My love/hate relationship (haibun)
Fall plays me like a yo yo.17 total reviews
Comment from royowen
An excellent haibun my friend, there's that period between night and day, call ed twig height, the that time between, winter and summer, were its niether on thing or the other. A beautiful fully written hain, excellent laguage, and a clever haiku, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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An excellent haibun my friend, there's that period between night and day, call ed twig height, the that time between, winter and summer, were its niether on thing or the other. A beautiful fully written hain, excellent laguage, and a clever haiku, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the awedome review. I really am super sensitive to the onset of both Fall and Winter. In different ways.
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Well done
Comment from Irish Rain
Wow...the haiku within this haibun is awesome. I love all of it. I am the dead sea of summer, ha ha...and I only come alive with autumn and winter. Go figure. Loved this!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Wow...the haiku within this haibun is awesome. I love all of it. I am the dead sea of summer, ha ha...and I only come alive with autumn and winter. Go figure. Loved this!
Blessings...
Comment Written 31-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Ha ha
The onset of fall and winter really affects me in two entirelly different ways. Thanks for the great review
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You're most welcome!!
Comment from victor 66
I really enjoyed your poem, especially the last three lines: smooth sailing
without a few waves
leads to dead sea.
Those words impressed me a great deal. I wish you well.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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I really enjoyed your poem, especially the last three lines: smooth sailing
without a few waves
leads to dead sea.
Those words impressed me a great deal. I wish you well.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the great review
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You are most welcome, Dallas.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have the same apprehension of the coming season when autumn takes a hold and everything changes, your words are poignant and honest, best wishes, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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I have the same apprehension of the coming season when autumn takes a hold and everything changes, your words are poignant and honest, best wishes, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Thanks
Glad i'm not the only one. Then when it starts going into winter, untill it takes hold, I literally feel like I am fading. I become very tired and pale. It is really weird. Does'nt last but a few weeks but happens evey year. Am just wondering if maybe Some allergies come into play.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"My love/hate relationship (haibun), is quite a well-written, but more than a little depressing piece. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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"My love/hate relationship (haibun), is quite a well-written, but more than a little depressing piece. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2018
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Thanks for reviewing. Just wondering if there were technical errors thst required fixing since you gave it a three?
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Dallos01, there were no technical errors that I could see.
Kind regards and God bless you
the Duchess
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your haibun, Dallas. You did aa good job with its style. I like the 2 parts broken up by the lines of the poem. Your poem sums up your words nicely. One of my favorite lines form them prose is the one with the 'curling' leaves. I love Fall and have never thought of how your well-chosen words fit with your thoughts. I know you don't mean to apply those words to all, but they make sense in the long run. We have more hot weather ahead. Thanks for haring. Jan
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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I enjoyed your haibun, Dallas. You did aa good job with its style. I like the 2 parts broken up by the lines of the poem. Your poem sums up your words nicely. One of my favorite lines form them prose is the one with the 'curling' leaves. I love Fall and have never thought of how your well-chosen words fit with your thoughts. I know you don't mean to apply those words to all, but they make sense in the long run. We have more hot weather ahead. Thanks for haring. Jan
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Thanks for great review. I am super sensitive to season changes. Especially Fall and Winter.
Comment from Halfree
I read this four times and still can not connect. I have read your posting before today and found them interesting and thought provoking. This one seems to be overwritten; terms such as "solar Plexus, depths of vulnerability,symbiotic" are used to evoke something,what I am not sure. As I said, I have enjoyed reading your posting, this one left me... well... asking what?
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reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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I read this four times and still can not connect. I have read your posting before today and found them interesting and thought provoking. This one seems to be overwritten; terms such as "solar Plexus, depths of vulnerability,symbiotic" are used to evoke something,what I am not sure. As I said, I have enjoyed reading your posting, this one left me... well... asking what?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Sorry, it was confusing. I am super sensitive to seasonal changes. Especially Fall and Winter. This is a Haibun form prose snd haiku combination. I really love the beauty but it brings out so many emotions that seem to lie dormant the rest of the year that I actually feel like I am wearing my nerves on the on the surface of my being. It is a great contrast. Those are the feelings I was attempting to convey. Thanks for reading.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haibun. When autumn comes we are excited about the colorful array of leaves that are falling from the trees until they are bare, then we know it is the bearer of bad news, winter is on its way.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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A very well-written haibun. When autumn comes we are excited about the colorful array of leaves that are falling from the trees until they are bare, then we know it is the bearer of bad news, winter is on its way.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is illegible, excused once more this time, this speaks how you have been combating unfavourable environment, being confident and hopeful for an achievement; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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This is illegible, excused once more this time, this speaks how you have been combating unfavourable environment, being confident and hopeful for an achievement; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from angel123
I found your poem to be very interesting. It held my attention and it flows well with deep thought and emotion. I find beauty in every season. All Seasons have something special to offer humanity. I really like your third stanza and your artwork choice. Try being your most creative within the Season you enjoy the least. That might help. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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I found your poem to be very interesting. It held my attention and it flows well with deep thought and emotion. I find beauty in every season. All Seasons have something special to offer humanity. I really like your third stanza and your artwork choice. Try being your most creative within the Season you enjoy the least. That might help. Best wishes!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Thanks for the kind review. I will think about that. And thanks for the bonus star.
