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Comment from jenintorre
Congratulations Michael for winning the contest. So well deserved.I have just read your story and Wow, that is what I call exceptional writing. Love Jen.
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Congratulations Michael for winning the contest. So well deserved.I have just read your story and Wow, that is what I call exceptional writing. Love Jen.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Jen
So many touching and well-written entries. I'm humbled you enjoyed mine so much. Big smiles. Thanks a million. Love, mike
Comment from tempeste
Ciao !
I voted for you and I am happy to see you are ahead ..You deserve to win.
Your story was bittersweet..Sally's kiss , your first , brought you some tenderness during that moment of darkness ...and more extraordinary the power of that kiss continued to have a postive affect on you throughout your life ...you passed on through your own actions the same kindness and thoughtfulness to other people.
A lot of children growing up in an abusive family become arid but you remained the sensitve child you were despite the circumstances.
You loved ,cared and protected your mamma.
Sally's kiss wasn't wasted on you ...you made her gift even more previous because the positive effect it had on you as a child continued also in adulthood , greatly influencing you on how you chose to treat others, especially women .
Your story touched me ..all the best .
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Ciao !
I voted for you and I am happy to see you are ahead ..You deserve to win.
Your story was bittersweet..Sally's kiss , your first , brought you some tenderness during that moment of darkness ...and more extraordinary the power of that kiss continued to have a postive affect on you throughout your life ...you passed on through your own actions the same kindness and thoughtfulness to other people.
A lot of children growing up in an abusive family become arid but you remained the sensitve child you were despite the circumstances.
You loved ,cared and protected your mamma.
Sally's kiss wasn't wasted on you ...you made her gift even more previous because the positive effect it had on you as a child continued also in adulthood , greatly influencing you on how you chose to treat others, especially women .
Your story touched me ..all the best .
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Hi, Tempeste
I'm so humbled by your lovely review and kind words. I DID win and I'm so pleased. All of the entries were so real and well-written. I'm honoured you chose mine as your favourite. You're the best. :)) mike
Comment from Lady Jane
or your next. - 'you're'
I attempt to defend and comfort anyone who needs (it), when I am able. - no comma needed after 'it'
What an amazingly tender memory you've shared amongst the other not so tender ones, dear writer. This was well polished and consistent in flow and pace. I found only the two tiny, almost unrecognizable spags, and am still giving this a 6 as it is so perfectly driven through memorable, heartfelt words. Sally did change your life. I can tell as I felt your pain, concern, and joy with every stroke of the keyboard as I read this entry. I wish you the best of luck and God bless...one act is all it takes to make or break a person. I'm glad Sally chose to ACT!.
Janelle
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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or your next. - 'you're'
I attempt to defend and comfort anyone who needs (it), when I am able. - no comma needed after 'it'
What an amazingly tender memory you've shared amongst the other not so tender ones, dear writer. This was well polished and consistent in flow and pace. I found only the two tiny, almost unrecognizable spags, and am still giving this a 6 as it is so perfectly driven through memorable, heartfelt words. Sally did change your life. I can tell as I felt your pain, concern, and joy with every stroke of the keyboard as I read this entry. I wish you the best of luck and God bless...one act is all it takes to make or break a person. I'm glad Sally chose to ACT!.
Janelle
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2018
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Wow, what a beautiful and touching review, Janelle. I'm so pleased you enjoyed this and stunned by your kind words. Thanks so much and also for catching those two errors. After a couple reads, I just don't see them anymore. :)) mike
Comment from Ricky1024
This is'A I Remember Contest Entree' Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this and I will look forward to seeing from you soon.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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This is'A I Remember Contest Entree' Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It read well and Flowed well with no grammar issues.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both excellent and exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this and I will look forward to seeing from you soon.
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Anntonette
It starts off not so romantic but in the end it does show romance. I love how Sally changed your life, boys love sweet girls and Sally wasn't afraid of things like cooties or wasn't grossed out. Thank you for sharing x - Anntonette
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It starts off not so romantic but in the end it does show romance. I love how Sally changed your life, boys love sweet girls and Sally wasn't afraid of things like cooties or wasn't grossed out. Thank you for sharing x - Anntonette
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
