great entry in this contest, well done, I can see why you won, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Oh my goodness, families can be horribly damaged, I don't think there's a family completely free of "issues" my friend. Thanks for sharing, it seems like you belong to a normal family. The shifting of the coffin must have given everyone a scar. Beautfully written, great entry in this contest, well done, I can see why you won, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I appreciate your feedback - it was certainly a surprise to win the contest as I was wondering where on earth could such a piece ever fit. However, I am finding that it seems to strike a chord with a lot of folks in many different ways which I am finding quite interesting. I am happy I posted it now.
Tirzah
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Well done
Comment from prettybluebirds
Well, I can see why you don't care for candy canes. That incident you wrote about would be enough to turn anyone off. So glad you won the contest, you deserved it with this writing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Well, I can see why you don't care for candy canes. That incident you wrote about would be enough to turn anyone off. So glad you won the contest, you deserved it with this writing.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your feedback. It was an interesting write. I appreciate your kind words.
Tirzah
Comment from Cherubel
Such a cool story in that She just didn't think. That's what you were thinking..!ha ha it was funny the way you told it. Next time do it in your own voice, the candy cane may lose it's 'taste'..!
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Such a cool story in that She just didn't think. That's what you were thinking..!ha ha it was funny the way you told it. Next time do it in your own voice, the candy cane may lose it's 'taste'..!
Comment Written 21-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I greatly appreciate your comment as well as your feedback. Tastes... I dunno! Ewww.... blah! :)
Tirzah
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is a great simile:"Deaths and funerals pile up like firewood. People " It really creates the mood. A funny thing about BLP characteristics. I went to a workshop on the subject and after putting up the list of characteristics, he said, I'm sensing many of you are getting nervous. I was wondering, myself at the list of some of my traits. The speaker said, "we all have a summer home on Borderline Island. Buy some decide to stay longer or even move in." Isn't that great. You can use that if you want to. So now if we used to like candy canes, not a chance...lol I never like them anyway. This is funny. I am voting for this.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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This is a great simile:"Deaths and funerals pile up like firewood. People " It really creates the mood. A funny thing about BLP characteristics. I went to a workshop on the subject and after putting up the list of characteristics, he said, I'm sensing many of you are getting nervous. I was wondering, myself at the list of some of my traits. The speaker said, "we all have a summer home on Borderline Island. Buy some decide to stay longer or even move in." Isn't that great. You can use that if you want to. So now if we used to like candy canes, not a chance...lol I never like them anyway. This is funny. I am voting for this.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I greatly appreciate your thoughts and feedback. I am happy you enjoyed it!
Tirzah
Comment from barkingdog
What a great reason to give up candy canes. haha
Better candy canes than blow jobs ... what are the odds.
I really enjoyed this story about this kooky family, grandpa's funeral, dying so as not to have to shovel snow(lol).
You opened with candy canes and took the reader full circle back to them.
Well done.
I loved the many bits of humor through out. Fine writing.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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What a great reason to give up candy canes. haha
Better candy canes than blow jobs ... what are the odds.
I really enjoyed this story about this kooky family, grandpa's funeral, dying so as not to have to shovel snow(lol).
You opened with candy canes and took the reader full circle back to them.
Well done.
I loved the many bits of humor through out. Fine writing.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I did think twice on whether or not to post this piece. Your comments make me happy I chose to post it. Thank you for your feedback. I am happy you enjoyed it.
Tirzah
Comment from Insider98
Well, that was definitely unique. It is greatly written. The buildup for you disliking candy canes was excellent. Every single information you gave felt essential. I think you'll do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Well, that was definitely unique. It is greatly written. The buildup for you disliking candy canes was excellent. Every single information you gave felt essential. I think you'll do well in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I tend to get into a lot of info sometimes so that is nice feedback. I appreciate the feedback.
Tirzah
Comment from Ricky1024
This was lengthy but we'll written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And it read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this one and have a blessed day and week.
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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This was lengthy but we'll written Rich in Theme and Imagery.
And it read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this one and have a blessed day and week.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 19-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your input! I greatly appreciate your thoughts! I'm trying to decide if I should push myself further with a writing hobby/career or not. I don't necessarily want to hear flowers and hearts reviews... but I did get a spiteful the other day! It is a balance I suppose! ;) I appreciate your feedback.
Tirzah
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent contest entry. Very funny. When I was a preacher and used to conduct funerals, a woman stood up and shouted. that the dead woman was a demon and was in hell. I said sit down and shut up. At the graveside service, the music director and I barely escaped with our lives.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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This is an excellent contest entry. Very funny. When I was a preacher and used to conduct funerals, a woman stood up and shouted. that the dead woman was a demon and was in hell. I said sit down and shut up. At the graveside service, the music director and I barely escaped with our lives.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your feedback! Yes, life can boil down to how you look at it. Vinegar or Cyanide? Hmmmm?? :). LOL Sometimes, you can't win!
I appreciate the response!
Tirzah
Comment from Rontreharne
Thank you for your contribution. You have quite an interesting, if that is the right word, family member. This was but sad and funny at the same time, if that makes sense. Definitely an event that is solely yours.. we hope. Nice work.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your contribution. You have quite an interesting, if that is the right word, family member. This was but sad and funny at the same time, if that makes sense. Definitely an event that is solely yours.. we hope. Nice work.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate it!
Tirzah
Comment from Christiana Jolaoso
Good one! I love how simple you were in your use of words. Screw's one funny person, by the way.. living her life her own way! The manner of narration was quite unique, too. Good luck!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Good one! I love how simple you were in your use of words. Screw's one funny person, by the way.. living her life her own way! The manner of narration was quite unique, too. Good luck!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2018
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Thank you! I appreciate the feedback!
Tirzah