What Not to Be
Watching My Dad19 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a very sad tale and such events affect children into their adult years and can thwart happy futures for them. If parents are fighting like this it is better that they part as witnessing this everyday is unhealthy for the kids, a poignant and profound write, sweetly told with haunting results, love Dolly x
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This is a very sad tale and such events affect children into their adult years and can thwart happy futures for them. If parents are fighting like this it is better that they part as witnessing this everyday is unhealthy for the kids, a poignant and profound write, sweetly told with haunting results, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from meeshu
sad indeed, this is not just sad. it gut-wrenching, having to comfort a child who is going through something like this is painful..
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sad indeed, this is not just sad. it gut-wrenching, having to comfort a child who is going through something like this is painful..
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Mary Rhoat
This was a beautiful sad poem, with a good dose of reality. I could see this being very helpful to a child with a difficult family. I like how it was written from the child's perspective with the wisdom of a mature adult at the end. There is a very nice rhyme and rhythm to it as well.
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This was a beautiful sad poem, with a good dose of reality. I could see this being very helpful to a child with a difficult family. I like how it was written from the child's perspective with the wisdom of a mature adult at the end. There is a very nice rhyme and rhythm to it as well.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from jenintorre
This is a wonderful poem. But I am not sure that it fits the contest category as I don't think it is suitable for children to read. Good luck and Best wishes. Jen.
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This is a wonderful poem. But I am not sure that it fits the contest category as I don't think it is suitable for children to read. Good luck and Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Excellent story in a poem and written in good metre and fine rhyme. You perfectly captured the innocent questioning of a child from a dysfunctional home who knows what is going on, but no idea why.
A fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck in the booth.
Gloria
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Excellent story in a poem and written in good metre and fine rhyme. You perfectly captured the innocent questioning of a child from a dysfunctional home who knows what is going on, but no idea why.
A fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck in the booth.
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Sep-2018
Comment from Ann Marie Anglin
This has a wonderful message for children. If they understand that what happens between their parents is wrong, then the pattern can be broken. Well done. All the best, Ann Marie
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This has a wonderful message for children. If they understand that what happens between their parents is wrong, then the pattern can be broken. Well done. All the best, Ann Marie
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
Comment from Mark Valentine
The last lines of the stanzas say it all "That's just not OK", "and I just can't forgive", etc. All children deserved to be loved and deserve parents who will set good examples, and it's not OK when that doesn't happen. The brother-sister relationship in your poem and great photo remind me of "The Prince of Tides" - did you ever read that?
This is a wonderful commentary on a sad and all-too-common dynamic - I hope it wins.
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The last lines of the stanzas say it all "That's just not OK", "and I just can't forgive", etc. All children deserved to be loved and deserve parents who will set good examples, and it's not OK when that doesn't happen. The brother-sister relationship in your poem and great photo remind me of "The Prince of Tides" - did you ever read that?
This is a wonderful commentary on a sad and all-too-common dynamic - I hope it wins.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is both touching and tragic. Children always have to pay the price for their parent's ignorance. Hopefully, they will keep their promise and grow up to be better parents than her own were.
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This is both touching and tragic. Children always have to pay the price for their parent's ignorance. Hopefully, they will keep their promise and grow up to be better parents than her own were.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
This was deep
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
Oh how I can relate to your every word This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
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Wow!
This was deep
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
Oh how I can relate to your every word This is what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
Comment from kahpot
Yes an excellent sad tale though one filled with hope that the children do and can learn from their elders(parents) mistakes, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Yes an excellent sad tale though one filled with hope that the children do and can learn from their elders(parents) mistakes, very well written and best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Sep-2018
