Because My Skin Knows You
Just One Touch...10 total reviews
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I know that feeling very well when my skin is too tight. The image is very romantic and suits the Senryu well. I like how the flow is so smooth, and how you rhymed caress with stress.
Again, I did not see this on my page. Is there a reason that I am not getting notifications of your posts? Please, be honest with me.
Well written and romantic. Thanks for sharing your softer side.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I know that feeling very well when my skin is too tight. The image is very romantic and suits the Senryu well. I like how the flow is so smooth, and how you rhymed caress with stress.
Again, I did not see this on my page. Is there a reason that I am not getting notifications of your posts? Please, be honest with me.
Well written and romantic. Thanks for sharing your softer side.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Yeah -- anytime it's a contest entry that is 'blind', that is, that the contest voting booth does not show the author's name, then the website doesn't notify my followers. So, both of these were for contests yesterday afternoon; therefore, you didn't get notices for either of them. :( :( All my 'writes' go in my portfolio, though. :) :) All that being said, sir, I thank you for your wonderful review!! :) :) You'll actually get a notice sometime tomorrow evening when I finish up this poor-excuse for a loop poem....LOL!! :) :) Have a relaxing evening of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :) Yvette [I can actually sign my name since the contest is over] :)
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Hi Yvette
Now I understand! I haven't entered a contest. Yet, anyway. So I don't know the rules to when I can know who you are by your posts. I just noticed your poems with your name attached and wondered, that's all. I guess they don't tell you, when they add your name, to your contest posts. Thanks for explaining it to me.
Melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes sound like a wonderful time. Enjoy!
Take care, Jesse
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well composed senryu, Anonymous Poet.
The syllable count is a perfect 5-7-5, as stipulated in the contest rules.
It's a poem about love, which 90% of all original Japanese senryu were written about. That and the "human condition."
Excellence.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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This is a very well composed senryu, Anonymous Poet.
The syllable count is a perfect 5-7-5, as stipulated in the contest rules.
It's a poem about love, which 90% of all original Japanese senryu were written about. That and the "human condition."
Excellence.
Best of luck to you.
~Dean
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thanx, Dean -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I would say it was a moderate success. :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and have a good evening! :) :)
Comment from Kelly Grim
This is so nicely done! I love the description, the title, and the presentation! I love the phrase, "my skin is too tight" It's such an odd phrase but at the same time everyone can relate to it and we know what "familiar stress" is. Very well done! The picture is perfect!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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This is so nicely done! I love the description, the title, and the presentation! I love the phrase, "my skin is too tight" It's such an odd phrase but at the same time everyone can relate to it and we know what "familiar stress" is. Very well done! The picture is perfect!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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I am so glad this one captured your attention, Kelly -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I liked your words, they are soothing and honest, to touch someone and soothe their fears is quite a unique feeling, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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I liked your words, they are soothing and honest, to touch someone and soothe their fears is quite a unique feeling, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, Dolly -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from Boogienights
Wow..this is incredible. In only a few words you have created a sensual, sexy feeling. It kind of blew me AWAY..if this doesn't win I'd be surprised.!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Wow..this is incredible. In only a few words you have created a sensual, sexy feeling. It kind of blew me AWAY..if this doesn't win I'd be surprised.!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, Boogienights -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Senryu. We sometimes do get stressed too much and we need something or someone who are able to release the stress we find build up in all who we are.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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A very well-written Senryu. We sometimes do get stressed too much and we need something or someone who are able to release the stress we find build up in all who we are.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, Sandra -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from meeshu
very descriptive. it carries the message of a deep and lasting love. a physical love. poignant in three line Senyu form. good luck..
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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very descriptive. it carries the message of a deep and lasting love. a physical love. poignant in three line Senyu form. good luck..
Comment Written 22-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, Gary -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The familiarly of touch when the skin is too tight at the calming caress soothes the heart and arouses the sensation, a quite natural and scintillating moment displayed in words; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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The familiarly of touch when the skin is too tight at the calming caress soothes the heart and arouses the sensation, a quite natural and scintillating moment displayed in words; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, DR ALCREATOR -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent 5-7-5 senryu and entry for the contest
with excellent poetics, alliteration, rhyme and imagery,
and something many can relate to in this stressful world
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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This is an excellent 5-7-5 senryu and entry for the contest
with excellent poetics, alliteration, rhyme and imagery,
and something many can relate to in this stressful world
Nicely done
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2018
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Glad this one captured your attention, Robert -- trying to bring in the sensuality I wanted to the limited 5-7-5 was a bit of a challenge so, I am so very pleased that you seemed to enjoy it! :) :) Thanx for the quick read and review today, and may you have a relaxing weekend of melodic birdsong and cool grass between your toes! :) :)
Comment from ciliverde
Hi, I was thinking about this contest too, the deadline is coming up! In your senryu,
I like the first and third lines, but the middle line isn't as poetic as it could be. I'm thinking something like "soothes my aching spirit when..."
Just a thought. Good luck in the contest!
Carol
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Hi, I was thinking about this contest too, the deadline is coming up! In your senryu,
I like the first and third lines, but the middle line isn't as poetic as it could be. I'm thinking something like "soothes my aching spirit when..."
Just a thought. Good luck in the contest!
Carol
Comment Written 21-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Hey there, Carol! Thanx for the advice....didn't use that exact words but you were right about the feel so, I changed it a bit....appreciate your looking out for the most times overly analytical brain down here! ;) ;) Have a wonderful weekend! ;)