FAMILY TIES.
Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "Labor Day.""ALL IN THE FAMILY."
61 total reviews
Comment from Aussie
Congratulations on All Time Best! I loved your Labor Day converstions with hubby. I thought it very clever, funny and had a real message. I would leave home if my partner was retired as well.
Best wishes XXK.
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Congratulations on All Time Best! I loved your Labor Day converstions with hubby. I thought it very clever, funny and had a real message. I would leave home if my partner was retired as well.
Best wishes XXK.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Ogden
Good interplay in this humorous Labor Day poem, Rhonnie.
I have one suggestion, I believe the wife's last line, "I'm RE-tired?" should be shown as, "I'M retired?" instead.
Cheers,
Don
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Good interplay in this humorous Labor Day poem, Rhonnie.
I have one suggestion, I believe the wife's last line, "I'm RE-tired?" should be shown as, "I'M retired?" instead.
Cheers,
Don
Comment Written 06-Sep-2018
Comment from Craigitar
Very humorous! Strictly or mostly dialogue is probably my favorite thing to write, so I appreciate when someone else can do it with a bit of funny banter--you've done that with this piece. Good job, and I like that it ties in with Labor Day.
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Very humorous! Strictly or mostly dialogue is probably my favorite thing to write, so I appreciate when someone else can do it with a bit of funny banter--you've done that with this piece. Good job, and I like that it ties in with Labor Day.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I love your sense of humor. This was very unique and clever! The use of the dialog was so effective. The back and forth banter made me smile. Such a joy to read.
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I love your sense of humor. This was very unique and clever! The use of the dialog was so effective. The back and forth banter made me smile. Such a joy to read.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
Comment from Zue65
That is a satire with a humorous twist and the author did an excellent job penning this amazing poem. Ha,ha, ha, hubbies cannot live without a sumptuous dinner in the end. To have that, they have to work of course. What a funny way to remind our hubbies if they want to retire, we wives, need to retire too, from housework.
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That is a satire with a humorous twist and the author did an excellent job penning this amazing poem. Ha,ha, ha, hubbies cannot live without a sumptuous dinner in the end. To have that, they have to work of course. What a funny way to remind our hubbies if they want to retire, we wives, need to retire too, from housework.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Very cute. The old adage that the way to a man's heart is through his stomach certainly applies here! Lol. Also, studies seem to indicate that those who retire and continue to be involved with something, seem to live longer, happier lives. Excellent. Hugh
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Very cute. The old adage that the way to a man's heart is through his stomach certainly applies here! Lol. Also, studies seem to indicate that those who retire and continue to be involved with something, seem to live longer, happier lives. Excellent. Hugh
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
Comment from LeftHandedScribe
Your play on words is very clever and used with great skill. I like the journey your character takes from sedentary fool to a man opening up a new chapter to try again.
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Your play on words is very clever and used with great skill. I like the journey your character takes from sedentary fool to a man opening up a new chapter to try again.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
Comment from Terry wrote
I like the word play with the pronouns ... and the relaxed setting the two are sharing. I see no errors to offer corrections for, and enjoyed reading this simple little exchange. Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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I like the word play with the pronouns ... and the relaxed setting the two are sharing. I see no errors to offer corrections for, and enjoyed reading this simple little exchange. Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Terry: I work hard to entertain my readers in a delightful and fun way. Here you have recognized that. God bless you. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Very entertaining, amusing, funny poem. The short lines of dialogue give a sense of the intimacy of a couple who know how to converse with each other.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Very entertaining, amusing, funny poem. The short lines of dialogue give a sense of the intimacy of a couple who know how to converse with each other.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Donka: I'm glad that you were amused by my poem here. I was hoping that it would amuse my readers. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment from Sanku
Beautiful. Fantastic.
i loved it
The voices sounded very familiar especially the 'what's for dinner?' bit
tired, re-tired i liked that
Humour subtle and spontaneous was fine.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Beautiful. Fantastic.
i loved it
The voices sounded very familiar especially the 'what's for dinner?' bit
tired, re-tired i liked that
Humour subtle and spontaneous was fine.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Sanku: You have made me feel good about my endeavor here. People like it. That's what I was hoping for. God bless you, Sanku. Cordially: rhonnie69.