Silent Purpose
Which will it be for you today?24 total reviews
Comment from Anne B Francis
Gives food for thought and never looked at it that way - quietness when one is alone but so much going around in the mind which never seems still, and then there is uninterrupted silence where peace is comfortable and needed
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Gives food for thought and never looked at it that way - quietness when one is alone but so much going around in the mind which never seems still, and then there is uninterrupted silence where peace is comfortable and needed
Comment Written 16-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Anne - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful week of evenings spent of star gazing accompanied by soft melodies! :) :) Yvette
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I don't have a style just write what comes into my head
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me too, normally. Just that this contest had a very strict requirement on the style and format...:) :) :) :) So, I was stuck with rules...yuck! :) ;) Blessings!
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I liked it and can still see the girl on the swing, there is a calmness about it
Comment from Bill Schott
This septulet, Silent Purpose, has the right format and poses us in the reflective stance to both take in life's lessons or allow us to speak poison out of our souls.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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This septulet, Silent Purpose, has the right format and poses us in the reflective stance to both take in life's lessons or allow us to speak poison out of our souls.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Bill - your time to go in and so is much appreciated! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :) Yvette [can sign my name since the voting's over - LOL!]
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Yvette, pleasure to see you here today. Love this poem. The simplicity cannot hide the depth of it. Silence is an entity in its own right. Silence always speaks and always willing to listen. This is a gem of a poem. Hugh
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Yvette, pleasure to see you here today. Love this poem. The simplicity cannot hide the depth of it. Silence is an entity in its own right. Silence always speaks and always willing to listen. This is a gem of a poem. Hugh
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Wow, Hugh! :) Thank you so very much for your review - you have no idea how much your words paired with your rating mean today! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :) Yvette [can sign my name since the voting's over - LOL!]
Comment from BermyBye50
Y. M. Roger,
Thank you sharing this excellent example of a Septolet. This poetry form is unfamiliar as are many offered in the contests her on Fanstory. The use of silence as a theme for a Septolet is simply brilliant.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Y. M. Roger,
Thank you sharing this excellent example of a Septolet. This poetry form is unfamiliar as are many offered in the contests her on Fanstory. The use of silence as a theme for a Septolet is simply brilliant.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Eugene - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :) Yvette [can sign my name since the voting's over - LOL!]
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
I find your Septolet to be very soothing and creative. The form meets all the necessary technical requirements of the form.
If I were to make any suggestions, and I do so only out of kindness and experience, it would be to amend the second part as follows:
Sometimes,
it is there
simply to listen
to our thoughts
Now...why would I be so bold as to erase "And" from the first line and add "simply to the third line of that second stanza? Well, "And" is considered a "nothing word" by many. So...it is just a thought that you could - if desired - make your poem be more streamline:
Sometimes,
the silence
speaks...
Sometimes,
it is there
simply to listen
to our thoughts
Just a suggestion. Nothing more. I love the sentiment so beautifully expressed along with your chosen artwork.
Take Care,
diane
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Hello!
I find your Septolet to be very soothing and creative. The form meets all the necessary technical requirements of the form.
If I were to make any suggestions, and I do so only out of kindness and experience, it would be to amend the second part as follows:
Sometimes,
it is there
simply to listen
to our thoughts
Now...why would I be so bold as to erase "And" from the first line and add "simply to the third line of that second stanza? Well, "And" is considered a "nothing word" by many. So...it is just a thought that you could - if desired - make your poem be more streamline:
Sometimes,
the silence
speaks...
Sometimes,
it is there
simply to listen
to our thoughts
Just a suggestion. Nothing more. I love the sentiment so beautifully expressed along with your chosen artwork.
Take Care,
diane
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review and your comments, diane - your time doing so is very much appreciated! :) ;) Don't think I'll go in and fix it now - voting's over, but I will be sure to remember that about the word 'and' in the future -- had never though about it that way, I guess. :) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :) Yvette [can sign my name since the voting's over - LOL!]
