Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Feast"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
7 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It is so true that predators work hard to get themselves in positions of respect & renown that they don't need to look for a place to tunnel into so as not to be recognized. Rather, they always hide in plain sight: "No one suspected him capable of such bizarre cruelties. After all, he was a pillar of society and one of Astatula's upstanding civic leaders." You've brought up a good point.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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It is so true that predators work hard to get themselves in positions of respect & renown that they don't need to look for a place to tunnel into so as not to be recognized. Rather, they always hide in plain sight: "No one suspected him capable of such bizarre cruelties. After all, he was a pillar of society and one of Astatula's upstanding civic leaders." You've brought up a good point.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022
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Appreciate your insights and the review.
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love it
Comment from judiverse
Shades of Hannibal Lector. You do a great job of describing the delicacies the Astatula Assassin was whipping up. I think you also have an excellent back story about what led to his psychopathic behavior. You also establish a connection with Miller, the principal of the Cody's school, as the Assassin feels he has a score to settle with him. Perceptive characterization of Cody when the principal confronts him about running in the corridor and past misdeeds. Cody knows that there are boundaries he has to observe when approached by an adult in authority. judi
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Shades of Hannibal Lector. You do a great job of describing the delicacies the Astatula Assassin was whipping up. I think you also have an excellent back story about what led to his psychopathic behavior. You also establish a connection with Miller, the principal of the Cody's school, as the Assassin feels he has a score to settle with him. Perceptive characterization of Cody when the principal confronts him about running in the corridor and past misdeeds. Cody knows that there are boundaries he has to observe when approached by an adult in authority. judi
Comment Written 20-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, I've always liked the story and nothing has changed. I s=didn't find any mistakes.I would stil like to find out to re-post something as new writing. You seem to know how. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Hi Brett, I've always liked the story and nothing has changed. I s=didn't find any mistakes.I would stil like to find out to re-post something as new writing. You seem to know how. Ulla:))
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Use a revive certificate. Does not repost as new writing, and, afterwards you can not revive the same posting again for two years. However, since this is the final revision before I publish the book, why not get some last minute feedback on the new revisions?
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True, thanks for letting me know.Normally it says it's revived but not in this case. Hmm. Ulla:))
Comment from Earl Corp
Hate to see Mr. Miller bite the dust, but if it has to be it has to be. I've read two other Cody stories but was unaware of the Astatula Assassin This looks like a good Halloween entry with a cannibal character.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Hate to see Mr. Miller bite the dust, but if it has to be it has to be. I've read two other Cody stories but was unaware of the Astatula Assassin This looks like a good Halloween entry with a cannibal character.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from KatyM
Wow, definitely detail in the account of the feast. Poor Tori. I do not have anything to add or take away. I need to read the first chapter so I can keep up with what is going on. So he is a pillar of the community but not the principal. Hmmm, I wonder who it could be?
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Wow, definitely detail in the account of the feast. Poor Tori. I do not have anything to add or take away. I need to read the first chapter so I can keep up with what is going on. So he is a pillar of the community but not the principal. Hmmm, I wonder who it could be?
Comment Written 17-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2018
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Thanks.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Well yuck. I don't see how feet could be good in anyway. They are so bony. Of course I have never eaten human so maybe they are really good. Interesting chapter. A real change from the original. Great job as always. Rox
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Well yuck. I don't see how feet could be good in anyway. They are so bony. Of course I have never eaten human so maybe they are really good. Interesting chapter. A real change from the original. Great job as always. Rox
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Appreciate the review and comments. If you read ahead you'll miss several changes in the storyline.
Comment from Ricky1024
this is Well written as usual rich and seem as well as imagery flowed well read well with no primer issues as well checking content in place value see we see see see see x exceptional here as usual with any of these Cody stories Andy cannibal thanks f thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024r
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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this is Well written as usual rich and seem as well as imagery flowed well read well with no primer issues as well checking content in place value see we see see see see x exceptional here as usual with any of these Cody stories Andy cannibal thanks f thanks for this doctor Ricky 1024r
Comment Written 15-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thanks. Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Appreciate the comments and the review.
