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Comment from Ben1
It is a good poem about Chamberlain the cover war hero. I studied many battles from the civil war though his charge is what first fascinated me with the topic. I'm sorry I did not review sooner it was the first time making a contest and I never really stayed on track with it. Good job again, I'm glad I found someone with the same fascination as me.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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It is a good poem about Chamberlain the cover war hero. I studied many battles from the civil war though his charge is what first fascinated me with the topic. I'm sorry I did not review sooner it was the first time making a contest and I never really stayed on track with it. Good job again, I'm glad I found someone with the same fascination as me.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2020
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Thank you very much for digging into my portfolio to read and review this work. I appreciate the six star rating. I apologize for taking so long to respond.
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is an excellent written poem about Charmberlain. I have given you 4 stars as this competition required a freestyle poem and to give you the motivation to change it to a freestyle format as there is only 2 days left and I would like to see this horse in the race. Not to be put down at the start line.
Suggestion using your own words but I would still work on it but atleast getting it into a freestyle type format.
Before the end of Gettysburg
One of Marine's favorite son's
had led a bayonet charge
Once complete
Battalion won
Much to the rebelā??s woe
Chamberlain man had no ammunition
Such a brave movie
Today is taught to our troops
For the confident leadership
Generalship was given to Joshua Chamberlain
Regards
Tia
P.S. I have a question what makes it a brave move, slightly confusing.
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Hi
This is an excellent written poem about Charmberlain. I have given you 4 stars as this competition required a freestyle poem and to give you the motivation to change it to a freestyle format as there is only 2 days left and I would like to see this horse in the race. Not to be put down at the start line.
Suggestion using your own words but I would still work on it but atleast getting it into a freestyle type format.
Before the end of Gettysburg
One of Marine's favorite son's
had led a bayonet charge
Once complete
Battalion won
Much to the rebelā??s woe
Chamberlain man had no ammunition
Such a brave movie
Today is taught to our troops
For the confident leadership
Generalship was given to Joshua Chamberlain
Regards
Tia
P.S. I have a question what makes it a brave move, slightly confusing.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
Comment from nor84
You might want to revise the entry. Free verse can have some rhyme, but only an occasional rhyme. It cannot have a rhyme pattern as this one does. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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You might want to revise the entry. Free verse can have some rhyme, but only an occasional rhyme. It cannot have a rhyme pattern as this one does. Good luck.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2018
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work.
Comment from trailblazer101
A bayonet charge with or without ammo is a scary thing at the best of times, although such things were more likely in WW! and prior. You were right. it doesn't ryhme and your meter is way off even for free verse.
But it's historical and an important moment in such.
You brought it to our attention
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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A bayonet charge with or without ammo is a scary thing at the best of times, although such things were more likely in WW! and prior. You were right. it doesn't ryhme and your meter is way off even for free verse.
But it's historical and an important moment in such.
You brought it to our attention
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Thanks for reading and reviewing
Comment from kiwijenny
Thanks for teaching us in this poem..
In free verse meter isn't important it s more about conveying exactly what you want to say
Well penned..and great photo
God bless
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Thanks for teaching us in this poem..
In free verse meter isn't important it s more about conveying exactly what you want to say
Well penned..and great photo
God bless
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Thank you for reading and the great review.
Comment from Sally Law
I am the keeper of my family's ancestry. I admire and love historical pieces of our nations heroes. I had relatives that fought against each other during the Civil War. I found a trove of information in the war archives. I think you did a fine job here with General Joshua Chamberlain. Great photo.
All my best in the War contest!
Sally
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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I am the keeper of my family's ancestry. I admire and love historical pieces of our nations heroes. I had relatives that fought against each other during the Civil War. I found a trove of information in the war archives. I think you did a fine job here with General Joshua Chamberlain. Great photo.
All my best in the War contest!
Sally
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Thanks, he is one of my personal heroes. I knew about him before the movie Gettysburg made him a household name. Thanks for reading and reviewing my work.
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You?re welcome! My honor indeed!
Comment from country ranch writer
The man did what he had to do in order to survive. He couldn't let his troops down so he led the charge with what he had at hand to use.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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The man did what he had to do in order to survive. He couldn't let his troops down so he led the charge with what he had at hand to use.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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Yup.
Thanks for your review and 5 star ranking.
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
He was a very brave man indeed. I wish we had some like him today. Unfortunately, Ever since Korea, it seems that all the armed force can do is retreat.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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He was a very brave man indeed. I wish we had some like him today. Unfortunately, Ever since Korea, it seems that all the armed force can do is retreat.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018
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You're right about that. It used to be war was about taking territory and keeping it, not since Vietnam. Thanks for reading and your 5 star review.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words were strong, interesting
and a great tribute to Joshua Chamberlain. The reader pondered
on his leadership. The artwork is perfect and compliments both
the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Excellent Poem! The author's words were strong, interesting
and a great tribute to Joshua Chamberlain. The reader pondered
on his leadership. The artwork is perfect and compliments both
the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate your reading and reviewing my work.
Comment from Ben Colder
I assure you the last thing a soldier wished to hear is fix bayonets. Nothing can raise the hair on the back of the neck is hearing men screaming at the top of their voices and running toward the enemy with 11 inches of cold steel looking at you.
Been there done that. My appreciation to the writer. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
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I assure you the last thing a soldier wished to hear is fix bayonets. Nothing can raise the hair on the back of the neck is hearing men screaming at the top of their voices and running toward the enemy with 11 inches of cold steel looking at you.
Been there done that. My appreciation to the writer. Best wishes.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your rating and review.