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FAMILY TIES.

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"ALL IN THE FAMILY."

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Comment from Popcorn69
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This poem could almost a romantic entry, but I like that you put it under family. Money does not make the family, but love does. The expression of hugs between family members is showing the outpouring of love between one another. I enjoyed reading this poem, and I look forward to reading more of your writing.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2018

Comment from Lady Jane
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"I don't need a chest
full of gold.

"I just need someone,
to have and to hold." - I'd reformat it this way. It think the impact will be a bit more fluid. Well done, Rhonnie. Such poignant words and the sentiment is well spoken. Excellent presentation also...nicely done!
Janelle

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2018