God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from l.raven
Hi Al, it is very important to believe in God...
but just always remember...reading His words is great...
but you have to live by them...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love your picture....very well written sweet guy....love Linda xxoo
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Hi Al, it is very important to believe in God...
but just always remember...reading His words is great...
but you have to live by them...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love your picture....very well written sweet guy....love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, I am once again captivated by the depth of this writer's heartfelt words, his religious passion and Christian humility, describing his communications with the Father humbly, reverently and as a witness conscientiously ordained - the verse flows easily in movement and the read, empathic...
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In my opinion, I am once again captivated by the depth of this writer's heartfelt words, his religious passion and Christian humility, describing his communications with the Father humbly, reverently and as a witness conscientiously ordained - the verse flows easily in movement and the read, empathic...
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from JLR
Your faith, passion for words, your artful selection and simply the pure honesty invoked by words written captured this reader instantly and in full immersion. I simply could not gift less than six for this piece is deserves a solid 10! Great success on this one.
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Your faith, passion for words, your artful selection and simply the pure honesty invoked by words written captured this reader instantly and in full immersion. I simply could not gift less than six for this piece is deserves a solid 10! Great success on this one.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
You deliver a beautifully penned Free Verse. The content is inspiring and filled with much for the reader to think about. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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You deliver a beautifully penned Free Verse. The content is inspiring and filled with much for the reader to think about. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2019
Comment from Dean Kuch
My soul reads for man to appreciateThou Thee thru Thy thine Words
You whisper me, or as those are scripted by sages and bards ... The word thou is a second person singular pronoun in English. ... Thou is the nominative form; the oblique/objective form is thee (functioning as both accusative and dative), the possessive is thy (adjective) or thine (adjective before a vowel or pronoun) and the reflexive is thyself.
Thou is the subject form (nominative), thee is the object form, and thy/thine is the possessive form. Before they all merged into the catch-all form you, English second person pronouns distinguished between nominative and objective, as well as between singular and plural (or formal).
Anyhow, with all of that being said, it is not enough--when one decides to use archaic English for effect--to toss thees, thous, and thines about haphazardly.
There is a proper order that must be followed grammatically.
Best just stick to modern-day English rather than attempting to sound Biblical, which is my guess as to why you've written this in the manner that you have.
God bless,
~Dean
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My soul reads for man to appreciate
You whisper me, or as those are scripted by sages and bards ... The word thou is a second person singular pronoun in English. ... Thou is the nominative form; the oblique/objective form is thee (functioning as both accusative and dative), the possessive is thy (adjective) or thine (adjective before a vowel or pronoun) and the reflexive is thyself.
Thou is the subject form (nominative), thee is the object form, and thy/thine is the possessive form. Before they all merged into the catch-all form you, English second person pronouns distinguished between nominative and objective, as well as between singular and plural (or formal).
Anyhow, with all of that being said, it is not enough--when one decides to use archaic English for effect--to toss thees, thous, and thines about haphazardly.
There is a proper order that must be followed grammatically.
Best just stick to modern-day English rather than attempting to sound Biblical, which is my guess as to why you've written this in the manner that you have.
God bless,
~Dean
Comment Written 21-Nov-2018
Comment from Roland Graham
Wonderful poem to display your spirituality and emotions towards God and the words that he says. The words are the poet's inspiration for works like these.
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Wonderful poem to display your spirituality and emotions towards God and the words that he says. The words are the poet's inspiration for works like these.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2018
Comment from GWinterwin
Great words to illustrate the want and intent to completely glorify God by living as close as possible to the true meaning of biblical truth. God bless you as your want to glorify God appears to be very real and important not only to you but to the world.
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Great words to illustrate the want and intent to completely glorify God by living as close as possible to the true meaning of biblical truth. God bless you as your want to glorify God appears to be very real and important not only to you but to the world.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
Comment from fayesh
Inspiring words. I think in the first line, however, the word should be "Thee thru" because "Thou" is used as a subject "you" and "Thee" is used as an "object" You. In this case, the you is the object of "appreciate" (thee).
Also you can't use the archaic forms of the second person and then jump to "you" in the second sentence and "your" in the second to the last stanza. Even the title uses the modern day "your" instead of "Thy" It's inconsistent. Why not just go with the modern day second person forms instead of trying to sound biblical.
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Inspiring words. I think in the first line, however, the word should be "Thee thru" because "Thou" is used as a subject "you" and "Thee" is used as an "object" You. In this case, the you is the object of "appreciate" (thee).
Also you can't use the archaic forms of the second person and then jump to "you" in the second sentence and "your" in the second to the last stanza. Even the title uses the modern day "your" instead of "Thy" It's inconsistent. Why not just go with the modern day second person forms instead of trying to sound biblical.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
Comment from RGstar
I liked this, though a little too many , perhaps, of 'thy' and 'thou'
One has to be careful when using archaic...there is a fine balance so it does not seem forced. Having said hat, this was not forced, but one could eliminate a few of the above.
Was not too clear on the blow;
"You whisper me, or as those are scripted by sages and bards"
Something not quite right there, perhaps could have a second look, just cant seem to grip it.
Having said that, I thought nicely written. Deep in its conviction, clear in its view and delivery.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
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I liked this, though a little too many , perhaps, of 'thy' and 'thou'
One has to be careful when using archaic...there is a fine balance so it does not seem forced. Having said hat, this was not forced, but one could eliminate a few of the above.
Was not too clear on the blow;
"You whisper me, or as those are scripted by sages and bards"
Something not quite right there, perhaps could have a second look, just cant seem to grip it.
Having said that, I thought nicely written. Deep in its conviction, clear in its view and delivery.
Well done.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Very spiritual and heartfelt. I could feel how emotionally connected to this poem you are. I think you did a wonderful job and it is a nice piece to add to your collection.
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Very spiritual and heartfelt. I could feel how emotionally connected to this poem you are. I think you did a wonderful job and it is a nice piece to add to your collection.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2018