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Hi Yvette,
I always question whether or not to ever make any suggestions...especially for a contest entry...especially when I have also entered the contest. Seems a bit arrogant and "off" to me. I just hope you took my little suggestion in the spirit it was given.
Enjoy the weekend!
diane
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Not at all, diane -- I welcome comments and suggestions always...especially those offered in the manner you did so, no worries, ma'am!! :) ;) I seriously meant that the next time I'm working on something, I will definitely take that into consideration especially on those limited formats where words are a premium 'cuz there are so few of them - lol!! :) ;) Thanx bunches!! :) :)
Comment from Marie Werner
I love this poem.
I love the visual orientation of the words - all of the s's and t's look beautiful on the page.
I love the brevity of the language - simple words to convey a complex idea.
I might have done it without the commas, but it works fine with them too. :)
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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I love this poem.
I love the visual orientation of the words - all of the s's and t's look beautiful on the page.
I love the brevity of the language - simple words to convey a complex idea.
I might have done it without the commas, but it works fine with them too. :)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2018
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Wow, Marie! :) Thank you so very much for your review - you have no idea how much your words paired with your rating mean today! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :) Yvette [can sign my name since the voting's over - LOL!]
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the mood you established with the artwork and your reflections about the effects of "silence". Your alliteration of "s's" and use of personification are effective. Best wishes in the Septolet Contest- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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I admired the mood you established with the artwork and your reflections about the effects of "silence". Your alliteration of "s's" and use of personification are effective. Best wishes in the Septolet Contest- Joan
Comment Written 14-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Joan - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful weekend of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :)
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I am glad you were inspired by the prompt and the form and shared the splendid result. Have a joyful weekend as well- Joan
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Excellent presentation. The artwork fits the ideas laid down in the piece. I love the solitary chair. Using the black letters with a white background adds to the nuance of the Septolet Poem. The choice of words is thoughtful and thought-provoking. This is a very wise saying. It sounds like a quote from some distant sage, but I know you made it up, which makes it all the more special. Sometimes silence speaks and other times it listens. So simple and yet, so true. Thank you for sharing these thoughts with me.
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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Excellent presentation. The artwork fits the ideas laid down in the piece. I love the solitary chair. Using the black letters with a white background adds to the nuance of the Septolet Poem. The choice of words is thoughtful and thought-provoking. This is a very wise saying. It sounds like a quote from some distant sage, but I know you made it up, which makes it all the more special. Sometimes silence speaks and other times it listens. So simple and yet, so true. Thank you for sharing these thoughts with me.
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Jesse - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful weekend of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :)
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I think you did a wonderful job with the style of poetry. This was very insightful. I can see how it whispered to you as you were thinking of something totally different. I am playing my collection of The Beatles music on my stereo this morning. It may not all be soft melodies, but it brings back memories of when I was growing up in the late sixties. You have an eventful weekend, too.
Take care, Jesse
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Enjoy the Beatles, sir -- great relaxation!! :) :)
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Thanks. I will. They were a big influence on my life. I hope you find some relaxation, too.
Jesse
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good job, Mystery Author, with your contest poem. Your words are correct by number. Your topic is well defined and thought-provoking. I like the picture paired with your meaningful words. thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Good job, Mystery Author, with your contest poem. Your words are correct by number. Your topic is well defined and thought-provoking. I like the picture paired with your meaningful words. thanks for sharing. Best wishes. Jan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, Jan - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :)
Comment from June Sargent
Very profound thoughts expressed in just 14 words. Silence can be deafening at times, or soothing. Perfect artwork to match the sentiments. Well done.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Very profound thoughts expressed in just 14 words. Silence can be deafening at times, or soothing. Perfect artwork to match the sentiments. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2018
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Thank you for your review, June - your time doing so is much appreciated! :) ;) I am so very glad that you enjoyed this write -- it was one that kinda whispered to me when I was focused on writing about totally different subjects!! :) ;) I guess these unfamiliar styles are hit and miss, but from the description and example they gave, this was what I got out of it...:) Thanx again for stopping by and have a wonderful evening of star gazing and soft melodies! :) :)
