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In the Dark of Night

Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "In Darkened Shadows"
Poems and stories about urban legends.

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Comment from frogbook
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I love it-very suspenseful, edge of your seat writing with a fabulous ending line. Much enjoyed and cleverly worded. Seems like a winner to me.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
    Thank you. I am very grateful for the 5 star rating and the comments.
Comment from Artasylum
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Great job on this... I love your freeform and the flow it allows the words to have. So I would say I really like it... thanks so much and I'm trying another of your entries to read. yours, diana

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for the 5 star rating and the generous comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written hundred word horror poem when the dark night comes closer the shadows seem to get longer and darker. We need to reach our home before we are stuck in the dark.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
    Thank you. Appreciate the rating and your comments.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
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FM Wright, I think you have done a great job with making this poem a suspenseful and gripping short piece. It had a horror movie type feel to it.
Just a wee comment. The second to last sentence
- for they suddenly come to life -
I thought perhaps it would flow better as
- then they suddenly come to life - Just food for thought.

Thanks for this scary read before my bedtime. ~DD

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
    Good suggestion. Much appreciated, as are the stars. Will make the change.
Comment from Boogienights
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This is so creepy, it gave me chills. I was rooting for her to get safely inside(yeah right!). Never a happy ending in a horror short. A great contest entry, best of luck.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments and the rating.
reply by Boogienights on 18-Sep-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
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This one-hundred-word story, In Darkened Shadows, presented in rhyming couplets, falls into the limited text requirements and keeps us moving through the poetry trying to get home. Of course, that doesn't work out so well.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
    No, it doesn't. I do thank you for the rating and the comments. I really do appreciate them both.
Comment from Carlie Beth
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Wow absolutely chilling and creepy. I loved the diction and the color choices you made. Had me on my toes. I think you will do really really well in the contest! Good luck!!

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
    Thank you for the wonderful rating and the encouraging words. They are both appreciated.
Comment from Beck Fenton
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Nice job building the tension in this poem! And rhyming a poem dealing with horror is an even more dauntless success. And the victim finds she's hurried for naught!
Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
    Thank you. Both the rating and the comments are much appreciated.
Comment from ciliverde
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For most of this poem I thought she was afraid of human pursuers, and that would be quite a horror story indeed. Instead the shadows come to life just as she gets her key into the door. The 'soulless one who takes a wife' is indeed rather horrifying, although in a different way from the mortal ghouls.
Carol

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
    I wasn't quite sure how to end this. So that's how it came out. Thank you so much for the stars and the review. Both much appreciated.
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
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Author I love the Rhythm and rhyme of this poem and the setup made for Shadows to be revealed as the Sun is going down and this young lady is very watchful,looking both ways as she is trying to get into a protected place before it gets too dark. And sometime we can be frightened by our own Shadows, that is if you're very fearful. Good poem with a little Mysticism with nice storyline

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
    Thank you. Your rating and your comments mean a great deal.