A Bit Passed; Half
Philosophy, life, my Muse38 total reviews
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
This is a thought-provoking poem that I enjoyed very much! I particularly liked this stanza:
"With a subtle,
simple complexity,
some dangling dainties,
faintly laced with the idea
that it leaves you, the viewer
with something to think about-
Loose ends to weave, or
leave out still dangling,
tickling
the ends to a means"
I like the way you've varied the line lengths, I really like the part - "tickling the ends to a means" as it is so unexpected.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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This is a thought-provoking poem that I enjoyed very much! I particularly liked this stanza:
"With a subtle,
simple complexity,
some dangling dainties,
faintly laced with the idea
that it leaves you, the viewer
with something to think about-
Loose ends to weave, or
leave out still dangling,
tickling
the ends to a means"
I like the way you've varied the line lengths, I really like the part - "tickling the ends to a means" as it is so unexpected.
Thank you for sharing!
Susan
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Thank you Susan, your review was unexpected as my years of tickling n to am ID. When I write, sometimes poems about themselves and I'll just sit there and write other times off Pratt and edit and then almost throw away. However, if somebody I find out if the more I write the easier it gets. I appreciate your warm review, a pleasure and an honor to be riding with you here today.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from estory
I really loved the use of rhythm and alliteration to create this hip hop dance of poetry. You had these spurts of longer streams of language interspersed with short little flashes, and the consonants just kept beating like a drum through the whole thing. It was a great abstract tapestry of life, the light and the dark, the bright and the dull, the hopeful and despairing, the song and the silence. A little bit of the everything we have to celebrate in life everyday. estory
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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I really loved the use of rhythm and alliteration to create this hip hop dance of poetry. You had these spurts of longer streams of language interspersed with short little flashes, and the consonants just kept beating like a drum through the whole thing. It was a great abstract tapestry of life, the light and the dark, the bright and the dull, the hopeful and despairing, the song and the silence. A little bit of the everything we have to celebrate in life everyday. estory
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Hey East stories thanks so much for the six star review I really appreciate your comments and I like how you took my words and switch them around and added some words of your own to make your review as interesting as a bit past.
So please for your glowing review, pleasure and an honor to scribe with you here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
Comment from karenina
The think to like is this is unlike anything else. It is unabashedly uniquely you...and unapologetic about it! Every voice ebbs and flows...and it seems when we try to tie it up in a neat bow we lose the blurred edges that make it real as morning mist or a last cold breath...
There's a bit of a "rap" feeling to this (at least as I read it out loud--an experience I'd encourage all readers to immerse themselves in!)
You do you better than anyone else can!
That's where the magic lies....
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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The think to like is this is unlike anything else. It is unabashedly uniquely you...and unapologetic about it! Every voice ebbs and flows...and it seems when we try to tie it up in a neat bow we lose the blurred edges that make it real as morning mist or a last cold breath...
There's a bit of a "rap" feeling to this (at least as I read it out loud--an experience I'd encourage all readers to immerse themselves in!)
You do you better than anyone else can!
That's where the magic lies....
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Thanks Karenina, was feeling the beat of the rap myself while I was writing it.
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
I like how you pointed out the things that you identified with most.
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
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Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Bager, despite going round and round and saying the same thing time and time again; what you have said is true indeed. You are as Free a Spirit as I have ever had the chance to experience, in all of my many years on this planet.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Dear Bager, despite going round and round and saying the same thing time and time again; what you have said is true indeed. You are as Free a Spirit as I have ever had the chance to experience, in all of my many years on this planet.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
Comment from Lighthouse Keeper
There's so much that's pleasing about this piece; the alliteration, the ebb and flow of the words and structure dance about fluidly ... all helping to create an openness to new thoughts. I love this line:
"as I weave a writ,
a bit of worthy wit"
Nicely done. Very enjoyable.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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There's so much that's pleasing about this piece; the alliteration, the ebb and flow of the words and structure dance about fluidly ... all helping to create an openness to new thoughts. I love this line:
"as I weave a writ,
a bit of worthy wit"
Nicely done. Very enjoyable.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
Comment from AnnaLinda
Badger,
Loved reading your dangling, weaving and illumined poem...
