Short Stories and Flash
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "State of Calif. Vs Mrs. Milquetoast"Misc Fiction
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Comment from Beck Fenton
When we all could roam where we wished! The 60's and 70's were truly the last of innocence for a county that would be ravaged by horrible soul-less people. The community helped raise the children and we have lost so much since then.
Your piece makes me sad, a little.
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When we all could roam where we wished! The 60's and 70's were truly the last of innocence for a county that would be ravaged by horrible soul-less people. The community helped raise the children and we have lost so much since then.
Your piece makes me sad, a little.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
Ah yes. I too left home in the a.m. as a child and returned at dusk. Unless, of course, ther3 was hide and seek breaking out. I imagine my folks had some idea where I was, though no one said anything.
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Ah yes. I too left home in the a.m. as a child and returned at dusk. Unless, of course, ther3 was hide and seek breaking out. I imagine my folks had some idea where I was, though no one said anything.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
Comment from janalma
Actually, she doesn't sound like such a milquetoast. Those were 'the good old days,' when it was reasonably safe for kids to be out and about. But, of course, there have always been bad actors who would hurt them. Anyway, liked this little story and it made me smile.
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Actually, she doesn't sound like such a milquetoast. Those were 'the good old days,' when it was reasonably safe for kids to be out and about. But, of course, there have always been bad actors who would hurt them. Anyway, liked this little story and it made me smile.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
Comment from poesyapprentice
I imagine you deserve a six for this. Sorry I can't oblige, but please accept my congratulations on your win. A very clever write! It IS so different these days, with all the constant violence on TV and "Amber Alerts" every day on our phones. I'm wondering if people have changed so much or if we are just more aware of the dangers. Very good piece.
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I imagine you deserve a six for this. Sorry I can't oblige, but please accept my congratulations on your win. A very clever write! It IS so different these days, with all the constant violence on TV and "Amber Alerts" every day on our phones. I'm wondering if people have changed so much or if we are just more aware of the dangers. Very good piece.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
Comment from jenintorre
Hi there Michael
Congratulations on winning the 50 word flash fiction contest. So well deserved. I think this story is absolutely brilliant Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Hi there Michael
Congratulations on winning the 50 word flash fiction contest. So well deserved. I think this story is absolutely brilliant Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Aww, thanks so much, Jen. I loved your Monopoly story. CLEVER. I didn't see it coming at all. Lots of great entries. We should prance around a little with our ribbons, yes? LOL! mike
Comment from kathleenspalding
Bwahaha! I love it! What a fun fifty word flash fiction that tells so much with so few words! Perfectly written, excellent choice of artwork. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Bwahaha! I love it! What a fun fifty word flash fiction that tells so much with so few words! Perfectly written, excellent choice of artwork. Well done! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I LOVED the ending of your flash fiction. Such a true account of the "good 'ole days." You used the dialogue in such an effective way in telling your flash fiction story. Good luck in the contest.
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I LOVED the ending of your flash fiction. Such a true account of the "good 'ole days." You used the dialogue in such an effective way in telling your flash fiction story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, times certainly have changed, Mystery Author. You did a good job with your little flash fiction story. It was fun to read and understand. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
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Yes, times certainly have changed, Mystery Author. You did a good job with your little flash fiction story. It was fun to read and understand. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
Comment from Spiritual Echo
A bent arc to another time. This takes a lot lot of creative licence, presuming a comparison to the future, but oh well, that's also what makes it funny or sad, depending on how much latitude the reader allows.
Your preferred font and colour always act as a signature, whether it's a blind contest or not. Another great example of how your talents continue to evolve.
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A bent arc to another time. This takes a lot lot of creative licence, presuming a comparison to the future, but oh well, that's also what makes it funny or sad, depending on how much latitude the reader allows.
Your preferred font and colour always act as a signature, whether it's a blind contest or not. Another great example of how your talents continue to evolve.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
Comment from hari anand
Time has changed. This brought smile to my face, back then it was much safer as life was simple. Now we have all the amenities plus complications.. Good luck.
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Time has changed. This brought smile to my face, back then it was much safer as life was simple. Now we have all the amenities plus complications.. Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018