A Knight's Revelation
That armor hides many secrets...18 total reviews
Comment from Shanbreen
I just came upon this by chance. Wow! You have really outdone yourself, Yevette. One word: Exquisite. Not only are you a brilliant physicist but you have such a wonderful creative sense. Really enjoyed this one.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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I just came upon this by chance. Wow! You have really outdone yourself, Yevette. One word: Exquisite. Not only are you a brilliant physicist but you have such a wonderful creative sense. Really enjoyed this one.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Oh, Shanbreen, you have just made my week -- thank you so very much for that wonderful review and for those remarkable, humbling stars! :) ;) It really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Sandra blair
What a hard assignment! 50 words? wow.
You did a great job. It's a very unique poem because of the nice turn at the end. Great imagery with the hair.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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What a hard assignment! 50 words? wow.
You did a great job. It's a very unique poem because of the nice turn at the end. Great imagery with the hair.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2018
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Thanx for stopping by for the read and review, Sandra! :) ;) It really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful weekend filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :)
Comment from janalma
Quite a contemporary theme here---girls outdoing the boys/men. Clever denouement, tho. Enjoyed reading it and it didn't take long. Lol.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Quite a contemporary theme here---girls outdoing the boys/men. Clever denouement, tho. Enjoyed reading it and it didn't take long. Lol.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Thanx for stopping by the read and review, Janalma -- always appreciate all the comments and input! :) :) And, as to your note, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :)
Comment from kathleenspalding
I love it! What a fun fifty word flash fiction that tells so much with so few words! Perfectly written, excellent choice of artwork. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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I love it! What a fun fifty word flash fiction that tells so much with so few words! Perfectly written, excellent choice of artwork. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanx for stopping by for the read and review, kathleen! :) ;) It really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :)
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I love it! Thanks, you have a good week too! You'd probably like Anne McAffery's Dragonriders of Pern books. I loved them 30+ yrs ago when they came out.
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They were okay...kinda lost interest after the first few...I really was more 'hard core' sci-fi like Clarke and Heinlein and Asimov. Of course, I grew up in a really small town with a really small library (where they knew me as a regular!!) so, the book selection was limited by, I'm sure, budgets and such. I love all of the wonderful fantasy and sci-fi writes now from the battle-hardened space troopers to the flighty dragons and cantankerous riders! :) :) Have a wonderful day! :) Yvette
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author read your 50 word flash ficiton
smiles to your last lines with a surprise ending the knight I take it was a woman
(good for her)
Gert
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Hello author read your 50 word flash ficiton
smiles to your last lines with a surprise ending the knight I take it was a woman
(good for her)
Gert
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanx for stopping by for the read and review, Gert! :) ;) You know, this really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :) Yvette [can sign now that the contest's through]
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You are so welcome Y. M. Roger
Gert
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I don't think in ten years I've ever given a six star rating to a 50-word piece of flash fiction. Impressive beginning--ESPECIALLY--and the ending gave way to profound thought. Can we separate a person from a quality, sometimes surprising ourselves?
I remember someone said something along the lines of...courage isn't fearless, it comes when a man is frightened, but does the right thing anyway.
Great entry.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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I don't think in ten years I've ever given a six star rating to a 50-word piece of flash fiction. Impressive beginning--ESPECIALLY--and the ending gave way to profound thought. Can we separate a person from a quality, sometimes surprising ourselves?
I remember someone said something along the lines of...courage isn't fearless, it comes when a man is frightened, but does the right thing anyway.
Great entry.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Oh, Spiritual Echo, you have just made my week -- thank you so very much for that wonderful review and for those remarkable, humbling stars! :) ;) Just the fact that you felt compelled to award them truly means a lot!! :) :) And, yes, I am glad you saw more to it than just the ink on the paper...there's always more in a write because why else would an author bother, yeah? :) :) Again, thanx for stopping by and may today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :) Yvette [can sign now that the contest's through]
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You should have been in the winner's circle--and I sat this because I read all of the ones that placed.
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I guess my name/style isn't well-known enough for that, but thank you so very much for that vote of confidence...it truly makes a big difference for me to hear, especially after your review!! :) :) Yvette
Comment from mackenzietastan
I like the twist at the end here! It was also a childhood dream of mine to be a knight! I also like how she already killed the dragon! Good luck with contest!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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I like the twist at the end here! It was also a childhood dream of mine to be a knight! I also like how she already killed the dragon! Good luck with contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Yeah, had to put the dragon head in there, Mackenzie -- the deed had to be proven done! :) ;) And this really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :) Yvette [can sign now that the contest's through]
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good job, Mystery Author, with your little fiction story. You gave readers much info in a small space. I wasn't expecting the ending. I did like it. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Good job, Mystery Author, with your little fiction story. You gave readers much info in a small space. I wasn't expecting the ending. I did like it. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thanx for stopping by for the read and review, Jan! :) ;) It really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :)
Comment from giraffmang
A woman's work is never done it seems here...
Good little piece
"A man's courage did not save our kingdom," armor-clad hands removed the helmet, "It was saved by me." - technically, the second piece of the dialogue here should start with a lower case. the previous piece of dialogue and speech tag are not closed off so it is continuing dialogue. Either that or close off the sentence following the tag.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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A woman's work is never done it seems here...
Good little piece
"A man's courage did not save our kingdom," armor-clad hands removed the helmet, "It was saved by me." - technically, the second piece of the dialogue here should start with a lower case. the previous piece of dialogue and speech tag are not closed off so it is continuing dialogue. Either that or close off the sentence following the tag.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thanx for the read and review -- I guess I had seen it as two independent clauses and, thus, the second part being a second sentence needed a capital letter. Shot down by dialogue rules once again. Thank you for taking the time, G. Blessings! :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's nice to know that even way back in medieval times anything a man could do a woman could do better.
The slain dragon must've been a male. Males of all species are distracted by a pretty face.
Had it been a female dragon with a nest of young to protect, the outcome might have been quite different.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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It's nice to know that even way back in medieval times anything a man could do a woman could do better.
The slain dragon must've been a male. Males of all species are distracted by a pretty face.
Had it been a female dragon with a nest of young to protect, the outcome might have been quite different.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Well, I certainly wouldn't go that far, Dean (LOL!) - but we do each have our strengths to employ when it comes to slaying life's dragons! :) ;) You know, really was a childhood fantasy of mine from the moment I read my first fantasy fiction works at the library!! :) :) And here's an older adult's true confession: I didn't ever enjoy the Cinderella and Snow White Disney stories...in my dreams, I was always the conquering hero - the knight that saves the kingdom, the fighter pilot that flies in and blows the ship....when Star Wars came out, I was in the X-wing that blew the Death Star!! :) :) So, here's to fun and making that fun fit into 50 words! :) ;) May today be the start of a wonderful week ahead of good health for you ... and may it be filled with more fantasies than your writer's fingers can keep up with!! :) :)
