God Omniscient Deeds
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Comment from Artasylum
Very nicely written... smooth, elegantly said... your presentation is so and spiritual without being intimidating Great job and I enjoy your arrangement of the phrases... they are loose and very nicely done. Yours, diana
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Very nicely written... smooth, elegantly said... your presentation is so and spiritual without being intimidating Great job and I enjoy your arrangement of the phrases... they are loose and very nicely done. Yours, diana
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A very encouraging, inspiring, and uplifting sentiment is shared with your poem and the words are beautiful. Your acrostic style works well for this. I like the beginning of O My God...it is lovely.
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A very encouraging, inspiring, and uplifting sentiment is shared with your poem and the words are beautiful. Your acrostic style works well for this. I like the beginning of O My God...it is lovely.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
You have chosen to adopt an archaic 'Prayer Book' style of address in this poem, which is appropriate considering the content. However if you do this beware of the grammatical traps the style inevitably sets and it is important to adapt your writing to the grammatical rules of the period.
'... to appreciate (Thou) *Thee* thru Thy Words ...' Thee is the correct accusative form. Merriam Webster gives 'thru' as a legitimate alternative spelling but, given the archaic style adopted 'through' would probably be more appropriate here.
'... a few of (Thy) *Thine* Infinite Words...'. Although 'thy' is the normally used possessive, when it immediately preceeds a vowel thine (in this case Thine) is the correct version like the indefininte article versions 'a' and 'an'.
'... changing (Thy) *Thine* Alpha Swords ...' As above.
'Your grand, gracious, good and ground words ...' I realise that you have changed styles from 'thy' toy 'Your' here to preserve the acrostic but that is not on. You really should not mix styles in the same work in this way.
Both the acrostic and the style coud be preserved with, 'Yet Thy grand, gracious ...'
I hope you find this helpful. I do not choose to comment on the content in this case.
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You have chosen to adopt an archaic 'Prayer Book' style of address in this poem, which is appropriate considering the content. However if you do this beware of the grammatical traps the style inevitably sets and it is important to adapt your writing to the grammatical rules of the period.
'... to appreciate (Thou) *Thee* thru Thy Words ...' Thee is the correct accusative form. Merriam Webster gives 'thru' as a legitimate alternative spelling but, given the archaic style adopted 'through' would probably be more appropriate here.
'... a few of (Thy) *Thine* Infinite Words...'. Although 'thy' is the normally used possessive, when it immediately preceeds a vowel thine (in this case Thine) is the correct version like the indefininte article versions 'a' and 'an'.
'... changing (Thy) *Thine* Alpha Swords ...' As above.
'Your grand, gracious, good and ground words ...' I realise that you have changed styles from 'thy' toy 'Your' here to preserve the acrostic but that is not on. You really should not mix styles in the same work in this way.
Both the acrostic and the style coud be preserved with, 'Yet Thy grand, gracious ...'
I hope you find this helpful. I do not choose to comment on the content in this case.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Kelly Hanna
A beautiful poem about being able to scribe the messages that God places in your heart. To listen and hear his words, you are blessed. This is so beautifully written, it sounds like I would hear this recited at my church. A very well written poem that pulls devotion and appreciation for God, from the reader. Great job on this piece!
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A beautiful poem about being able to scribe the messages that God places in your heart. To listen and hear his words, you are blessed. This is so beautifully written, it sounds like I would hear this recited at my church. A very well written poem that pulls devotion and appreciation for God, from the reader. Great job on this piece!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Aussie
If we live according to His words then we are honoring Him. The world walks in darkness because of the sin that covers man. When we put Him first in our lives, we seek peace and pursue it. Thank you for sharing your fervent views. Blessings, K.
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If we live according to His words then we are honoring Him. The world walks in darkness because of the sin that covers man. When we put Him first in our lives, we seek peace and pursue it. Thank you for sharing your fervent views. Blessings, K.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from Tim0443
Help if U can
Powermainia infuse power
To the miracal that everyone
Who is with me travel to our
New earth in total safety
By Mrs Janie Rotton and her
Family eating deer meat as
Much as possible (this is the story of) Johnny Rotton
That is a direct quote, from a sign, written by a crazy bum, which I saw and took a picture of. It makes as much sense as this poem which I give two stars, since it is indeed an acrostic.
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Help if U can
Powermainia infuse power
To the miracal that everyone
Who is with me travel to our
New earth in total safety
By Mrs Janie Rotton and her
Family eating deer meat as
Much as possible (this is the story of) Johnny Rotton
That is a direct quote, from a sign, written by a crazy bum, which I saw and took a picture of. It makes as much sense as this poem which I give two stars, since it is indeed an acrostic.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from kleck140
Your poem says it best. I would like to see the world
and other persons as you express in you poetry.
Such a profound message to all of the world to see.
Thanks for sharing.
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Your poem says it best. I would like to see the world
and other persons as you express in you poetry.
Such a profound message to all of the world to see.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
Comment from DonandVicki
Avery clever usage of the acrostic style. This reads almost like biblical rose. The archaic thee's and thou's seem to slow this reader down but maybe that's a good thing.
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Avery clever usage of the acrostic style. This reads almost like biblical rose. The archaic thee's and thou's seem to slow this reader down but maybe that's a good thing.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
Comment from Lady Jane
O(,) my God(,) I belong to your words
I find, I feel, I believe, I too, per Thy Will(,) belong to Thy Words
haha, almost punctuation free, LOL. I appreciate your penning. Your words are heartfelt and courageous. They provoke strong meaning and love for our Savior, Jesus Christ, and our father, God. I enjoy your style of writing. It's fresh and unique. Thanks so much for sharing. The image, the penning and content are all conveyed with conviction and purpose! Well done...
Janelle
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O(,) my God(,) I belong to your words
I find, I feel, I believe, I too, per Thy Will(,) belong to Thy Words
haha, almost punctuation free, LOL. I appreciate your penning. Your words are heartfelt and courageous. They provoke strong meaning and love for our Savior, Jesus Christ, and our father, God. I enjoy your style of writing. It's fresh and unique. Thanks so much for sharing. The image, the penning and content are all conveyed with conviction and purpose! Well done...
Janelle
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
Comment from Liberty Justice
Six stars 6******What powerful moving words with strong spiritual tone speaking of God's Wordscand His Will Towards Man. Very touching and commanding lyrics. Well done. Liberty justice
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Six stars 6******What powerful moving words with strong spiritual tone speaking of God's Wordscand His Will Towards Man. Very touching and commanding lyrics. Well done. Liberty justice
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
