FAMILY TIES.
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Comment from Kay Seed
You have a very strong voice. I picture this poem describing the ups and downs of a dating relationship. One grammar correction to point out is "Til should be 'Til. The piece makes me feel for the author and the couple. I'm rooting for them and at the same time feel it might be better for them to break up if they are fighting and hurting each other. Relationships are tough.
-Kay
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You have a very strong voice. I picture this poem describing the ups and downs of a dating relationship. One grammar correction to point out is "Til should be 'Til. The piece makes me feel for the author and the couple. I'm rooting for them and at the same time feel it might be better for them to break up if they are fighting and hurting each other. Relationships are tough.
-Kay
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from meeshu
This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, rhonnie. every marriage is a give and take and up and down, as you put so well. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
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This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage. Well done, rhonnie. every marriage is a give and take and up and down, as you put so well. I wish you well in all your future endeavors.......................meeshu
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018