FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "One - two - Believe Me It's true.""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
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Comment from Kelly Grim
I like that you appear to have used real life as your inspiration for this! (I know, we don't have two moons, lol) And that water reflects everything and creates copies of things is such a lovely idea. I think its interesting that you chose to write this in couplets instead of quatrains, especially since your writing with a rhyme scheme of abcb. I think to write all in spoken word as indicated by the quotation marks is interesting too. Nice work!
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I like that you appear to have used real life as your inspiration for this! (I know, we don't have two moons, lol) And that water reflects everything and creates copies of things is such a lovely idea. I think its interesting that you chose to write this in couplets instead of quatrains, especially since your writing with a rhyme scheme of abcb. I think to write all in spoken word as indicated by the quotation marks is interesting too. Nice work!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
Rhonnie that was a cute a way of putting a little imagery in this piece. Because if you do look at the moon as a reflex in the water there would be too because it's a perfect reflection thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Rhonnie that was a cute a way of putting a little imagery in this piece. Because if you do look at the moon as a reflex in the water there would be too because it's a perfect reflection thank you for sharing
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Mary. As a children's writer, I listen to what our children say. Here, I'm just sharing, God bless you. Cordially: rhpnnie69.
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Likewise Rhonnie👍