The Secret of Happiness!
A 15 Word Poem; Give, but expect nothing in return132 total reviews
Comment from William Ross
very good on this 15 word entry and such true meaning, never give and expect something in return, give because you want to, works well, good luck and have a great day.
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very good on this 15 word entry and such true meaning, never give and expect something in return, give because you want to, works well, good luck and have a great day.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Boogienights
I thought about entering this contest but thought it might be too hard. You made it look easy and did an excellent job. I also agree with the sentiment. Best wishes in the contest. :)
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I thought about entering this contest but thought it might be too hard. You made it look easy and did an excellent job. I also agree with the sentiment. Best wishes in the contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
A beautiful sentiment in just 15 words, and one that is powerful and true. There is no greater gift than giving to someone else, whether this be love, your time, a listening ear or just care and support when it is needed, and then to expect nothing in return. This is true happiness and human kindness. I care for disabled adults on a daily basis- this is my job. And certainly I receive something from this because I have to live so I get paid but the truth is that if I were rich I would still want to do it for the satisfaction I feel knowing I've helped people to live the life they choose and empowering them. So your poem resonated with me. Good luck for the contest.
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A beautiful sentiment in just 15 words, and one that is powerful and true. There is no greater gift than giving to someone else, whether this be love, your time, a listening ear or just care and support when it is needed, and then to expect nothing in return. This is true happiness and human kindness. I care for disabled adults on a daily basis- this is my job. And certainly I receive something from this because I have to live so I get paid but the truth is that if I were rich I would still want to do it for the satisfaction I feel knowing I've helped people to live the life they choose and empowering them. So your poem resonated with me. Good luck for the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Shanbreen
Great advise from a seer. There is always the "art" of giving. There is an old saying that true giving is what one hand does but the other hand does not know. In other words, do not do it to win kudos from friends and neighbors.
Best for the contest.
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Great advise from a seer. There is always the "art" of giving. There is an old saying that true giving is what one hand does but the other hand does not know. In other words, do not do it to win kudos from friends and neighbors.
Best for the contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. I love the message in the poem and the use of the two prompt words doesn't sound forced at all. One observation, since it is not an acrostic format, I might have put the first line as "Always give more". Hugh
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Excellent. I love the message in the poem and the use of the two prompt words doesn't sound forced at all. One observation, since it is not an acrostic format, I might have put the first line as "Always give more". Hugh
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from TPAC
Thoughts spoken by a warm heart, striking views capturing emotions I found pleasing to read.
Suggest:
Give always caring,
Just my opinion of this particular write.
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Thoughts spoken by a warm heart, striking views capturing emotions I found pleasing to read.
Suggest:
Give always caring,
Just my opinion of this particular write.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from victor 66
My gosh, what a world this would be if everyone followed your Seer's advice. Your poem falls into the philosophy of, "A wise man needs little". This is a good message and I wish you luck in this contest.
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My gosh, what a world this would be if everyone followed your Seer's advice. Your poem falls into the philosophy of, "A wise man needs little". This is a good message and I wish you luck in this contest.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written fifteen word and twenty five syllable poem revealing the secret of happiness, it comes from within us and the more we give it to others the more it comes from within us.
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A very well-written fifteen word and twenty five syllable poem revealing the secret of happiness, it comes from within us and the more we give it to others the more it comes from within us.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well this one's a new one on me, but you got all the criteria in there, the wordage and silly bulls.
If only it were true, though. lol
Nice job
GMG
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Hi there,
Well this one's a new one on me, but you got all the criteria in there, the wordage and silly bulls.
If only it were true, though. lol
Nice job
GMG
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
I am so pleased to see new challenges and this is a good one as two words, one common and one rare have also to be included. Since this requires a word total rather than a syllabic total I am unsure as to why all those syllabis are noted in the note. This little poetic statement complies with everything in a delightful way.
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I am so pleased to see new challenges and this is a good one as two words, one common and one rare have also to be included. Since this requires a word total rather than a syllabic total I am unsure as to why all those syllabis are noted in the note. This little poetic statement complies with everything in a delightful way.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