I don't know how you sustain that train of poetic thought...
It seems the train lost its breaks...Wow!
Loved all the rhyme, alliteration and depth in this.
There were several parts that stood out to me -
most all of your poem...Here is one part I highlighted.
" Carbon-based
organic trace,
manic race,
in your face
~with a~
frantic pace!"
I'd have to agree with that.
Fantastic job!
Anna
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Badger,
Loved reading your dangling, weaving and illumined poem...
I don't know how you sustain that train of poetic thought...
It seems the train lost its breaks...Wow!
Loved all the rhyme, alliteration and depth in this.
There were several parts that stood out to me -
most all of your poem...Here is one part I highlighted.
" Carbon-based
organic trace,
manic race,
in your face
~with a~
frantic pace!"
I'd have to agree with that.
Fantastic job!
Anna
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
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Darren,
My pleasure.
Comment from 4theloveoftrees
This was an interesting poem. At first, it felt like rambling but as I continued to read, I was able to grasp some of the deeper meanings. The best poems are those that require a bit of thought. I enjoyed this "Complete; my purpose,/for I gained purchase/of a peculiar,/particular package/that was designed/specifically for me", as we are all unique with a unique purpose. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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This was an interesting poem. At first, it felt like rambling but as I continued to read, I was able to grasp some of the deeper meanings. The best poems are those that require a bit of thought. I enjoyed this "Complete; my purpose,/for I gained purchase/of a peculiar,/particular package/that was designed/specifically for me", as we are all unique with a unique purpose. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
Comment from Possummagic
Wow... that was a piece I've never seen the likes of before in its structure and deliverance. I was a bit confused at first but once I got into the swing of things I was able to take it all in. Yes, perhaps you deliberately withheld something or added subtly subliminally. Peace is such a small word for such a mammoth task. If we broke the concept down however it would be a fraction of our total behaviours. I loved this poem.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Wow... that was a piece I've never seen the likes of before in its structure and deliverance. I was a bit confused at first but once I got into the swing of things I was able to take it all in. Yes, perhaps you deliberately withheld something or added subtly subliminally. Peace is such a small word for such a mammoth task. If we broke the concept down however it would be a fraction of our total behaviours. I loved this poem.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
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Dear reader I found your review and lightning and as usual they let me know how my writing is coming across to the other readers and I think you put a subliminal message in your review so there! Thank you so much for the glowing $6 of you, I really appreciate it.
Blessings,
Brother Badger cull
Darren that's better
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You are very welcome. I?m always up for new ideas. I liked your style. Mx
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I won?t forget it in a hurry!
Comment from Sanku
Like incessant waves ,these staccato lines send out a very strong message for individuality .Even when you decide to chose ,it is a choice .I liked that very much yes,we will connect the dots in our own way
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Like incessant waves ,these staccato lines send out a very strong message for individuality .Even when you decide to chose ,it is a choice .I liked that very much yes,we will connect the dots in our own way
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like this one a lot especially the following: "I must write!
Even when I am wrong and right, left, and tight, liberal and useful and dull..."
I totally agree with you, whatever happens, I'll continue to write. It is impossible to please all. But I must write too.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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I like this one a lot especially the following: "I must write!
Even when I am wrong and right, left, and tight, liberal and useful and dull..."
I totally agree with you, whatever happens, I'll continue to write. It is impossible to please all. But I must write too.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
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Review notes
Thank you for your warm comments
A pleasure and an honor to write with you here
1 it's always nice to get a fresh perspective on my writing, I get so many interesting viewpoints And everybody has a very vital and valuable puzzle piece~
It's always intriguing to meet a new writer here, and to share reviews
I appreciate your perspective
Thanks to you review, I'm getting better at punctuation
Thank you for your review, it helps me to perceive how my writing is going to cross to not only the average reader, but to the many good writers there are here.
I'm glad you enjoyed my writing,
Blessings,
Brother Badger Cull
Darren
~ ? : - D ~
